An Ethical Decison
Driver gets a red light, no one around.3 total reviews
Comment from Smokes Widow
I like the presentation. I like the setting, you can feel the driver's relaxation, the warmth of the night, practically hear the crickets as he/she sits there.
Lines like, "The red eye glaring, the raw diamonds stipple (What a great word for visual effect!) the sky." I can feel the writer's desire to get home and sitting impotently at a red light bound by society's laws and the threat of a ticket if there happens to be a camera or a cop around unseen. It felt a little *flat* though, at the end. Something more challenging like the pep speech in Braveheart...would have left me feeling like a choice was about to be made and I could have played along by guessing what it might be, instead I was given an unenergetic yes or no.
That's the only reason for 4 and not 5.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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I like the presentation. I like the setting, you can feel the driver's relaxation, the warmth of the night, practically hear the crickets as he/she sits there.
Lines like, "The red eye glaring, the raw diamonds stipple (What a great word for visual effect!) the sky." I can feel the writer's desire to get home and sitting impotently at a red light bound by society's laws and the threat of a ticket if there happens to be a camera or a cop around unseen. It felt a little *flat* though, at the end. Something more challenging like the pep speech in Braveheart...would have left me feeling like a choice was about to be made and I could have played along by guessing what it might be, instead I was given an unenergetic yes or no.
That's the only reason for 4 and not 5.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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Thanks for the suggestion and the rationale. I will ponder it.
Comment from Thal1959
A nicely rendered work that speaks of the "temptation" we all face. Unfortunately, here in the suburbs of Chicago, there are too many red-light cameras to risk it.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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A nicely rendered work that speaks of the "temptation" we all face. Unfortunately, here in the suburbs of Chicago, there are too many red-light cameras to risk it.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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Thanks for the read. Hate those red light cameras.
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You're welcome - it was my pleasure.
Comment from Poetic Friend
Ah, this is so relatable. How many people have not been tempted to run that light? Thank God, we are overruled by laws, common sense, and morals.
I have not read the other entries, but Oh, this is such a good one.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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Ah, this is so relatable. How many people have not been tempted to run that light? Thank God, we are overruled by laws, common sense, and morals.
I have not read the other entries, but Oh, this is such a good one.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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Thanks so much for the read and the kind comments.
