GULBRANDR- God's Sword
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The Beginning"A child is born who will be a champion
12 total reviews
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
It is interesting that Nyla has lived happily alone and seemingly self sufficient and fearless.
The introduction of two fine guard gdogs is opportune and realistic.
Perhaps Dak will introduce friendship or?love.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2018
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It is interesting that Nyla has lived happily alone and seemingly self sufficient and fearless.
The introduction of two fine guard gdogs is opportune and realistic.
Perhaps Dak will introduce friendship or?love.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 21-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2018
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He did both. =} Thanks so much Shirley.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I'm sorry I'm so far behind, Rox, catching up now. This is an amazing story, and I'm loving it! I'd love two dogs like those guarding Nyla, and her beauty!! lol. Going to the next part now! :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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I'm sorry I'm so far behind, Rox, catching up now. This is an amazing story, and I'm loving it! I'd love two dogs like those guarding Nyla, and her beauty!! lol. Going to the next part now! :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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That's okay, I'm just glad you want to read it. =} Thank you.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A very good story. It reminds me of Clan of the Cave Bear. here's hoping it's just as successful. An interesting story told with real imagination.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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A very good story. It reminds me of Clan of the Cave Bear. here's hoping it's just as successful. An interesting story told with real imagination.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much. I have a lot of thinking to do on this story. It's going to really stretch my abilities =} Rox
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Wow, perfectly painted picture of a land.and a people. I need to know more about, what a fascinating journey you take us on, and we as the reader can only be enthralled, this could be a big time film or movie Ia sure of it, or the makings of it, I cannot wait to read more!Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Wow, perfectly painted picture of a land.and a people. I need to know more about, what a fascinating journey you take us on, and we as the reader can only be enthralled, this could be a big time film or movie Ia sure of it, or the makings of it, I cannot wait to read more!Well done.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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I hope I won't disappoint. This is completely different from anything I have written. I mainly do a children's series called The Adventures of Super Pig. I do funny poems. So this is a real stretch for me and I'm a bit nervous about it. ={ Hoping my brain, words and imagination doesn't fail me. Thanks so much for the great review. Rox
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well it is an amazing start. Superpig, how cool! I had a mouse called Superdude lol. All the best, meia :)
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written my friend you have done well with the characters and descriptions I enjoyed and look forward to the next chapter happy new year regards Jill
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2016
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Yes this is well written my friend you have done well with the characters and descriptions I enjoyed and look forward to the next chapter happy new year regards Jill
Comment Written 30-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2016
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Thanks so much friend. Rox
Comment from MizKat
Hi Roxanna,
I hope you don't mind if I show some mistakes you've made and that you can change quickly. In your first lines you wrote: It wasn't an easy placed to find -
remove the "d" in placed so it reads: It wasn't an easy place to find. Also you wrote: But the times when someone did stumbled upon it; It just doesn't sound right. Why not say: But "there were" times when someone stumbled upon it; (remove the word "did") . They would describe as a land of giants, some called them the shining giants. (Remove the word "as") Well this is getting too long so I'll stop showing you what needs to be changed.
This is getting long so I'll read the rest of your story. I was amazed at how nice all the rest of it was written. I really enjoyed reading your wonderful story.
MizKat or Kat
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2016
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Hi Roxanna,
I hope you don't mind if I show some mistakes you've made and that you can change quickly. In your first lines you wrote: It wasn't an easy placed to find -
remove the "d" in placed so it reads: It wasn't an easy place to find. Also you wrote: But the times when someone did stumbled upon it; It just doesn't sound right. Why not say: But "there were" times when someone stumbled upon it; (remove the word "did") . They would describe as a land of giants, some called them the shining giants. (Remove the word "as") Well this is getting too long so I'll stop showing you what needs to be changed.
This is getting long so I'll read the rest of your story. I was amazed at how nice all the rest of it was written. I really enjoyed reading your wonderful story.
MizKat or Kat
Comment Written 30-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2016
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Thank you so much for finding my boo boo's and for the great review. Rox
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Your very welcome. I like to help people. I'm glad it didn't bother you.
Kat
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I'm happy that it didn't bother you when I found things that needed fixing.
I love to help people when I can and hope they will help me too. Kat
Comment from mbroyles2
A lovely story with wonderful characters. The main character Nyla is easy to connect with and we find ourselves rooting for her.
The setting is great.
Too bad the men aren't 8 feet tall, I rather like giants. :D
Michael
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2016
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A lovely story with wonderful characters. The main character Nyla is easy to connect with and we find ourselves rooting for her.
The setting is great.
Too bad the men aren't 8 feet tall, I rather like giants. :D
Michael
Comment Written 30-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2016
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I did write a poem about Goliath if you like giants. =} Thanks so much for the great review. Rox
Comment from nancy_e_davis
It wasn't an easy place[d]add d
causing more speculation that she was cur[s]ed. add s
Nyla had [a] little fear add a
Is this a viking story Roxie? I find it to be interesting. I found a few Typo's in the story. I know how hard it is to edit your own work so I will rate this a five. Well done. Nancy
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2016
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It wasn't an easy place[d]add d
causing more speculation that she was cur[s]ed. add s
Nyla had [a] little fear add a
Is this a viking story Roxie? I find it to be interesting. I found a few Typo's in the story. I know how hard it is to edit your own work so I will rate this a five. Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 30-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2016
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Thanks for the corrections. I can read something 100x and still miss things. Glad we have reviewers to see them. =] Rox
Comment from patcelaw
Roxanna this is a delightful story. I enjoyed very much reading it. At one point you misspelled the name of Nyla, you wrote Nayla. Have a happy New Year. Patricia
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2016
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Roxanna this is a delightful story. I enjoyed very much reading it. At one point you misspelled the name of Nyla, you wrote Nayla. Have a happy New Year. Patricia
Comment Written 30-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2016
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Thanks so much. Rox
Comment from royowen
I rather like your story of these impressively built Viking like people of Walgaland, and Nyla, who is well served by her brothers, who do not like her outcast status because of height lack, but determine to watch over her and guard her, taking terms, one their friend Dak, comes and explains her brothers are off on an expedition, so he will look after her. Well done, I enjoyed your story, good characters, plot, and well written and spagless, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2016
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I rather like your story of these impressively built Viking like people of Walgaland, and Nyla, who is well served by her brothers, who do not like her outcast status because of height lack, but determine to watch over her and guard her, taking terms, one their friend Dak, comes and explains her brothers are off on an expedition, so he will look after her. Well done, I enjoyed your story, good characters, plot, and well written and spagless, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2016
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Thank you so much Roy. Rox
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Well done Roxanna