Pee Yew Skunk Funk
A welcome home celebration curls noses.8 total reviews
Comment from schatzling
How funny....cute....love it... I enjoyed reading what you have written.
Thanks for choosing my pencil drawing to accompany your writing. They go absolutely perfectly together.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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How funny....cute....love it... I enjoyed reading what you have written.
Thanks for choosing my pencil drawing to accompany your writing. They go absolutely perfectly together.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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Thank you. Schatzling.
Comment from Cindy Warren
That's funny. I take it they don't have skunks in Syria. They probably tried to chase it away and pissed it off. What a way to get an education! I always give Mr. Skunk whatever he wants and he'll leave when he's full, usually. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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That's funny. I take it they don't have skunks in Syria. They probably tried to chase it away and pissed it off. What a way to get an education! I always give Mr. Skunk whatever he wants and he'll leave when he's full, usually. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Many thanks, Cindy.
Comment from Poetic Friend
In its brevity, you told a story of an uneventful family event. Fortunately, I never encountered a skunk, but I can only imagine the smell.
The lack of punctuation works well for a such a short poem. I did savor the moment.
Good luck in the contest. Have a great weekend.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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In its brevity, you told a story of an uneventful family event. Fortunately, I never encountered a skunk, but I can only imagine the smell.
The lack of punctuation works well for a such a short poem. I did savor the moment.
Good luck in the contest. Have a great weekend.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Thank you and for the stars. Poetic Friend.
Comment from Heidi M
Great four line poem describing interaction with a skunk. That's funny that they called the fire department. All they needed was a tomato juice bath! Good job following the required syllable count for this contest entry.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Great four line poem describing interaction with a skunk. That's funny that they called the fire department. All they needed was a tomato juice bath! Good job following the required syllable count for this contest entry.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Hi Heidi, that's what I was thinking. Culture and know how is different. Thanks
for the stars.
Comment from DonandVicki
I guess that you have proven that ants arn't the only thing that can ruin a family outing. A very interesting poem that opens the imagination.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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I guess that you have proven that ants arn't the only thing that can ruin a family outing. A very interesting poem that opens the imagination.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Yes Donand it did give my mind an exercise since there was a lot more to
write about in more than four lines. Thanks for the stars.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
I enjoyed this poem strikes an inner fateful pathetic feeling and emotion about the fate and state stand of nasty (in human sentiment for appreciation) filial living of animals, well flown, brief but strong visual imagery.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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I enjoyed this poem strikes an inner fateful pathetic feeling and emotion about the fate and state stand of nasty (in human sentiment for appreciation) filial living of animals, well flown, brief but strong visual imagery.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Thank you for your refreshing comments and for your stars.
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed the concept of your poem. Unfortunately the ruling is 1-5-5-9 syllables and in line three you only have four syllables. You may wish to review this.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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I enjoyed the concept of your poem. Unfortunately the ruling is 1-5-5-9 syllables and in line three you only have four syllables. You may wish to review this.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Hi in the Webster's dictionary (family has 3 syllables) make line 3 five syllables. I hope this will help.
Thanks, Marybell1. Thanks.
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I stand corrected. So I have given you five stars. Sorry I couldn't remember what I gave you before. You deserve five. Where I come from we say fam-ly. though there is a song
"We Are Fam-i-ly" so thank you for pointing that out. My intention was not to criticize. (Thank you also by pointing it out in a nice way.)
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
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I thank you. It made me take another look to make sure. Thanks Marybell1for the stars.
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
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That's okay. Thanks.
Comment from Dean Kuch
I'm not "feeling this", Lynar.
Grammatically, it makes little sense the way it's written.
I realize the word "skunk" can be used as a singular or plural noun. But what on earth does a firetruck have to do with the acrid stench sprayed by a skunk?
I apologize as I rarely give anything less than a five.
But this, if you'll pardon the pun, really "stin..." Well, you know...
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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I'm not "feeling this", Lynar.
Grammatically, it makes little sense the way it's written.
I realize the word "skunk" can be used as a singular or plural noun. But what on earth does a firetruck have to do with the acrid stench sprayed by a skunk?
I apologize as I rarely give anything less than a five.
But this, if you'll pardon the pun, really "stin..." Well, you know...
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Hi Dean what happen was to lengthy for me to put in four lines. The neighbors are from a different culture. Syria. They never before had an encounter with a skunk or what to do. Scene was a celebration homecoming. They didn't know what the smell was all about or who to call. They called the fire department for the acrid odor. I know that the fire dept are the wrong guys but that is what they did and I wrote this short 4 line poem. I hope this explains my writing for this piece that I witnessed. It was really funny. I hope you would reconsider my rate. Thanks.
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Consider it "reconsidered", Lynar...
~Dean
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Thank You, Dean.
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No worries...
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Drop by my portfolio and feel free to read and award me a three-star rating anytime.
Enjoy your weekend.
~Dean :)