Comment from Marykelly

Excellent

This is a fun poem that lets the author play with words and create a playful poem. The last rhyming word in each stanza is novel and even though the form seems to dominate over the message there is a discernable message, enjoy your life with your children.

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017

Thank you for taking the time to read and review this poem. It is much appreciated.

dp

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

It does seem at times the pressures of life (get it done, do it now,
don't forget to -, juggle faster) cause us to forget the simple things
in life, that make living enjoyable. :-)

I liked your rhyming stanza feet! It tied the whole poem together with
a sense of urgency.

Nicely done DP :-)

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017

Thanks for the thorough review. I am happy you enjoyed the poem.

Joan

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

I like your "use these words prompt." The first stanza is my favorite. None of us wants to miss deadlines and go boom. Back in the 60's the way of thinking was that creeping for people of all ages, not just babies, increases intelligence. Maybe we should all try it. LOL! Marilyn

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017

Thanks for reviewing my poem. I appreciate all the stars.

Joan

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

Interesting set out with the use of one rhyming word at the end of each verse I like it it is very effective in the context of the poem
nice write
dip

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017

Glad you liked it. Thanks for the review.

dp

Comment from Poetic Friend

Excellent

Gosh, I can relate to this well-written poem. My entire life centers around deadlines. Ninety-percent of my job centers around deadlines. My personal life is deadline-driven.

This poem is definitely food for thought. It would have been a nice entry for the time poetry contest.

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 Comment Written 08-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017

Thanks for reading and reviewing. I am glad you could relate.

dp

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Good

So true, stop, take stock of life, take time to enjoy precious moments. The First line has a typo, 't' should be 'to'. Great advice, regards Dolly x

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 Comment Written 08-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017

Thanks for taking the time to coment on this. I will corrrect the typo.

Joan