Resolution
Aspiring Writers Short Story Challenge, January 20172 total reviews
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Good fun little piece. There are a couple of places where there should be commas. I know it was a limited space entry but they really should be there.
Last year, you resolved keep the garden tidy - resolved to?
Go on; tell me what have - you don't need the semi-colon here, just a comma would do.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Hi there,
Good fun little piece. There are a couple of places where there should be commas. I know it was a limited space entry but they really should be there.
Last year, you resolved keep the garden tidy - resolved to?
Go on; tell me what have - you don't need the semi-colon here, just a comma would do.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 23-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Thanks for spotting the missing word.
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The verbal structure of the story reminisces the futility of making New Year Resolutions that tend to fail consistently in a marriage of about forty years.
The work highlights the wife's assertion of the worthlessness of these resolutions and the husband's seemingly timid response to her.
The work constitutes a significant commentary on the routine nature of these resolutions and their ineptitude in bringing about a change for the better following the resolution.
Excellent work! Bravo!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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The verbal structure of the story reminisces the futility of making New Year Resolutions that tend to fail consistently in a marriage of about forty years.
The work highlights the wife's assertion of the worthlessness of these resolutions and the husband's seemingly timid response to her.
The work constitutes a significant commentary on the routine nature of these resolutions and their ineptitude in bringing about a change for the better following the resolution.
Excellent work! Bravo!
Comment Written 23-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Thanks for the review.
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Remain Blessed!