Comment from Franklin Price

Excellent

Very humorous pizza poem. I makes me want to divide my chuckling time into eight equal pieces. Does that sound cheesy to you? Okay, enough of that! Your poem was wonderful to read. I can smell the pizza and see the kids "starving to death" as they often do; even after just eating.

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2017

---

reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017

Ha ha thanks for the amusing review. I don't have kids, but of course had heard the stories. Suddenly, having to cook for 40 of them was a revealing experience. They would come in all floppy-like telling me there were "staaaarving' at 7, after eating a big meal at 1. I would tell them gently that they did not know starving , Ethiopia knows starving, but you, my darlings are merely peckish, ha ha. The oven was the game changer allowing me to cook their second constant request, chocolate cake. Alot of work, but we all had fun. Cheers, j funny story, when I brought them to the ferry on the last day, they would all line up to give mama J a hug and I would whisper into each ear, "you were my favorite" a little white lie... but I guess I did learn something.

reply by Franklin Price on 14-Feb-2017

You sound like a really wonderful person; which I'm sure you are.

reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017

Aww. thats sweet. Canadians just strive to be wonderful. Cheers, j

reply by Franklin Price on 14-Feb-2017

eh?

reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017

ha ha

Comment from winnona

Excellent

a well-written contest entry. Your words flowed well line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well.

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2017

---

reply by the author on 13-Feb-2017

Thanks for the review, cheers, j

Comment from mvbrooks

Excellent

Fun read. The poem has a sense of energy and the reader moves smoothly, quickly through it. Very visual, easy to picture the woman rolling and creating the pizzas while "forty kids" with mouths hung open await. I liked the positive ending with the carrot cake and "cheesy kisses."

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2017

---

reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017

Thanks for the review. I do not have kids, but of course, heard about teenager"s tendancies. They would come in from doing their projects kinds floppy and say they were "staaaarving' It was a real project to come up with crunchy,colorful fun food everyday when the main staple in Zanzibar is rice and fish. The oven also allowed me to make their second (constant) request which was cake. When one of them had a birthday, I would find these smooth stones and write one word describing their character, like showboat or diva. It was a fun gig. Cheers, j

Comment from Aiona

Exceptional

LOL! I love this poem. It rhymes. It tells a story. And it made me laugh. Oh, and it made me want a pizza, BADLY! I find it funny that you managed to make a rhyme out of something so romantic as "kisses" with something as detestable as "dishes"!

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2017

---

reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017

Thanks for the encouraging review and sparkly stars. It was alot of fun, but overwhelming sometimes. My kitchen was about 10X 10 with a gas grill.I would do lunch and dinner for 40 Australian and American kids that would stay for 2 week stints.I had no time to shop at the market so I told everyone to come to the hotel every morning and I would buy 40 little loaves of bread, 40 mangoes, 40 bananas, 21 kilos of fish, I hung the scale on the tree. I wrote a story called 'makeshift market' that tells that story, cheers, j