Comment from WriteSins!

Excellent

Excellent work! I very much enjoyed the eerie feel felt throughout the entire poem. Great use of vivid word choice to help aid the creepiness of the poem. Keep it up and happy holidays!

 Comment Written 23-Dec-2016

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

this is a chilly piece of poetry dear jeni! you show an array of talent here on this site since there seems to be no format that you would suck on. you excel in all areas of writing!
thank you for sharing!
sixer if i had one!
blessings!
rebekka x

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016

I don't know rebekka, I can tell you that I suck on writing sonnets and using the right meter! But, I go ahead and write anyway. I have to. You know what I mean...

love,

jeni

reply by rjuselius on 22-Dec-2016

indeed, i do. i've always said that i don't write because i want to, i write because i have to :)

Comment from Winslow

Excellent

Dear Luna,

This is a dark and blood red poem. For to seek eternity among the dead is a false hope. Rather seek to redeem yourself and return to the fold of Christianity.

Happy Holidays,

Winslow

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016

Hi Winslow, it's been quite some time since we've been in contact. Good to see this review from you.

To make a point, I am a very spiritual person, but enjoy dark and Gothic images. Because I write about something doesn't mean that's the way I am, it just means that I felt like exploring the poem's subject!

Many thanks for your reading and reviewing my poem, Winslow. Again, it was nice to see you again.

Comment from duchessofdrumborg

Excellent

"Conversation with my Maker" is a well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. To my delight much is left to the reader's imagination.

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016

Dear duchess,

Thank you so much for the comment about much being left to the reader's imagination. I am so happy that you didn't mind, but to the contrary, enjoyed it. I appreciate your continued support of my portfolio.

Always,

jeni

Comment from Johnnord

Exceptional

Vvid and powerful with great imagery and emotion, my favorite verse was the conclusion which wrapped it up nicely yet encourages the reader to contemplate what's next. Picture is very cool!

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016

I first have to thank you for this exceptional six-star review on this poem. I'm happy that you shared your favorite part with me. Again, I'm so flattered by the six-star review. I wish you a truly happy holiday season!

Thanks again,

luna

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

Extremely eerie!!! Vampires I'm assuming from the picture, and the promise of eternity. Looks like a very hard form to master, you've done well here. Merry Christmas!!!

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016

Dear Irish Rain, it's nice to see you.

You're correct, vampires. I've now written three Sestinas and all but the first one have turned out fine. The form really isn't that hard to master if you use the right words. On my next one, I'm going to use the advice I got from Jim and utilize a verb or two in my choice of words.

Merry Christmas to you as well, my friend.

Yours,

luna

Comment from Oatmeal

Excellent

Luna,

Your arrangement looks very nice. The theme was well chosen. Everything was wonderful except for one slight problem. The problem was the red lettering on the black background. It burned my eyes when I read it.

I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016

Hi Oatmeal, always good to see you! I appreciate your gracious review and your suggestion. I'll take a look at some other colors that would work with the story and the black. I look forward to seeing you again, as well.

Love you,

jeni

Comment from Douglas Paul

Excellent

This is really a forbidding and enchanting poem, Lune. It feels very dark and mysterious. The story you told is well done

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016

Dear Douglas,

I thank you sincerely for this kind review. Your reading and reviewing my poem is appreciated!

Merry Christmas!

luna

Comment from davisr (Rhonda)

Excellent

An interesting conversation between a vampire (I'm guessing) and the one who made him a vampire. Should he cause others to become like him, or would it be better to just work on his relationship with the one who made him?

Good questions.
Take care,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016

Hi Rhonda,

Your question is the exact question that I hoped that readers would extract from this poem. Thanks soo much for this review! I hope you have a happy holiday season.

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

I think this reminds of 'Twilight' where the Maker is, to the various breeds, the one who is on the dark side, but from it is born good yet, questions, and plenty of understanding to do.

As to the form...sometimes I think it better not listing the form as it narrows the angle as if one is supposed to experience it differently. I never do...I rely on your output, whatever the form.
Unless this was a book of forms, the form would have little interest to me if buying your book. How I experience your write would...and to be honest, a publisher would not allow you to write of the form...kiss of death.

I followed your narrative well and you did nicely, though a little in and out of the archaic style.

You did very well. I enjoyed it much. Twilight is one of my favorite supernatural series...I am a sucker for them.

Best wishes.
RGstar

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016

Hi, and it's nice to hear from you again. You know, I did start a book of form poetry and I suppose it would be a good idea not to be so lax in including the form poetry I've been writing. I appreciate your thoughts, and hope you have a really happy holiday season!

Yours,

luna