Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Man in the Moon"a place to gather my poetic forms
42 total reviews
Comment from valmay
The moon, May the man be there for you in his serenity always. I enjoyed your Rondeau. I am learning so much from all of the innovative writers on this site. Thank you so much.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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The moon, May the man be there for you in his serenity always. I enjoyed your Rondeau. I am learning so much from all of the innovative writers on this site. Thank you so much.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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Thanks very much!
Comment from rjuselius
this is an exquisite rondeau dear jeni! i love the mindframe and the beautiful point of view! i am a true lover of the moon and its phenomena so i do dearly appreicate tihs poem.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
virtual sixer.
rebekka x
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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this is an exquisite rondeau dear jeni! i love the mindframe and the beautiful point of view! i am a true lover of the moon and its phenomena so i do dearly appreicate tihs poem.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
virtual sixer.
rebekka x
Comment Written 12-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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Are you a Cancer, by any chance?: I am, and that's why my good friends call me Moonchild.
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
I have not mastered the Rondeau, but you certainly have.
Your poetic dissertation with regard to the 'Man in the Moon'
was pleasant to read. I feel there is an underlying theme that
one must align with to get the full meaning of this write.
I have read your profile and can find certain metaphors to
support addictive behavior. You are my rock, you're back and so serene.
Well done, my friend
:) Carolyn
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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I have not mastered the Rondeau, but you certainly have.
Your poetic dissertation with regard to the 'Man in the Moon'
was pleasant to read. I feel there is an underlying theme that
one must align with to get the full meaning of this write.
I have read your profile and can find certain metaphors to
support addictive behavior. You are my rock, you're back and so serene.
Well done, my friend
:) Carolyn
Comment Written 12-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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Dear Carolyn,
Thank you for reading my profile as well as my poem, and for the kind review.
Yours,
Jeni
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
So, the secret to having a night of good dreams and peace is to find the man in the moon? Over the past couple years I've been sleeping more and more so maybe I've found the man in the moon and never knew it. Great job
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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So, the secret to having a night of good dreams and peace is to find the man in the moon? Over the past couple years I've been sleeping more and more so maybe I've found the man in the moon and never knew it. Great job
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Thank you for your very kind review and. Your attention to my work! I'm come and g get go
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Very nice, Jeni. I often look up at the moon and speak to the man smiling down. On a clear night with the stars surrounding the moon, there is nothing quite like it. This is a lovely poem, my friend. :) Sandra xx
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Very nice, Jeni. I often look up at the moon and speak to the man smiling down. On a clear night with the stars surrounding the moon, there is nothing quite like it. This is a lovely poem, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is a lovely poem, my friend. I love the rondeau form and you have made it shine with this delightful piece. Perfect topic for your name as well~Debbie
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This is a lovely poem, my friend. I love the rondeau form and you have made it shine with this delightful piece. Perfect topic for your name as well~Debbie
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
Comment from mermaids
I am in awe. This is a beautiful poem. I am book casing it so I can read it again. Lovely use of words that captures a magical feeling which I need right now in the cold, snowy winter. Nothing less than a six.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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I am in awe. This is a beautiful poem. I am book casing it so I can read it again. Lovely use of words that captures a magical feeling which I need right now in the cold, snowy winter. Nothing less than a six.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Dear mermaids,
Thank you SO MUCH for this six-star review. I appreciate it so much, it's an honor and I'll not soon forget it.
I'm glad this could give you what you needed now during this cold winter (no snow where I live - darn!). Thanks again for the six stars.
luna
Comment from Pantygynt
The danger with these restrictive and repeating forms is that the rhyme can become forced as a result. The quatrain is bordering on this. The queen and her wolverine nature appears only in this stanza and seems to be there more for the rhyme than the story, which is one of the definitions of forced rhyme.
My next classroom course will be on the subject of various continental forms written in English, starting mid February. If you are interested.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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The danger with these restrictive and repeating forms is that the rhyme can become forced as a result. The quatrain is bordering on this. The queen and her wolverine nature appears only in this stanza and seems to be there more for the rhyme than the story, which is one of the definitions of forced rhyme.
My next classroom course will be on the subject of various continental forms written in English, starting mid February. If you are interested.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Actually, the stanza isn't for the rhyme, those words just came to my head at that point and I liked them for the poem. I'm sorry that they sounded forced. I'll definitely attend your class this February, I can't wait!
luna
Comment from Ulla
Wow, Luna, this is really lovely and I'm really taken with your wonderful poem about the face of the moon. The moon has always been surrounded by tales and mystery. I love it. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Wow, Luna, this is really lovely and I'm really taken with your wonderful poem about the face of the moon. The moon has always been surrounded by tales and mystery. I love it. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Dear Ulla,
Thank you for the kind review. I'm thrilled that you enjoyed this poem, dear!
jeni
Comment from Bill O'Bier
In the English Middle Ages and renaissance, the moon was thought to be the god of drunkards, and at least three London taverns were named "The Man in the Moone". Thanks for a great "man in moon" poem.
Bill~
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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In the English Middle Ages and renaissance, the moon was thought to be the god of drunkards, and at least three London taverns were named "The Man in the Moone". Thanks for a great "man in moon" poem.
Bill~
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Thanks!
