Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes this is a feeling we can all have when we wake up early a feeling of being so alone isolation I liked your poem it reads well with lots of feeling through the work regards Jill

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Thanks so much for the marvellous review And comments,

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Can you imagine how Adam must have felt before Eve was created. Now can you imagine how God must have felt before he began his creative work? The Bible said that he felt lonely. This great unimaginable power was so lonely that he began creating to such an extent that he created a world so vast that time and space as we know it can not measure it. Yet his love was so strong that he was able to create a tiny little planet and place man and woman upon it, giving them everything that would satisfy their needs and desires.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Thanks so much for the marvellous review And comments

Comment from EricBrady

Excellent

Beautifully done. Vivid descriptions throughout and the perfect example of how the light of God conquers darkness. Erasing all fear and desolation and replacing it with mercy, grace, hope and joy. This is a great entry for the contest and strong contender. Beatiful words and a beautiful presentation.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Thanks so much Eric, for the marvellous review And comments,

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Have you ever felt total isolation
in the stillness of the night before the dawn?
The blackness utters thoughts of hell's damnation,
yet our faith will usher grace at early morn. ... Yes, and I still do sometimes, even now...


Seeds of doubt are planted(,) by the shadow's spawn;
steal compassion's hope; on winds of fear they're borne.
darkness hides the light and masks truth's silent way,
but mercy greets the dawn, on beams of brightness lay. ... Drop the comma in the above line where indicated in red as it isn't necessary.
Good use of rhyme and strong word choices.
This is a very strong entry for the contest.
I wish you the very best of luck.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Thanks so much for the marvellous review And comments,

reply by Dean Kuch on 10-Dec-2016

You're very welcome.
~Dean

Comment from CEO2020

Exceptional

The 6 stars say it all like the words of your Two Stanza Poem. I highlight the first among equals - 'Seeds of doubt are planted, by the shadow's spawn;
steal compassion's hope; on winds of fear they're borne.
darkness hides the light and masks truth's silent way,
but mercy greets the dawn, on beams of brightness lay.'

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2016

Thanks so much for the super review and marvellous comments, blessings, Roy

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

Your words resonate with the calmness of the image, but more in line with your theme.
Good connection. I like the role of ''mercy''
Good luck in the competition.
Best wishes.
RGstar

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Thanks so much RG, for the great review

Comment from Ella25

Excellent

The light draws us near, and we push the darkness away. Our faith keeps us stronger and hope us the joy. Well written and a beautiful image that complements the words. Blessings, Ella

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Thanks so much Ella, for the great review

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

This is written like a rispetto with a different rhyme scheme in each stanza. The rhythm has an anapestic feel over all but is actually mixed on some lines (the first and the last)

"Have you ever felt complete isolation" I want to regularize this line by writing
"Have you ever felt such total isolation" I changed to total to get the stress on the first syllable.

"but, mercy greets the dawn, revealing hope's new day" I am not sure what would be best for this line. Cutting out the "but" makes for metrical regularity but destroys the sense. It doesn't quite work as it is though. I am not prepared to drop a star for just two errors but I would suggest you look at that last line again before it goes into the voting booth.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Thanks Jim, so much for the great review

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

I'm glad you chose a picture of the dawn so that even those your poem told much of the complete isolation of the darkness - we know that there is hope in the morning light b
Very nice two stanza poem.

Janet

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Thanks so much Janet, for the great review

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

I like this poem, it has vibrant thoughts written with good poetic verve. It's better than just saying it's darkest just before the dawn. This was an excellent piece of poetic art that I enjoyed reading and writing this response for... John

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Thanks so much John for the great review