Comment from giraffmang

Good

There is nothing inherently wrong with this tale, but it doesn't really go anywhere. The story is very light. I was waiting for some small lesson to be incorporated but it didn't come.

the heavy fruit to the class room - classroom.

The punctuation such as full stops and commas should really come inside the speech marks.

"Another hour", Douglas asks amazed - the dialogue should have a question mark.

All the best
GMG

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 Comment Written 30-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Dec-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine Have a good start in the New Year.

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

Hi Robina
Funny reading this after my daughter made us pumpkin soup last week in France while we were there over the Christmas. It was delicious. You have written a lovely story about the children in the class waiting for to have some.

Well done
mary

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Dec-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a Happy New year.

Comment from davisr (Rhonda)

Excellent

A nice children's story about making pumpkin soup in class. What were the other ingredients that went into it, and what did it taste like? I might make it with my students. haha.

Have a wonderful New Year,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have great New Year. I have no clue how you make it.

reply by davisr (Rhonda) on 29-Dec-2016

Ahh, but you made it sound so good!

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I could smell the soup and my stomach rumbled too. I've steamed pumpkin before, but I've never made pumpkin soup--now, I want to give it a try! VMarguarite's artwork is perfect for your warmhearted story. Cheers and sweet dreams- Joan

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have very happy New Year.

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

Cute kids' story. It's great for kids to learn how to do things like making pumpkin soup. A nice class project. It would be especially challenging for them to make it from a pumpkin. (I'd use a can of puree.) I think pumpkin soup would need more than just the water. Add some cream or milk and chicken broth, maybe. Your dialogue works well. Remember to leave a space between speeches to separate the different speakers. judi

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have very happy New Year.

reply by judiverse on 29-Dec-2016

You're quite welcome. Happy New Year to you, any my Smokey kitty says hello to your Smokey. judi

Comment from mbroyles2

Excellent

I've never heard of pumpkin soup so I learned something today.
I'm not a pumpkin fan, but I'd give it a try.
A nice bedtime story.
Easy to read and imagine.
Well Done!
Michael

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have very happy New Year.

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

it will be ready-keep tense the same
"Another hour?"
"In a little while, you will get

Just some suggestions. Very cute children's piece. I never had the craving for pumpkin soup.lol

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have very happy New Year. Thanks for the tip.

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hi Ine,

Your story was written very well and I enjoyed reading it.

Is Douglas your son who loves to eat this type of food and will eat a lot of it?

Thanks for sharing this wonderful story with us as it was fun to read.

Kat

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have very happy New Year.

reply by MizKat on 29-Dec-2016

Hi Ine,

Thanks for telling me to have happy New Year. I hope it will grand and that yours will be too.

Kat

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Pumpkin pie is the only way I like vegetable. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good memory.

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have very happy New Year.

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

That's a great idea Ine. I never in my life thought about making a soup out of pumpkin. My son loves pumpkin pie, but he eats the entire pie when he gets started. Maybe pumpkin soup would fill his need for pumpkin? LOL Cute story. Children will like it I think. XXX Nancy

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have very happy New Year.