The Shoes That Didn't Fit
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
Miss Scenario with draw the reader in: "But she grabbed the shoes and told me never to touch them again." They will be invited to speculate as to why the shoes are so precious: "But she grabbed the shoes and told me never to touch them again." At least she didn't enforce the culture: "So, when my great grandmother had her own daughter, she didn't make her bind her feet"
This has a good resolution.
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Miss Scenario with draw the reader in: "But she grabbed the shoes and told me never to touch them again." They will be invited to speculate as to why the shoes are so precious: "But she grabbed the shoes and told me never to touch them again." At least she didn't enforce the culture: "So, when my great grandmother had her own daughter, she didn't make her bind her feet"
This has a good resolution.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2023
Comment from writerwish
Excellent entry. It is childlike and consistent. I found no mistakes. I like the part at the end where she didn'the want to wear them anyways..
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2016
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Excellent entry. It is childlike and consistent. I found no mistakes. I like the part at the end where she didn'the want to wear them anyways..
Comment Written 14-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2016
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Thank you so much!
Comment from RazorFace
I have big feet too! No matter how hard I try, the only thing I ever accomplished of note with them was my innate ability to stick it in my mouth. It was a brutal tradition in China, here the closest we have are high heel shoes :). Nice woman's empowerment piece slipped in under the guise of a little girl :).
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2016
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I have big feet too! No matter how hard I try, the only thing I ever accomplished of note with them was my innate ability to stick it in my mouth. It was a brutal tradition in China, here the closest we have are high heel shoes :). Nice woman's empowerment piece slipped in under the guise of a little girl :).
Comment Written 14-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2016
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Thank you for your positive review and insights!
Comment from sanejane
This is lovely! I feel sick when I think of the way Chinese and Japanese mothers had to break the bones in their daughters feet, so that they would have the chance of a "good" marriage. Thank goodness that has receded into history.
I have big feet; big, healthy feet that were allowed to run around shoeless when I was a child.
Thank you for sharing this superb story "though the eyes of a child. I hope you win the contest. I must make sure to vote.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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This is lovely! I feel sick when I think of the way Chinese and Japanese mothers had to break the bones in their daughters feet, so that they would have the chance of a "good" marriage. Thank goodness that has receded into history.
I have big feet; big, healthy feet that were allowed to run around shoeless when I was a child.
Thank you for sharing this superb story "though the eyes of a child. I hope you win the contest. I must make sure to vote.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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Thank you so much!
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It's my pleasure.
Comment from djeckert
a nicely told story with a very strong moral or lesson. With some cultural enlightenment too. Well done childs eye story. Heads up on a typo: " I just wanted (to)try them on".. well done God blesses.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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a nicely told story with a very strong moral or lesson. With some cultural enlightenment too. Well done childs eye story. Heads up on a typo: " I just wanted (to)try them on".. well done God blesses.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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Thanks for the nice review and correction!
Comment from jmcfadden1528
I found two messages behind this story. First, we should be grateful for our way of life. Second, a change invoked by just one person can benefit generations for centuries to come. You got this all in a short story. Nice work.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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I found two messages behind this story. First, we should be grateful for our way of life. Second, a change invoked by just one person can benefit generations for centuries to come. You got this all in a short story. Nice work.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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Thank you so much!
