Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Dream Jaunt"a place to gather my poetic forms
46 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
Less common than couplets and alternate rhyme the nvelope can be very effective especially with the lovely polysylabic rhymes like spectacular/vernacular. Lovely. Also the approximates like flowery/frivolity and tapestry/poetry. excellent.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
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Less common than couplets and alternate rhyme the nvelope can be very effective especially with the lovely polysylabic rhymes like spectacular/vernacular. Lovely. Also the approximates like flowery/frivolity and tapestry/poetry. excellent.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
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Thank you, perhaps I'm learning something from you before class! I'm excited. I'll enroll at the end of the month when I get paid.
Comment from suep
You've written a beautiful poem on dreams that has an inspirational feel to it! Great rhythm, flow, and rhyming. I especially love how you word 'Our eyes met sights spectacular ~illuminated tapestry ~'. Perfect picture choice and stunning presentation. An enjoyable read. Nice work! Sue P. :)
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
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You've written a beautiful poem on dreams that has an inspirational feel to it! Great rhythm, flow, and rhyming. I especially love how you word 'Our eyes met sights spectacular ~illuminated tapestry ~'. Perfect picture choice and stunning presentation. An enjoyable read. Nice work! Sue P. :)
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
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Thank you sue, and I'm thrilled at this review - I loved reading it.
I appreciate you.
jeni
Comment from nomi338
Gorgeous art coupled with awesome prose make for a very enjoyable read. Your very well conceived and written poem was a total joy to read. I just recently discovered you and have not been disappointed with everything that I have read. Keep up the very good work.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
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Gorgeous art coupled with awesome prose make for a very enjoyable read. Your very well conceived and written poem was a total joy to read. I just recently discovered you and have not been disappointed with everything that I have read. Keep up the very good work.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
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Thank you, nomi338, I must tell you that I'm very happy that you found me and that you're not disappointed in anything I write. Just wait. I would ask that you tell me instead of not reviewing the poem.
Love,
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Jeni
Comment from Thomas Bowling
You have excellent rhyming in your poem and good meter throughout. A nice ending with the hope of spring and revisiting this dream.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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You have excellent rhyming in your poem and good meter throughout. A nice ending with the hope of spring and revisiting this dream.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review of my poem. ❤️ ❤️
Comment from mvbrooks
The image is compelling...looks almost like an oversized lightbulb as the colors fall to the water. The rhyme scheme is uncommon and my first encounter with it. The pacing / meter with 8 syllables gave the poem a soft flow.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
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The image is compelling...looks almost like an oversized lightbulb as the colors fall to the water. The rhyme scheme is uncommon and my first encounter with it. The pacing / meter with 8 syllables gave the poem a soft flow.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
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Thank you, and I'm happy that you enjoyed the poem. Thank you for this review.
Comment from Sis Cat
Luna, this in an enchanting poem that soothed my soul on such a dark day. It is magical, lyrical. Your words flow so smoothly that I did not recognize your rhymes.
I love the depth and the creativity of your language and imagery:
"maids spinning wheels of poetry
spoke in a dream vernacular."
Your poem most refreshed me. Thank you for sharing your talent.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Luna, this in an enchanting poem that soothed my soul on such a dark day. It is magical, lyrical. Your words flow so smoothly that I did not recognize your rhymes.
I love the depth and the creativity of your language and imagery:
"maids spinning wheels of poetry
spoke in a dream vernacular."
Your poem most refreshed me. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review, Sis cat! ❤️ ❤️ ❤️
Comment from closetpoetjester
A smooth flowing envelope rhyme Luna and your tapestry was illuminated in full. Your poetic sounds were both lyrical and flowery and a vision of true loveliness.
Well written
Cheers P
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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A smooth flowing envelope rhyme Luna and your tapestry was illuminated in full. Your poetic sounds were both lyrical and flowery and a vision of true loveliness.
Well written
Cheers P
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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Well thank you, P! Your review is more than flattering and I appreciate that you noticed the envelope rhyme. Thanks for your continued attention to my portfolio!
jeni
Comment from LIJ Red
Rhyming quatrains I like, imagination running wild I like. But the Hubbel has made some space shots that beggar the imagination...these quatrains look fine to me.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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Rhyming quatrains I like, imagination running wild I like. But the Hubbel has made some space shots that beggar the imagination...these quatrains look fine to me.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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LlJ Red,
Thanks for the kind review. I've got a shirt on today that says, "Run Wild, Moonchild!" Thought it fitting so I purchased it.
jeni
Comment from rjuselius
this is a brilliant piece of poetry dear jeni! whoa, i might add. the erotic charge is fortunately subtle as i don't really appreciate vulgarity. the imagery is outstanding and very delicate. nice one my friend!
thank you for sharing!
virtual sixer..
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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this is a brilliant piece of poetry dear jeni! whoa, i might add. the erotic charge is fortunately subtle as i don't really appreciate vulgarity. the imagery is outstanding and very delicate. nice one my friend!
thank you for sharing!
virtual sixer..
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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And thank YOU for reading my poem and for the kind review, rebekka.
jeni
Comment from nancyrabbrose
You have created a vision of a poem, a trip to dreamland. It is beautiful with exquisite imagery. Your choice for the illustration is excellent. The poem reads smoothly and I would recommend it to anyone. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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You have created a vision of a poem, a trip to dreamland. It is beautiful with exquisite imagery. Your choice for the illustration is excellent. The poem reads smoothly and I would recommend it to anyone. Well done.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Thank you, nancy! I hope you have a great day.
