Lover...
A short love poem...7 total reviews
Comment from sunnilicious
That must be why love unions are so important. Great visual imagery created. Creative. Romantic. Self-Improvement. Spiritual. GOod running alliteration in the short poem with H and S words. Nice work. Good luck in the contest :)
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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That must be why love unions are so important. Great visual imagery created. Creative. Romantic. Self-Improvement. Spiritual. GOod running alliteration in the short poem with H and S words. Nice work. Good luck in the contest :)
Comment Written 28-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Awe thank you so much! I appreciate you taking the time to read and review!!!
Comment from Richard J
Sheesh!
Dang, Susan!
You trying to singe our senses, m'dear?
Well, intentional (or not), mine are like a hot potato scorching one, then the other as it's tossed around inside my head, in my heart, and my imagination ... whew!
If this doesn't win, they need new judges ... LOL!
Good stuff, Lady ... here's a big warm hug of thanks! ~ Richard ; )
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017
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Sheesh!
Dang, Susan!
You trying to singe our senses, m'dear?
Well, intentional (or not), mine are like a hot potato scorching one, then the other as it's tossed around inside my head, in my heart, and my imagination ... whew!
If this doesn't win, they need new judges ... LOL!
Good stuff, Lady ... here's a big warm hug of thanks! ~ Richard ; )
Comment Written 09-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017
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LOL Richard!! A hot potato!!! oh you... thank you!!
Comment from winnona
A well-written contest entry. The words flowed well combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017
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A well-written contest entry. The words flowed well combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017
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Thank you so very much!! :-)
Comment from BeasPeas
The magic words in your poem are:
"my heart's safe haven,"
This is something we all require for longevity in a relationship.
Marilyn
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017
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The magic words in your poem are:
"my heart's safe haven,"
This is something we all require for longevity in a relationship.
Marilyn
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017
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Thank you so very much!! :-)
Comment from WalkerMan
In this splendid short poem, addressing your Lover, you concisely cover three aspects of love -- the physical (line 2), the emotional (line 3), and the spiritual (line 4) -- recapping as body, heart, and soul in the fifth line. The sixth line earns you my last Six for this week, as you address your Lover again, the subsequent space plus ellipsis having the effect of turning that line into a request needing no additional words.
This reminds me of "Annie's Song" by John Denver, where he says, after listing the ways, "You fill up my senses / Come fill me again" as a refrain.
Your first five lines enumerate, and the sixth line requests an encore. Superb.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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In this splendid short poem, addressing your Lover, you concisely cover three aspects of love -- the physical (line 2), the emotional (line 3), and the spiritual (line 4) -- recapping as body, heart, and soul in the fifth line. The sixth line earns you my last Six for this week, as you address your Lover again, the subsequent space plus ellipsis having the effect of turning that line into a request needing no additional words.
This reminds me of "Annie's Song" by John Denver, where he says, after listing the ways, "You fill up my senses / Come fill me again" as a refrain.
Your first five lines enumerate, and the sixth line requests an encore. Superb.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Thank you Mike, for yet another amazing review!!!!! you always get my intentions...when writing!
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You're most welcome, Susan. You are a better writer than you give yourself credit for being, and I never have to wonder what you really meant. -- Mike
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
This is an exceptional contest entry telling us in both thought provoking and very poignant feelings. I wish whomever the writer is the best of luck!,,,,,,Jim
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017
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This is an exceptional contest entry telling us in both thought provoking and very poignant feelings. I wish whomever the writer is the best of luck!,,,,,,Jim
Comment Written 04-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017
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thank you so much Jim for this wonderful review!!!
Comment from w.j.debi
Any lover would love to get a note like this short verse. Not a word is wasted
I'm not sure if using an ampersand will disqualify you or not since it would make 16 words. Maybe drop "my" in one of your lines to be certain.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017
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Any lover would love to get a note like this short verse. Not a word is wasted
I'm not sure if using an ampersand will disqualify you or not since it would make 16 words. Maybe drop "my" in one of your lines to be certain.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017
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Thank you so very much!!! and yes, needed to correct that!! :-)))
