Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Inside a teardrop"a place to gather my poetic forms
24 total reviews
Comment from Janet Foor
I am not familiar with this poetic form. A very challenging concept.
I loved the artwork and presentation and the short staccato lines.
Well done
Janet
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I am not familiar with this poetic form. A very challenging concept.
I loved the artwork and presentation and the short staccato lines.
Well done
Janet
Comment Written 07-Dec-2016
Comment from robyn corum
Luna,
I feel like I'm picking on you. *smile* But when you have four poems on the front page, I suppose you're going to get a lot of attention, huh? Go, girl!
I don't see too many blitz poems that I like. Most people just write them in a haphazard fashion, and I really don't think that's the way they're meant to be. I think in the best case scenario they should still be able to tell some kind of a story or stick to SOME kind of a theme at least. Surely... Maybe? Anyway. I will not lower your rating because I don't like the form - that would not be fair - but I would encourage you to try harder to deepen the experience for the reader, to go farther -- to try to tell some kind of a story, if possible. (I know, you're thinking I'm totally insane.)
Anyway. This is as good a blitz poem as any other I've seen on FS. Thanks for sharing!
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Luna,
I feel like I'm picking on you. *smile* But when you have four poems on the front page, I suppose you're going to get a lot of attention, huh? Go, girl!
I don't see too many blitz poems that I like. Most people just write them in a haphazard fashion, and I really don't think that's the way they're meant to be. I think in the best case scenario they should still be able to tell some kind of a story or stick to SOME kind of a theme at least. Surely... Maybe? Anyway. I will not lower your rating because I don't like the form - that would not be fair - but I would encourage you to try harder to deepen the experience for the reader, to go farther -- to try to tell some kind of a story, if possible. (I know, you're thinking I'm totally insane.)
Anyway. This is as good a blitz poem as any other I've seen on FS. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 07-Dec-2016
Comment from Aussie
A stunning presentation with the dew on the rose. You sure gave the reader lots of images to think about. I like the Blitz Poem for it's short lines and imagination. Well done. poet.
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A stunning presentation with the dew on the rose. You sure gave the reader lots of images to think about. I like the Blitz Poem for it's short lines and imagination. Well done. poet.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2016
Comment from Bucketlist
No wonder they call it a blitz - it took me by storm! I have never seen one until now. I am not expert enough to critique, but the fast paced flow and word selection impressed me. Thanks for a brain teasing poem.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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No wonder they call it a blitz - it took me by storm! I have never seen one until now. I am not expert enough to critique, but the fast paced flow and word selection impressed me. Thanks for a brain teasing poem.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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Dear Bucketlist,
I'm sorry this reply is so tardy. I am totally amazed by your six-star review on this poem. I'm so happy that you thought it brain teasing. That's exactly what this form is supposed to be!
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No problem - I guess I am more intuitive than I thought. LOL. I am learning more poetry styles every day. You are welcome!
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written I liked the way you built this poem I forgot about this form but it looks like it can be challenging and fun I enjoyed well-done regards Jill
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Yes this is well written I liked the way you built this poem I forgot about this form but it looks like it can be challenging and fun I enjoyed well-done regards Jill
Comment Written 06-Dec-2016
Comment from misscookie
I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem
It is a perfect match
Your work express the reason's for tear drops in ones eyes. This is what I call a food for thought poem meaning...
After you read it you go mm.
Thank you for sharing this deep write.
Cookie
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I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem
It is a perfect match
Your work express the reason's for tear drops in ones eyes. This is what I call a food for thought poem meaning...
After you read it you go mm.
Thank you for sharing this deep write.
Cookie
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Comment Written 06-Dec-2016
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Wow. Never seen one of these before, but I bet it takes a bit of working out. Yes, I remembered to breathe while reading through your Blitz poem. Great job, you tied everything together well.
cheers.
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Wow. Never seen one of these before, but I bet it takes a bit of working out. Yes, I remembered to breathe while reading through your Blitz poem. Great job, you tied everything together well.
cheers.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2016
Comment from Dean Kuch
I remember writing a couple of these types of poems called "blitz poems" for a contest awhile back, Jeni.
I always enjoyed the rat-a-tat-tat, machine-gun like staccato burst of words and the sound the poem had when it was read aloud in the manner it was intended.
Yours was no exception.
Well done.
~Dean
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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I remember writing a couple of these types of poems called "blitz poems" for a contest awhile back, Jeni.
I always enjoyed the rat-a-tat-tat, machine-gun like staccato burst of words and the sound the poem had when it was read aloud in the manner it was intended.
Yours was no exception.
Well done.
~Dean
Comment Written 06-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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Thanks, Dean! I'm happy to have your thoughts about it. I enjoy writing them as well. (If you want to see my older work from when I was here before, look at luna with a small "L". I think that's my profile. I wrote many, many poems and had them organized in books. I may post one of them here!
Why don't you write a blitz poem I dare you. Now you have to write one, right? Huh, Dean, Huh?
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow, I am out of breath- I loved it! I don't have a clue about how it should be written, really, as I've never written one, but according to your author's notes, yours is flawless. I want to try to write one some time - that's what your jewel did for me!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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Wow, I am out of breath- I loved it! I don't have a clue about how it should be written, really, as I've never written one, but according to your author's notes, yours is flawless. I want to try to write one some time - that's what your jewel did for me!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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Thanks so much for reading my work and for this review. I appreciate your attention to my work.
luna
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My pleasure.
Comment from Sis Cat
Wow, every time I turn a corner on FanStory, I find a new form of poetry I have never encountered before. I enjoyed what you describe as "a stream of short phrases and images with repetition and rapid flow." I can hear and imagine this as a spoken word poem. It has rhythm and propulsion. I am amazed by this form. I have been blitzkrieged by the Blitz. Thank you for introducing a new form of poetry to me.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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Wow, every time I turn a corner on FanStory, I find a new form of poetry I have never encountered before. I enjoyed what you describe as "a stream of short phrases and images with repetition and rapid flow." I can hear and imagine this as a spoken word poem. It has rhythm and propulsion. I am amazed by this form. I have been blitzkrieged by the Blitz. Thank you for introducing a new form of poetry to me.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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Thanks so much for reading my work and for this review. I appreciate your attention to my work.
luna
