Comment from LoannaLois

Excellent

In your writing, you had a lovely idea for your friend. Your poem sweetly spoke of her closet of clothing...making it difficult to remember her without "hurting to the core".. lovely tribute.

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017

Thanks for the insightful review. I thought making a cushion cover of all her familiar patterns would be ideal and comforting, cheers, j

Comment from Thal1959

Excellent

Very well written. Glad to see people are not having any trouble with the "quasi" variation of the Triolet. Just out of curiosity, "That floral dress, by the ocean shore" did you by any chance imagine a dress of chiffon? I did. Thanks.

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2016

Thanks for the review. I wrote this for a friend that was having problems dealing with her mother;s clothes after her death. I thought a nice big quilted pillow with pieces of her clothes might be a loving reminder. Cheers, j

reply by Thal1959 on 08-Dec-2016

It's always nice to have a poem help a friend rather than be read only by strangers.

reply by the author on 08-Dec-2016

At parties and weddings, I like to have pads and pencils available for people to write haikus, just for fun.When I am in Zanzibar and meet people, I write little haikus about them the day they leave and leave it leaning on their coffee cup in the morning. I had a couple both crying because they thought it was sweet. I hate goodbyes and little haikus make it easier, cheers, j

Comment from winnona

Excellent

Beautiful artwork. It and the background color completed the piece well. Your words flow together nicely and easily combined forming the message of the poem for the reader.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2016

Thanks for the review. I thought a pillow made from her mother's clothes would keep the memories close by, cheers, j

Comment from Hayley Solomon

Excellent

Lovely poem, very evocative, full of intense emotions and memories. I like your use of Synecdoche, the floral dress representing the whole loved person. Well done.
Best line?
memories in a fabric's weave. Lovely!

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2016

Thanks for the insightful review and teaching me a new word. My friend is having a hard time to sort her mom's clothes, I thought a pillow quilted from them would keep the memories alive and close at hand. Cheers, j