Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Hi Lune - I had never heard of a Swap Quatrain, but did not need to look it up. It speaks for itself. This is very good in three well written stanzas. Very clever and your lines three in all stanzas, where you have transposed the lines does not sound at all contrived. Really very nice poem. I rather cancy trying this form. I am not sure I can do it as well as this. Warm regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017

Dear Dorothy, If you make an attempt at a swap quatrain and need any help, feel free to look me up! At any rate, let me know when you try and post one so I can see it...I'm sure it will be lovely. Thank you for your kind words of review.

reply by Dorothy Farrell on 26-Jan-2017

Thank you Luna - I will bear you in mind - very kind offer - Dorothy xx

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

I read this twice and it got better and better as I got more into the imagery and the message of your poem. For one, I love the lunar dreams metaphor and how you wove that into a message about honoring one's dreams and creativity-- of giving them space in our lives. Your ending rings powerfully as the dreamer descends form the moon and back to reality:

"Then rise with ease
slip out of your nighttime reprise.
Down from the moonbeam, make the climb,
then rise with ease, come morning time."

Yes, but I can't wait to go back to sleep to dream some more. Sometimes dreams are more real than reality.

Thank you for sharing this enchanting, surreal poem with us.

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017

Thank YOU, Sis Cat, for reading and reviewing another of my poems. I'm happy that you thought the imagery and metaphor was powerful. You're right, some dreams are more real than reality.

Blessings on your day

Comment from Bill O'Bier

Excellent

Dear Jeni--
I love this poem. When I read it this is what I contemplate.....If I am a dream man--What can this mean? What dream do I cast? And where does it land? Is something partially seen. Is the view obscured something else-- maybe by you.
Love you always,
Bill

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017

Hi, Bill! I LOVE your review, I really enjoyed reading it. Thank you, Bill for continuing to support my writing efforts.

Love you also,

jeni

Comment from crybry67

Excellent

Another great one, Jeni. I really like your use of rhyme, and the artwork and background color you chose for your presentation is the perfect complement for your poem. Blessings... Christy

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2017

jBlessings right back, girlfriend. I always appreciate your kind words of support, thank you so much.

Comment from angel123

Excellent

Your poem is interesting and your message about dreams well received. I enjoyed reading your poem and your artwork choice goes well with your thoughts; good alliteration of words throughout your poem.

angel123

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2017

Thank you, angel123, for reading my poem and leaving this kind review.

Comment from Zinnia48

Excellent

I love the rhythm and rhyme, and this particular poetic form. Your images of the moon are vivid. Favorite line: Gossamer mists make air fell thin. thanks for sharing! Caroline

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2017

Thank YOU for reading and reviewing! I appreciate it very much.

Comment from MsPetra

Excellent

I really liked your last stanza. You said a lot with it. Very well done.
I enjoy your work Luna. There isn't anything I would have done differently.
Please keep writing. I am looking forward to future offerings from you.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2017

Dear MsPetra,

]I intend to keep writing, it's in my blood. I have to write each day, thank you for the read and the complimentary review.

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Wow, how do you do it? Do ever stop writing? LoL

Excellent poem. I like the great line "nothing is as it seems"
The swap shows your caliber of work down from the moonbeam to rise in the morning.
Great job!

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017

Rarely. I thrive on creation and I have much time on my hands, unfortunately (or fortunately, depending upon how one views it);

Thank you, Gypsy for your read and very kind review.

Comment from estory

Excellent

A nice dreamy feel to this one, a sublime voice, and airy images. I like all the repetitions of rise, and that break 'walking on the moon" nicely done. gives it that lift up off the earth. an interesting mechanism. upbeat and hopeful tone. nice sound patterns between night, climb and time in the last stanza. estory

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017

Thank you, estory, for reading and reviewing this poem. I'm happy that you enjoyed it.

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

This is a delightful and insightful piece of poetry dear jeni! You have also incorporated my favorite type of poem, fantasy, in your poem.
Thanks for sharing!
Virtual sixer!
Blessings!
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017

Thanks for the virtual sixer, bekka! I'm happy that you enjoyed this poem with some fantasy incorporated into it.


Always,

jeni