Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Dreams are made possible"Words to pass on to my children
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Comment from June Sargent
Being a willing beginner can indeed actualize our potential. From small beginnings can come greatness, if we take that leap of faith. Your free verse has expressed these possibilities fluently. Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Being a willing beginner can indeed actualize our potential. From small beginnings can come greatness, if we take that leap of faith. Your free verse has expressed these possibilities fluently. Well done.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Thanks June for a great review and wonderful comments, Mary
Comment from Kelly2
What an inspiring poem...if only people would think this way about life. I sometimes struggle...unable to find the energy to do the routine tasks that seem so meaningless. I read once that you should embrace even the simplest of things, folding laundry, raking leaves...and do them well and with pride. For some reason, this poem reminds me of that.
I loved these lines:
"by glorifying the smallest life form
embracing the most distant stars
contemplating the beauty all around
be a willing beginner
a witness to the awe
in the art of living"
You have written a very powerful poem. I'm so glad I came across it.
Kelly
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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What an inspiring poem...if only people would think this way about life. I sometimes struggle...unable to find the energy to do the routine tasks that seem so meaningless. I read once that you should embrace even the simplest of things, folding laundry, raking leaves...and do them well and with pride. For some reason, this poem reminds me of that.
I loved these lines:
"by glorifying the smallest life form
embracing the most distant stars
contemplating the beauty all around
be a willing beginner
a witness to the awe
in the art of living"
You have written a very powerful poem. I'm so glad I came across it.
Kelly
Comment Written 24-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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Thanks Kelly for the excellent review. You are right about focusing on the daily routine with pride, I was told too about even washing the dishes to do it mindfully. Even though I have a dishwasher I sometimes love to hand wash some of the dishes.
Mary
Comment from Sis Cat
Yes, we are all unique. Wow, this is a powerful free verse with a strong, reaffirming message. Your thoughts, words, and emotions "freely flow" in your free verse which is eloquent and determined in sentiment. Your words are reaffirming:
"feel the bliss
the sun's fire on our face"
I can feel and see your poem.
Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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Yes, we are all unique. Wow, this is a powerful free verse with a strong, reaffirming message. Your thoughts, words, and emotions "freely flow" in your free verse which is eloquent and determined in sentiment. Your words are reaffirming:
"feel the bliss
the sun's fire on our face"
I can feel and see your poem.
Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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Thank you so much for such an encouraging review I appreciate it. Mary
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written free verse poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. I really liked the font you chose for this! Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2016
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This is a very well written free verse poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. I really liked the font you chose for this! Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 23-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2016
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Thank you for your very encouraging review. Mary
Comment from Nika2016
You get my six because this poem should be on everyone's mirror in the morning...It is inspirational and defines nature as the source of who we are or can become. I want to memorize it...so I will not violate copyright.. Smile.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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You get my six because this poem should be on everyone's mirror in the morning...It is inspirational and defines nature as the source of who we are or can become. I want to memorize it...so I will not violate copyright.. Smile.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Thanks Nika for an exceptional rating for my free verse poem, I really appreciate it and also I love your comments. Mary
Comment from RGstar
And you sum it up brilliantly, Mary...''for we are all unique''
If we all could realize such, how better the outcome for all the indifference and wars we have taking place. Sometimes, lately, I don't even want to watch the news, for depressing it makes me, though important.
A lovely sensible write.
My best wishes, dear lady on this calm evening.
RGstar
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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And you sum it up brilliantly, Mary...''for we are all unique''
If we all could realize such, how better the outcome for all the indifference and wars we have taking place. Sometimes, lately, I don't even want to watch the news, for depressing it makes me, though important.
A lovely sensible write.
My best wishes, dear lady on this calm evening.
RGstar
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Thank you RG for the exceptional rating, it is praise indeed coming from yourself indeed. I am so pleased that you liked my free verse poem. Mary
Comment from rjuselius
this is an exquisite piece of poetry dear jackarrie! the message is very profound and the subtle social commentary hits the nail. a beautiful philosophical sentiment.
thank you for sharing!
virtual six..
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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this is an exquisite piece of poetry dear jackarrie! the message is very profound and the subtle social commentary hits the nail. a beautiful philosophical sentiment.
thank you for sharing!
virtual six..
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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Thanks Rebekka, for your exceptional review and great comments, I really appreciate it. Mary
Comment from MelB
This is a beautiful piece you have written. If we believe our dreams are possible, we can achieve them. I like the ending, in that we are all unique.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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This is a beautiful piece you have written. If we believe our dreams are possible, we can achieve them. I like the ending, in that we are all unique.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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Thanks for your excellent review and comments. Mary.
Comment from Bill O'Bier
Some interesting ponderings here. I enjoyed the free flow of the form you used. Thanks so much for creating this piece. All the best to you my friend.
Bill~
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Some interesting ponderings here. I enjoyed the free flow of the form you used. Thanks so much for creating this piece. All the best to you my friend.
Bill~
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Thanks Bill I am pleased that you enjoyed it, Mary
Comment from LIJ Red
I think your quote is true, but a little limp. We almost always set ourselves up for the calamities in our lives. Looks like a fine free verse poem to me.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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I think your quote is true, but a little limp. We almost always set ourselves up for the calamities in our lives. Looks like a fine free verse poem to me.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Thanks for your review. Mary