life bouquets
a 3 5 3 senryu4 total reviews
Comment from winnona
A well-written contest entry. The words flowed well and combined easily forming the message of the poem for the reader. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2016
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A well-written contest entry. The words flowed well and combined easily forming the message of the poem for the reader. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2016
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Thanks for the review and wishing you Happy New Year, j
Comment from angel123
Your poem is meaningful and your artwork choice enhances your message of your love of nature. It also flows well. Happy Holidays!
angel123
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2016
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Your poem is meaningful and your artwork choice enhances your message of your love of nature. It also flows well. Happy Holidays!
angel123
Comment Written 30-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2016
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Thanks for the review. Flowers symbolise so many events in life, a funeral being the last bouquet.Cheers,j
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully with a correct line and syllable count. You deliver a lovely portrait of the essence of love and being loved. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully with a correct line and syllable count. You deliver a lovely portrait of the essence of love and being loved. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016
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Thanks for the review. Isn't a kind word or a random act of compassion like seeds that we can plant along our journey. And with fertile hearts, I like to think they grow.Cheers, all the best for the Mew Year.... darn cat, New Year. Cheers, j
Comment from Dean Kuch
Oh, how delightful.
Love can plant the seeds of so many things. A new beginning; like a freshly spouted flower in spring.
I see just one minor problem with your entry, and it has to do with the syllable count as required by the contest rules. It states, Write a 3-5-3 senryu on love. Yours is a 3-4-3.
Syllables Per Line: 3 4 3
Total # Syllables: 10
Total # Lines: 3 (Including empty lines)
Words with (syllables) counted programmatically: N/A
Total # Words: 7
Change that (it should be a rather easy fix), and you'll be good to go.
Best of luck!
~Dean
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016
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Oh, how delightful.
Love can plant the seeds of so many things. A new beginning; like a freshly spouted flower in spring.
I see just one minor problem with your entry, and it has to do with the syllable count as required by the contest rules. It states, Write a 3-5-3 senryu on love. Yours is a 3-4-3.
Syllables Per Line: 3 4 3
Total # Syllables: 10
Total # Lines: 3 (Including empty lines)
Words with (syllables) counted programmatically: N/A
Total # Words: 7
Change that (it should be a rather easy fix), and you'll be good to go.
Best of luck!
~Dean
Comment Written 29-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016
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Thanks for the explicit review. I am a little loopy today. Actually changed it completely and think this new one is better. Silver lining and all, Cheers, j
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Cheers...
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Thank you Dean, j
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You're welcome.