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Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "My beautiful Cahore"Words to pass on to my children
37 total reviews
Comment from Lu Saluna
I thank you for reviewing my poem. I wanted to see yours as well. Congratulations on winning second place. Your free verse is very lovely. Cahore sounds like a lovely place.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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I thank you for reviewing my poem. I wanted to see yours as well. Congratulations on winning second place. Your free verse is very lovely. Cahore sounds like a lovely place.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Thanks Lu for the congrats and the review and comments. Mary
Comment from dragonpoet
The words bring up vivid images of watching the sea from a bluff on the coast of Ireland. At least that's what I see, even though I have only seen pictures of Ireland.
I like the metaphor of waves as horses.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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The words bring up vivid images of watching the sea from a bluff on the coast of Ireland. At least that's what I see, even though I have only seen pictures of Ireland.
I like the metaphor of waves as horses.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Thanks for the excellent review and great comments, I appreciate it, I am thrilled I came second with it. Mary
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You're welcome, Mary.
Joan
Comment from Poetic Friend
Your well-written words painted such a stunning scenery of this place. Your poem makes the village so inviting, so tranquil. I can see why you love the place.
How often do you visit?
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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Your well-written words painted such a stunning scenery of this place. Your poem makes the village so inviting, so tranquil. I can see why you love the place.
How often do you visit?
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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Hi
I recently paid a visit to Cahore, It brought back happy and sad memories. Many friends have passed away. Th e happy times I spent there is part of who I am now. Mary
Comment from RGstar
So beautiful descriptive, Mary. Sorry, missed this early, so much going on, so glad I had a six left. It is a lovely write. Extraordinary imagery with good words chosen in finding its path.
Bravo.
Good luck with this.
Best wishes.
RG
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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So beautiful descriptive, Mary. Sorry, missed this early, so much going on, so glad I had a six left. It is a lovely write. Extraordinary imagery with good words chosen in finding its path.
Bravo.
Good luck with this.
Best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 20-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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Hi RG I hope things are Ok with you. I appreciate the six stars for my poem and I am happy you enjoyed it, Mary
Comment from Donya Quijote
Vivid imagery and strong sentimentality make this poem a worthy read. Your pride in your country and this quaint little village shine in your poem. On reading it, I know why I so desperately want to go to Ireland. A bucket list wish for now... Good luck in the contest..
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Vivid imagery and strong sentimentality make this poem a worthy read. Your pride in your country and this quaint little village shine in your poem. On reading it, I know why I so desperately want to go to Ireland. A bucket list wish for now... Good luck in the contest..
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Hi,
I really appreciate your excellent review and great comments, I do hope you get to Ireland one day. Mary
Comment from strivinginsc
This verse was very visible, almost an testimony for a travel agency. I at least would like to visit based on your description. Needless to say it is well written.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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This verse was very visible, almost an testimony for a travel agency. I at least would like to visit based on your description. Needless to say it is well written.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much for your excellent review and wonderful comments. Mary
Comment from kahpot
wonderfully written it covers much of the change of seasons as well as our creatures reaction to this, you made a picture of the sky and you are right we should never tire of this and I loved the description of the sea well done Jacharrie....kahpot
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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wonderfully written it covers much of the change of seasons as well as our creatures reaction to this, you made a picture of the sky and you are right we should never tire of this and I loved the description of the sea well done Jacharrie....kahpot
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much for your excellent review and wonderful comments. Mary
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is a beautifully penned free verse poem, my friend. Such rich imagery paints a delightful picture. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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This is a beautifully penned free verse poem, my friend. Such rich imagery paints a delightful picture. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much Debbie for your excellent review and such great comments. Mary
Comment from RobertaLee
I really enjoy non-rhyming and unpunctuated free verse that allows one to seek the writer's voice in the ebb and flow of the words. Your poem is lovely and since it is for a contest, may I make a couple humble suggestions:
"singing delightful melodious songs" if you omit the repetitious verb here it will improve the flow and meaning a bit.
"a hypnotic effect we never tire of" this line could be omitted altogether, it sounds a bit like editorializing and changes the perspective of the poem to first person for just that line.
Best wishes in the contest, and thanks so much for entering your beautiful offering.
Smiles and blessings
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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I really enjoy non-rhyming and unpunctuated free verse that allows one to seek the writer's voice in the ebb and flow of the words. Your poem is lovely and since it is for a contest, may I make a couple humble suggestions:
"singing delightful melodious songs" if you omit the repetitious verb here it will improve the flow and meaning a bit.
"a hypnotic effect we never tire of" this line could be omitted altogether, it sounds a bit like editorializing and changes the perspective of the poem to first person for just that line.
Best wishes in the contest, and thanks so much for entering your beautiful offering.
Smiles and blessings
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Thank you Robert, I am happy to re-read and edit. I appreciate your suggestions. Mary
Comment from sue133
What a gorgeous free verse poem. It is beautiful. Your use of personification 'the mistress of the night' and your wonderful imagery make this poem a joy to read. Good luck for the contest. Susan
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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What a gorgeous free verse poem. It is beautiful. Your use of personification 'the mistress of the night' and your wonderful imagery make this poem a joy to read. Good luck for the contest. Susan
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much Sue for your excellent review and such great comments. Mary