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Humanity Project

Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "The Night begins -Part one"
A science fiction book about genetic engineering.

19 total reviews 
Comment from Walu Feral
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BOO! Did I scare you?

Howdy Padna.

This is coming along at a very nice pace. Let's do another read.

Ayala looked at Achie(Archie) a moment, seeming to juggle trust and suspicion."



Great work on this short and sweet chapter, my friend.

So the journey is about to begin and I hope it goes we, however, I have doubts that it will lol.

Now, on a side note. I think I'd keep putting a recap of the last chapter at the top for new readers.

Top job, sis.

Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2017

reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
    Thanks, I should put a recap, and that's a good idea. Sometimes I get lazy -- whaaaat?? Okay, yes, I get lazy. I'll mend that in future chapters, rather than the "end of last chapter" which isn't as helpful.

    Again,.
    Thanks. You're the best!

    Cowgal
Comment from Lu Saluna
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This is very good, getting very exciting. The suspense is keeping me on edge. Poor Todd, I hate to think what might have happened to him.
I am looking forward to see how this story unfolds.

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
    Thank you, Lu, and I'm afraid Koko fels the same way about Todd. It's the not knowing that's the worst thing. Unfortunately, her worst fears may be realized...

    I appreciate the review,
    Rhonda
Comment from emptypage
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Oh... I smell trouble. Too soon, Archie! It's too soon!

Great read, again, my friend. I really love this story.

I feel hopeful for the overall ending, though I'm not certain why, but I just know Koko and Archie are about to step in some serious poo.

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
    You're right, they are, and it won't be over any time soon, either.
    ie, its the near the beginning of the book. haha.

    Thank you, my friend,
    Rhonda
Comment from mbroyles2
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Looks like Koko and Archie are going to make a break for it.
It seems he has finally gotten the trust of Ayala but if he gets caught he might be off to the penal colony for him and not on a field trip either.
Great job so far.
Michael

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
    Thank you so much for the comments, and for taking time to review!
    Ayala is a bit trusting, but a force to keep an eye on. She didn't get to be headmistress by accident.
    I appreciate the review,
    Rhonda
Comment from Dustybones
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Good writing as always. You are very good a writing. This one was short. Got the job done with setting up the escape. I know somethng will go wrong. I think so anyway.
The community keeps getting bigger. Off to the gold mines.

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
    Something always goes wrong. lol.
    Thanks for reading, reviewing, and leaving such an uplifting comment.
    Rhonda
Comment from robina1978
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A lovely photo of a coyote that complement this chapter so well. I am sorry reading these chapters in the wrong order. Makes it this time clearer.

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
    Thank you, again, for a great review! It does make more sense in the proper order, but as I do that all the time, too, it's sometimes fun to read them backwards, then you can fill in the gaps, and go, "oh, that's what they meant." Lol,
    I appreciate your time.

    Rhonda
Comment from MelB
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Another great chapter, Rhonda. I'm really enjoying this story. Wonderful dialogue and story line. Look forward to the next chapter.

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
    Thank you, my friend! Next one is posted, and isn't very long.
    I appreciate your time and loyalty!
    Have a great day,
    Rhonda
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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Kinda like Hotel California. You can check out but never leave, I guess. A well written chapter. I'm off to read part 2, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
    Thank you, Debbie, for the wonderful review. Funny, it is a bit like Hotel California, minus the beach and view!!

    Have a great day,
    Rhonda
Comment from country ranch writer
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LOOKS LIKE WE ARE IN FOR A LOT OF ACTION PACKED THRILLS AMONGST THE HOKEE. AS SHE IS TRYING TO RUN AWAY FROM BEING A PRISONER.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    Will be action packed soon, but one more chapter to set up.
    Thanks for reading and reviewing!!

    Take care,
    Rhonda
reply by country ranch writer on 11-Jan-2017
    okay
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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Ayala sure is naive if she believes an adult dragged to hokee against his will wants to stay forever and be part of their sick community. Good chapter... hope the escape plan works.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    Ayala has two problems, one is she's brainwashed, and the other is that she's the leader of the house, and part of "management" now. It causes conflicts with Koko and her own conscience.
    Thank you for the wonderful review,
    Rhonda