There have been times
the darkest night57 total reviews
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
A wonderful response to the prompt on emotions. Your poem is rich with pain and hurt. I could feel my own past experiences through your well chosen words. I love the way you depicted the raw emotion. Good luck in the contest,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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A wonderful response to the prompt on emotions. Your poem is rich with pain and hurt. I could feel my own past experiences through your well chosen words. I love the way you depicted the raw emotion. Good luck in the contest,
Rhonda
Comment Written 16-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Rhonda - thank you for your comments and encouragement.
And, nice to meet you!
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment from Leineco
Powerful write Relda. . .
many may be unfamiliar with the extremes of desolation
that leave one to question the value of life's continuance -
that exceed numbness, anger or feeling abandoned
your poem speaks compellingly to the issue of seemingly
unbearable pain that the world is capable of inflicting.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Powerful write Relda. . .
many may be unfamiliar with the extremes of desolation
that leave one to question the value of life's continuance -
that exceed numbness, anger or feeling abandoned
your poem speaks compellingly to the issue of seemingly
unbearable pain that the world is capable of inflicting.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Lorraine - Thank you for the insight, understanding and encouragement.
So glad to talk to you again.
Relda
Comment from Lu Saluna
You have written an amazing piece. You describe very well how deep our emotional pain can run. At times it does hurt so much it does feel like we could curl up and die. Very well written, with feeling and from the heart.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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You have written an amazing piece. You describe very well how deep our emotional pain can run. At times it does hurt so much it does feel like we could curl up and die. Very well written, with feeling and from the heart.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Hi, Lu - nice to meet you.
Thank you for your comments and encouragement.
I hope to get by your site soon and see what you are up to.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment from Writer51
Well written. It is a subject that I think many people have gone through. It's one that most people don't like to dwell on, but it is very real.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Well written. It is a subject that I think many people have gone through. It's one that most people don't like to dwell on, but it is very real.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Hi, nice to meet you.
Thank you for the review, comments and encouragement.
Hope to get by your site soon to see what you're up to.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment from entropic
Simply and accurately put, succinct but heartfelt. The only part I don't really get is the reference to food getting stuck in your throat - it doesn't really evoke an emotive response. But other than that, well put together and I'm a sucker for emotional free verse, nicely written.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Simply and accurately put, succinct but heartfelt. The only part I don't really get is the reference to food getting stuck in your throat - it doesn't really evoke an emotive response. But other than that, well put together and I'm a sucker for emotional free verse, nicely written.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Hi! Nice to meet you.
Thanks for the insight and encouragement.
The food bit - I tend to cover-up great hurt. If, for instance, I were dining with someone I truly cared for and, at the moment I was swallowing, they said or did something which caused a great wound in my heart, food won't go down my throat. My whole being squeezes tight against the hurt and a sob hits my throat. Of course, I try to cover that up while simultaneously choking.
I guess I can hide my hurt but not my reactions.
It happens sometimes when my hubby 'opens mouth' without 'engaging brain.' He says I'm being a 'girl' about it. Well, duh!
God bless and my best,
Relda
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Thanks for the clarification, makes a lot more sense now! All the best.
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem shows deep depression and suicidal tendancies. It is good that the speaker is still alive to write about it. Maybe some therapy or medication will help the speaker or has helped.
It doesn't seem like this is the end of the poem. Maybe you can add how the speaker decided life was better than death.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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This poem shows deep depression and suicidal tendancies. It is good that the speaker is still alive to write about it. Maybe some therapy or medication will help the speaker or has helped.
It doesn't seem like this is the end of the poem. Maybe you can add how the speaker decided life was better than death.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 16-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Hi! - Thank you for your insight and words of wisdom. I see your point completely. I did experience those 'times' noted in the poem - and felt the deep depression you describe. In those times, it was hard to see any light. Thank God, 'There were also times' of great joy.
God bless and my best,
Relda
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You're welcome. God bless you too.
Joan
Comment from Bill O'Bier
This is a soul stirring poem. It arouses great empathy in me. So much so I want to embrace the protagonist and just reassure them.... that this will pass.... focus only on now.....and the breath. The arrangement of your words are so very expressive. Thanks for sharing this piece.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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This is a soul stirring poem. It arouses great empathy in me. So much so I want to embrace the protagonist and just reassure them.... that this will pass.... focus only on now.....and the breath. The arrangement of your words are so very expressive. Thanks for sharing this piece.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill
Comment Written 16-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Bill - thank you for your insight and encouragement. I thank God 'there were also times' of great joy.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment from Asyraf N. Jamsari
Hi Relda,
This is a very well written short poem. It's heavy and well expressed in terms of the emotion. Simple choice of words but well thought. Neat presentation. Keep up the good work. Looking forward for the next post.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Hi Relda,
This is a very well written short poem. It's heavy and well expressed in terms of the emotion. Simple choice of words but well thought. Neat presentation. Keep up the good work. Looking forward for the next post.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Asyraf - Thank you so much for your comments, insight, and encouragement.
And, nice to meet you. I'll stop by your site soon and see what you're up to.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment from Susan Chetcuti
Your poem was heart touching. You describe your hurt feelings with such meaning through very few words. The saddest line for me was, when music brought no joy. Well written.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Your poem was heart touching. You describe your hurt feelings with such meaning through very few words. The saddest line for me was, when music brought no joy. Well written.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Susan - Thank you for your comments and encouragement. Those 'times' were dark! But, thank God, there have also been times of great light (when music did bring joy).
And ... very nice to meet you. Look forward to checking out your FS site.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment from LaRosa
'There Have Been Times' speaks to the broken moments of life which we all have experienced.
The whole first stanza expresses even the physical suffering that grief causes:
"...words, food, and tears stuck in my throat".
A heart absent of joy and overflowing with sorrow.
The reader is 'in the moment' with the afflicted.
We all can relate to the knowledge that not only can hurt be deep and intense, it can often be 'unfair'. Unfairness is the hardest to deal with.
Yet the writer ends in hope and reality: life may feel like it can't go on but somehow it does.
This writer has the ability to draw her reader into the 'moment'. It has a perfect rhythm and timing even for reading aloud.
Good Poem!
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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'There Have Been Times' speaks to the broken moments of life which we all have experienced.
The whole first stanza expresses even the physical suffering that grief causes:
"...words, food, and tears stuck in my throat".
A heart absent of joy and overflowing with sorrow.
The reader is 'in the moment' with the afflicted.
We all can relate to the knowledge that not only can hurt be deep and intense, it can often be 'unfair'. Unfairness is the hardest to deal with.
Yet the writer ends in hope and reality: life may feel like it can't go on but somehow it does.
This writer has the ability to draw her reader into the 'moment'. It has a perfect rhythm and timing even for reading aloud.
Good Poem!
Comment Written 15-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Hi! Nice to meet you.
Thank you for your comments and insight. Thank God, also, for 'times' of great light.
Looking forward to checking out your FS site!
God bless and my best.
Relda
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Nice to talk to you, too! AND THANKS for considering looking at my site. Hint: I put some of my first (and fav's) in the 'book' section. Want to figure out how to put it into 'something'. Then they were no longer on reg reader site. I goofed. Hope you may check THOSE out! as said before, I did enjoy reading your's out-loud. So many don't lend themselves to it.
