The Magic Bumbershoot
a child's fantasy15 total reviews
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
A fabulous entry for the contest. The rhyme and rhythm are perfect and the pictures you paint for the young (and old) are beautiful. I happen to be inordinately fond of the word bumbershoot and have used it myself to the delight of my grand kids. Would let you know my favorite phrase, but there are too many to choose from. Very well done. - Wendy
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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A fabulous entry for the contest. The rhyme and rhythm are perfect and the pictures you paint for the young (and old) are beautiful. I happen to be inordinately fond of the word bumbershoot and have used it myself to the delight of my grand kids. Would let you know my favorite phrase, but there are too many to choose from. Very well done. - Wendy
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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well, you certainly made my day with your lovely review which I wish I could nominate, but haven't any. I think, for a month, we should have more. Anyway, I do appreciate your kind words. Thank you!
Katharine - pome lover
Comment from Mustang Patty
Thank you for sharing your story within a poem entry. The words flow well, and an adventure story is revealed within the lines. The tale was well told, and very enjoyable.
~patty~
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Thank you for sharing your story within a poem entry. The words flow well, and an adventure story is revealed within the lines. The tale was well told, and very enjoyable.
~patty~
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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thanks very much
Comment from dragonpoet
Another Mary Poppins. You are lucky to have seen scenes like this elk and deer in the mountain. I have deer and wild turkeys, sometimes, in my front yard. My block is partially surrounded by a government protected wild animal preserve/wetland.
The rhyme scheme makes the story move quickly and smoothly.
Congrats for placing in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Another Mary Poppins. You are lucky to have seen scenes like this elk and deer in the mountain. I have deer and wild turkeys, sometimes, in my front yard. My block is partially surrounded by a government protected wild animal preserve/wetland.
The rhyme scheme makes the story move quickly and smoothly.
Congrats for placing in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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many thanks!
yep - saw lots of wildlife in the Colorado mountains - minks, marmots, bears and deer on the golf course!
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No problem.
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Comment from frierajac
Thank you so much for creating this fanciful and very clever poem. The word Bumbershoot rings a bell and seems to take me back to the days of Lewis
Carroll and his hunt for the Snark.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for creating this fanciful and very clever poem. The word Bumbershoot rings a bell and seems to take me back to the days of Lewis
Carroll and his hunt for the Snark.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017
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And thank you for your kind words!
Comment from Teresa Williams
That's absolutely 5 stars (have no more 6-star ratings!). I too have seen such majestic animals, the herd rushing through the plain, while living in Oregon. This poem was so good, that I didn't want the story to end! Very well-written, and full of joy; this pome is a real winner! May your craft continue to be blessed! You truly have a gift. --Teresa Williams, Apr 14, 2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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That's absolutely 5 stars (have no more 6-star ratings!). I too have seen such majestic animals, the herd rushing through the plain, while living in Oregon. This poem was so good, that I didn't want the story to end! Very well-written, and full of joy; this pome is a real winner! May your craft continue to be blessed! You truly have a gift. --Teresa Williams, Apr 14, 2017
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Gosh, Teresa, I really appreciate that and am very flattered. that is a wonderful review! thank you
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
The story is full of fantasy spirit concerning children, somewhat adventurous, magical object, placed in humorous order; I liked and enjoyed the flow of thoughts, imagery.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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The story is full of fantasy spirit concerning children, somewhat adventurous, magical object, placed in humorous order; I liked and enjoyed the flow of thoughts, imagery.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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thanks, ALD, glad you liked it.
PL
Comment from kahpot
Excellent read and poem ( I am an Aussie) Bumbershoot has me wondering, It made this poem even more special for me as every time Bumbershoot was mentioned I would imagine what it was ( help) loved it****kahpot
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Excellent read and poem ( I am an Aussie) Bumbershoot has me wondering, It made this poem even more special for me as every time Bumbershoot was mentioned I would imagine what it was ( help) loved it****kahpot
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Bless you, kahpot - it's an umbrella!
This one, as you could tell, is special.
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Thank you
Comment from crybry67
I enjoyed reading this post. You did a great job with your vivid descriptions. Wonderful use of rhyme and meter as well. Blessings to you... Christy
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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I enjoyed reading this post. You did a great job with your vivid descriptions. Wonderful use of rhyme and meter as well. Blessings to you... Christy
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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thank you very much. I appreciate your kind words.
I read your letter to the Donald, and I hope, too, that he will concentrate on accomplishing what he promised and let his people speak for him. I want him to do well and hope, with time, our country will be more united.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fabulous write and I went on the journey with you high up into the clouds and saw the scenes and was transported as if I were Marry Poppins! Lovely rhymes, sentiments and flow and worthy of six stars from me, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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A fabulous write and I went on the journey with you high up into the clouds and saw the scenes and was transported as if I were Marry Poppins! Lovely rhymes, sentiments and flow and worthy of six stars from me, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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thank you so much! That makes me feel so good! and thank you for the 6!
Comment from marybell1
A wonderful children's story. The imagery was so clear it took me back to what I enjoyed as a child. - We forget sometimes. Maybe I should read more children's stories. A sweet one like that I mean.
Marybell 1.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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A wonderful children's story. The imagery was so clear it took me back to what I enjoyed as a child. - We forget sometimes. Maybe I should read more children's stories. A sweet one like that I mean.
Marybell 1.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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thank you so much! If you care to go to my portfolio, there's a story called Grandpa's Magic Walking Stick which is similar to this.
I've written lots of stories for children, and have been published in Highlights Magazine, Cricket Magazine, an anthology, and my book, The Worst Five Months Ever - a middle grade just came out. Several others I'm tweaking, trying to improve for re-submission.
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I am new to this and I am still trying to find my way around. I would love to read your work, but how do I find it? I have written a series of children's books but do not know how to get started as I barely know my way round a computer.
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If you click on pome lover you will get my home page. Look over to the left and click on portfolio.
Voila!
Also, in Google, type in Children's traditional publishers accepting unsolicited submissions.
Some require query letters, some just the picture book. If you want to submit a novel or chapter book, they usually ask for the first three chapters.
K