Comment from Joan E.

Exceptional

Thank you for the reminder and exhortation to celebrate our own "uniqueness". I admired your use of alliteration to accentuate your message and original phrases like "be a willing beginner". Best wishes in the Free Verse contest- Joan

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016

Thank you so much Joan for your exceptional rating of my free verse poem, I really appreciate it. Mary

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

A fine piece of free verse that uses a number of poetic devices to get its message across. The most salient feature of the poem is the use of repeated use of gerunds in exemplifying the reasons for statements made, to the extent that this practice almost defines the unity of the piece.

The last use of a word ending in -ing is however not a gerund but a present participle, "finding" in the last stanza a classic case of a present participle used after verb of perception "to wonder".

This is a well constructed poem, might have benefited from a bit more of the beauty that it mentions. It all seems somewhat clinical to me.

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016

Thank you for your excellent review. I feel the beauty that you think it lacks has to be in the reader suggested by the poem. Mary

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

very good, Nicely done on the free verse. dreams are made possible everyday for those willing to reach out and try. Good luck on this and have a great day

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016

Thanks Willia, Mary

Comment from valmay

Excellent

I loved this, and found it uplifting. People are unique and deserve to be treated well. I think we all know it, but as you pointed out so beautifully we have to believe it about ourselves first. Thank you

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016

Thanks valmay for a lovely review with great comments. Mary

Comment from Heather Knight

Excellent

This is absolutely beautiful, Mary. Even though it's free verse, the sound is perfect and so are the words and the content.
I like the presentation very much.
Just one thing: where you wrote distance stars, shouldn't it be distant stars?
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016

Thanks Maria for your review and for the typo tipp. Mary

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written free verse poem. We can have dreams and make them true one by one, if we believe in our own abilities and are willing to learn to do new things.

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016

Thanks Sandra I appreciate your great review. Mary

Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko

Excellent

The objective correlative of the poem epitomises the uniqueness of man and his inherent potential of achieving all that he sets out to achieve.

The work earns its texture through the use of metaphor. Excellent work. Bravo!

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 Comment Written 11-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016

Thanks LLoyd for your excellent review and great comments. Mary

reply by Lloyd T. Okoko on 11-Nov-2016

Remain Blessed!

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Well written poem that reminds sometimes what really holds a people back is they limit what they can do, restrain the possibilities that without those chains they could achieve, and be so much more.

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 Comment Written 11-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016

Thanks Brett for your excellent review. Mary