Wise Owl
This is humor for the birds.18 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Is this why he is so wise? A humorous write, I wish you well in the competition, my grand daughter loves owls, good luck, love Dolly x
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Is this why he is so wise? A humorous write, I wish you well in the competition, my grand daughter loves owls, good luck, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
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Thank you for your very helpful comments.
Comment from mermaids
Excellent point in your poem, the owl is always asking questions and why he has a reputation for being wise is also a question. Excellent short poem that makes the reader think.
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Excellent point in your poem, the owl is always asking questions and why he has a reputation for being wise is also a question. Excellent short poem that makes the reader think.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
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Thank you for noticing the details.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements splendidly with a spot on line / syllable count and theme.
Whooooo says the owl's wise - concrete and expressive imagery; " owl's " is not really correct grammar in this instance maybe something like 'owl so wise' would work better for you without changing the meaning
he's always asking questions - nice backup to line one maintaining the influence of sound as well
he's such a birdbrain - witty closing using double meaning
I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
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This meets the contest requirements splendidly with a spot on line / syllable count and theme.
Whooooo says the owl's wise - concrete and expressive imagery; " owl's " is not really correct grammar in this instance maybe something like 'owl so wise' would work better for you without changing the meaning
he's always asking questions - nice backup to line one maintaining the influence of sound as well
he's such a birdbrain - witty closing using double meaning
I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
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Owl's here is a contraction for, owl is, so I thought it worked but I'll look at it again. Thank you for such a detailed review and encouraging comments.
Comment from mbroyles2
A bird brain indeed.
Why is it that an owl is considered to be wise if he asks so many questions.
You got me thinking there.
Excellent entry to the contest.
Michael
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A bird brain indeed.
Why is it that an owl is considered to be wise if he asks so many questions.
You got me thinking there.
Excellent entry to the contest.
Michael
Comment Written 15-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
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Thank you for your detailed comments.
Comment from royowen
Such an excellent entry in this bye bye bird 5/7/5 poetry contest, very cleverly put together, thoughtfully and hilariously scribed and skilfully crafted, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
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Such an excellent entry in this bye bye bird 5/7/5 poetry contest, very cleverly put together, thoughtfully and hilariously scribed and skilfully crafted, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 15-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
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Thank you for appreciating the humor.
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Most welcome
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Very witty, pithy and wise :) Like your poem so much, fantastic write on the Bye Bye Birdy theme, I love the cuteness of this, it really it so much fun and such a neat write, well done, kindest regards, Meia :)
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
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Very witty, pithy and wise :) Like your poem so much, fantastic write on the Bye Bye Birdy theme, I love the cuteness of this, it really it so much fun and such a neat write, well done, kindest regards, Meia :)
Comment Written 15-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
Thank you for such praises and good encouragement.
Comment from kiwisteveh
This contest made it tough to meet the brief, but you have succeeded. The wit is centred around the owl's questioning call, emphasised in the first word. Syllable count is correct and this stands a good chance in the contest.
Steve
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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
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This contest made it tough to meet the brief, but you have succeeded. The wit is centred around the owl's questioning call, emphasised in the first word. Syllable count is correct and this stands a good chance in the contest.
Steve
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Comment Written 15-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the detailed evaluation. I always respect your opinion.
Comment from mvbrooks
Interesting contest and this is certainly a creative entry. The take on the "who" sound of an owl being an actual question--and the play of it that, if he has to ask so much, how much can he know, is very effective. The final line is an insult or an honest observation. Should do well in your contest.
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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
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Interesting contest and this is certainly a creative entry. The take on the "who" sound of an owl being an actual question--and the play of it that, if he has to ask so much, how much can he know, is very effective. The final line is an insult or an honest observation. Should do well in your contest.
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Comment Written 15-Jan-2017
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Thank you for your detailed review. I appreciate it.
