Writing Poems
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Comment from Lu Saluna
Hi Portia,
That was an awesome mono-rhyme! And a wonderful story you told as well, not just a bunch of nonsequential rhyming words. I thinks these are difficult.
Good for you!
"I've tried to pen a short pantomime"
"Words become silent and lost in time"
Love those two lines
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016
Hi Portia,
That was an awesome mono-rhyme! And a wonderful story you told as well, not just a bunch of nonsequential rhyming words. I thinks these are difficult.
Good for you!
"I've tried to pen a short pantomime"
"Words become silent and lost in time"
Love those two lines
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016
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Lu,
You are so kind, thank you for such an outstanding review, your kind comments and best wishes are greatly appreciated. Blessings...................Portia
Comment from Pantygynt
Ten lines of monorhyme! That is pretty good going now do one on "orange" or "silver". Lol. I am only joking that would be pretty nigh impossible, likewise purple. What is good about this is that it works as a poem and tels its own little story as well as simply rhyming line by line.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016
Ten lines of monorhyme! That is pretty good going now do one on "orange" or "silver". Lol. I am only joking that would be pretty nigh impossible, likewise purple. What is good about this is that it works as a poem and tels its own little story as well as simply rhyming line by line.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016
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Pantygynt,
Thanks for making my day, when I get a good review from you, a smile comes on my face. I appreciate your review, kindness and support. Blessings.................Portia
Comment from RodG
A delightful monorhyme where the tone is self-mocking. You even evoke our sympathy by having been disqualified after working overtime on that haiku.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016
A delightful monorhyme where the tone is self-mocking. You even evoke our sympathy by having been disqualified after working overtime on that haiku.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016
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RodG,
Thanks for your review and sympathy, actually I got disqualified several times, didn't stop me; finally I got it right. I really appreciate your review and comments. Blessings...................Portia
Comment from humpwhistle
Well, I hope you break through the clutter
with this one. It's hard to make sense with a Monorhyme.
Especially without torturing syntax.
I hope you do better this time around.
Peace, Lee
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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016
Well, I hope you break through the clutter
with this one. It's hard to make sense with a Monorhyme.
Especially without torturing syntax.
I hope you do better this time around.
Peace, Lee
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Comment Written 09-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016
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Lee,
We shall see if this Monorhyme will make it or not. Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments they are greatly appreciated. Blessings...................Portia
Comment from I am Cat
Very cute! pen a pantomime... that would be difficult! lol
Very nicely done...
I do think that in the last line, that should be may be instead of maybe... it has a different meaning to say penning the poem may be a crime, and maybe it's a crime... see? ;)
Awesome job and great luck in the contest my friend!
Merry Christmas
love you
Cat
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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016
Very cute! pen a pantomime... that would be difficult! lol
Very nicely done...
I do think that in the last line, that should be may be instead of maybe... it has a different meaning to say penning the poem may be a crime, and maybe it's a crime... see? ;)
Awesome job and great luck in the contest my friend!
Merry Christmas
love you
Cat
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Comment Written 09-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016
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Cat,
You are a sweetie, thanks so much for your support and kindness. I appreciate you bringing the error to my attention and I understand exactly what you mean........You are the greatest, I love you and Merry Christmas to you and your family. Blessings...........Portia
Comment from Dean Kuch
No doubt about it, this is a mono-rhyme alright, and a darn good mono-rhyme at that, Portia.
It's a contest entry so I wouldn't go so far as to consider it crime, heh-heh...
Well done,
Good luck in the contest.
~Dean :)
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016
No doubt about it, this is a mono-rhyme alright, and a darn good mono-rhyme at that, Portia.
It's a contest entry so I wouldn't go so far as to consider it crime, heh-heh...
Well done,
Good luck in the contest.
~Dean :)
Comment Written 09-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016
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Wow Dean,
You just made my heart jump for joy!!! Thanks so much for your very kind and awesome review. You made my day. This is a win for me. Blessings my friend and have a great day.................Portia
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The pleasure was all mine, Portia.
Have a wonderful weekend.
~Dean :)