Aiona's Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Beth"Because my portfolio is too messy and I have OCD.
4 total reviews
Comment from Halfree
Oh what the hell, liked that little ditty. And it pays one point and one cent...I always like a bargain, snap 'em up when I can. However I do like the poem, 2 cents not withstanding.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
Oh what the hell, liked that little ditty. And it pays one point and one cent...I always like a bargain, snap 'em up when I can. However I do like the poem, 2 cents not withstanding.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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Thanks, Halfree
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Aiona, LOL - ok point taken, and short sorta sweet valentine. Good luck in the contest with this one.
Thanks for sharing.
M
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
Dear Aiona, LOL - ok point taken, and short sorta sweet valentine. Good luck in the contest with this one.
Thanks for sharing.
M
Comment Written 09-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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Thanks, Maureen :)
Comment from William Ross
hahha a good take on roses are red for this valentines prompt poem. Nicely done on this. good luck and have yourself a wonderful day
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
hahha a good take on roses are red for this valentines prompt poem. Nicely done on this. good luck and have yourself a wonderful day
Comment Written 08-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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William, thank you :
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork.
-Good poem.
-Good use of color imagery
in lines one and two.
-I particularly like the last two lines.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
-Nice artwork.
-Good poem.
-Good use of color imagery
in lines one and two.
-I particularly like the last two lines.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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Thank you. Any suggestions for improvement?
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The only thing is it didn't have to be four lines if you look at the contest. I don't know that that is an issue. What you have is good. You have a good twist with the dialogue in the last two lines. I hope that helps.