Comment from angel123

Excellent

Your story within a poem is interesting and I like the way you compared the auto shop to a hospital. Your poem flows well and it held my attention. Good alliteration of words throughout your poem and good luck in the contest and happy holidays.

angel 123

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2016

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Thank you for the read and your comments. Much appreciated.

Comment from Dustybones

Excellent

A nice memory you've told here. I like how Weber though of himself as a car doctor.
They were his patients coming on to be healed. dustybones

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2016

Thanks much for the read and the comment.

Comment from cumulus365

Exceptional

This poem sets a sad tone in that so many good things happened under that roof now that building had to be brought down. I am very nostalgic comes to good things, and this poem, in which you did a very good job at using all poetic techniques, my I have never read such details using useful literary mechanics to decorate this poem, is beautifully crafted. Straight to the point with onomatopoeia words to let me in to the building to hear ( I love it), simile "this is my hospital" (I agree about the auto shops), metaphors "Bumpers and fenders waited in orthopedic array" Mechanics performed miracle operations (I love it). A simple but straight to the point, detailed, touching poem. I'd frame this one up if I wrote it. I hope you'd win the entry. Best, cumulus.

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2016

Thank you so much for your kind words and the rating. Very deeply appreciated.

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

Hi
this is a well-written story about Mr Webster and your fond memories of him. It is very sad for us when we witness a lifetime wiped out in seconds.
I wish you the best of luck in the contest
Mary

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2016

Thanks so much for the read. Very much appreciated.

Comment from Marykelly

Excellent

This is a story within a poem about admiration for the man, Mr. Weber, whose repair shop has taken on the atmosphere and organization of an operating room. The poem is really one of admiration for Mr. Weber and his accomplishments and at the same time it's something of a dirge for Mr. Weber and for Mr. Weber's garage.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016

Thanks for the read and the stars.

Comment from mbroyles2

Excellent

A complete story in the form of a poem.
The backstory was terrific.
The words are displayed with emotion and conviction.
A sad ending destroys the physical but the memories remain.
Nice Job!
Michael

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016

Thank you for the read and the comments.

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

An excellent contest entry. Reliving memories of the past sometimes a sound or smell can bring back vivid memories of pleasant days gone by.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016

Thanks for the read and the comment.