Her Highness
Queen of the Night11 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a very nicely composed and interesting poem. Congratulations on winning the contest. Presented well. All lines are great, but these are especially good:
"driving men mad with
desires so intense - they bow
and howl like wild wolves"
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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This is a very nicely composed and interesting poem. Congratulations on winning the contest. Presented well. All lines are great, but these are especially good:
"driving men mad with
desires so intense - they bow
and howl like wild wolves"
Comment Written 17-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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Glad you enjoyed it. Appreciated the positive feedback!
Comment from judester
Bravo and congratulations on the win. This is a beautiful poem, a tribute to the beautiful moon and how she moves us all. I enjoyed this one. Cheers, judester
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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Bravo and congratulations on the win. This is a beautiful poem, a tribute to the beautiful moon and how she moves us all. I enjoyed this one. Cheers, judester
Comment Written 17-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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T hank you very much!
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Cheers, well done. j
Comment from Franklin Price
I don't give six stars on a whim. I also don't like the 5-7-5 format very much. Your stacked 5-7-5 changed my mind about all of this. with a form, I don't like you have brought the moon to life and all its wonders. I howl my wonderment to you and give you my vote also. Great job!!
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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I don't give six stars on a whim. I also don't like the 5-7-5 format very much. Your stacked 5-7-5 changed my mind about all of this. with a form, I don't like you have brought the moon to life and all its wonders. I howl my wonderment to you and give you my vote also. Great job!!
Comment Written 16-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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Thank you so much!
Comment from winnona
This is a beautiful poem. A very good contest entry. Your words flowed well line to line combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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This is a beautiful poem. A very good contest entry. Your words flowed well line to line combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
I love your stacked 5/7/5!!! Yours is the only entry that treated 5/7/5 like a 5/7/5
There are some amazing entries, well there are three amazing entries that make it hard for me to choose. But yours is the true 5/7/5. I like what you did with the enjambment. I've never seen it done before with this kind of poem. Well done!
Gypsy
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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Hello, anonymous,
I love your stacked 5/7/5!!! Yours is the only entry that treated 5/7/5 like a 5/7/5
There are some amazing entries, well there are three amazing entries that make it hard for me to choose. But yours is the true 5/7/5. I like what you did with the enjambment. I've never seen it done before with this kind of poem. Well done!
Gypsy
Comment Written 16-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!
Comment from cumulus365
This is a very interesting artistic poem. Creatively you generated a story that use all the sensory to pack in describing the moon's doing. I like the simile you fit in. The background color closely resembled the night and the illustration captured the most beautiful image of the full moon being at its brightest and roundest. Well written piece. Best regards.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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This is a very interesting artistic poem. Creatively you generated a story that use all the sensory to pack in describing the moon's doing. I like the simile you fit in. The background color closely resembled the night and the illustration captured the most beautiful image of the full moon being at its brightest and roundest. Well written piece. Best regards.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Craigitar
Very well done! Great descriptive imagery stanza to stanza. Nothing not to like here. Good job and luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2016
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Very well done! Great descriptive imagery stanza to stanza. Nothing not to like here. Good job and luck with the contest.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2016
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Thank you so much!
Comment from persevere
I love this majestic portrayal of the moon. The third stanza is a cleverly worded effect of the gravitation effect of the moon on the oceans. The last stanza depicts the effect the moon is supposed to have on men. The term lunatic stems from the latter.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2016
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I love this majestic portrayal of the moon. The third stanza is a cleverly worded effect of the gravitation effect of the moon on the oceans. The last stanza depicts the effect the moon is supposed to have on men. The term lunatic stems from the latter.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2016
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Thank you for your positive feedback!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written stacked 5-7-5 poem about the queen of the night that fascinates and mesmerize men and animal when she appears at night in full dress.
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reply by the author on 15-Dec-2016
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A very well-written stacked 5-7-5 poem about the queen of the night that fascinates and mesmerize men and animal when she appears at night in full dress.
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Comment Written 15-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2016
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Wanted to highlight the mystery with a little fun - thanks for the positive feedback!
Comment from rama devi
I love the moon and consider her a reflection of the Goddess too...She was full last night-stunning!
Nice opening image and extended metaphor with Goddess plus court. Also fine alliteration of S and consonance of L and S too:
A silver goddess
ruling the night surrounded
by her court of stars
Nice tone and ten or and phonetics here too--note one nit:
Illuminating
midnight skies while e(E)arth falls deep
into sweet slumber
Love the whimsical personification here:
Teasing the oceans
with her great magnetism -
laughing as waves crash
Interesting closing line--lunatics indeed:
Driving men mad with
desires so intense - they bow
and howl like the wolves
Since the poem reads like one long run on sentence (which is appealing because of the fluidity), I recommend using no caps since all those gerunds flow without halts.
It suits the theme well--as the moon is one in all her stages...
Just one more suggestion to replace the word THE with descriptive words (optional). Otherwise, fine word economy.
Love the stunning presentation.
Nice work. Good entry. Great luck to you!
Warmly, rd
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reply by the author on 15-Dec-2016
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I love the moon and consider her a reflection of the Goddess too...She was full last night-stunning!
Nice opening image and extended metaphor with Goddess plus court. Also fine alliteration of S and consonance of L and S too:
A silver goddess
ruling the night surrounded
by her court of stars
Nice tone and ten or and phonetics here too--note one nit:
Illuminating
midnight skies while e(E)arth falls deep
into sweet slumber
Love the whimsical personification here:
Teasing the oceans
with her great magnetism -
laughing as waves crash
Interesting closing line--lunatics indeed:
Driving men mad with
desires so intense - they bow
and howl like the wolves
Since the poem reads like one long run on sentence (which is appealing because of the fluidity), I recommend using no caps since all those gerunds flow without halts.
It suits the theme well--as the moon is one in all her stages...
Just one more suggestion to replace the word THE with descriptive words (optional). Otherwise, fine word economy.
Love the stunning presentation.
Nice work. Good entry. Great luck to you!
Warmly, rd
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2016
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Thank you for the insightful suggestions! Will definitely make some changes. Appreciate he honest review.
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