Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "The Best I Could Do"A collection of sonnets
28 total reviews
Comment from BOO ghost
Looks like a legitimate sonnet to me. Meter is a challenge. yes, first line looks good. da--dum, da dum. This certainly ain't easy as apple pie to check meter, but looks like your meter is good. Oh, this is a beauty! I love your word choices! Very nice piece of pie. Oh, YOU NAILED THIS Sonnet! perfect!
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Looks like a legitimate sonnet to me. Meter is a challenge. yes, first line looks good. da--dum, da dum. This certainly ain't easy as apple pie to check meter, but looks like your meter is good. Oh, this is a beauty! I love your word choices! Very nice piece of pie. Oh, YOU NAILED THIS Sonnet! perfect!
Comment Written 08-Nov-2016
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Well done, Mikey. This is a lot of fun and very well written. I enjoyed it a lot, and the rhyming was great. Persistence often pays off, as your faith in the little apple tree proved, Giddy
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Well done, Mikey. This is a lot of fun and very well written. I enjoyed it a lot, and the rhyming was great. Persistence often pays off, as your faith in the little apple tree proved, Giddy
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
Comment from l.raven
HI Michael, it was worth the wait of coming home...I bet many a soldier would love to come home to this apple pie...I know I would...very well written my friend...and after looking at this picture...I am now hungry...and I don't have an apple pie...love Linda xxoo luff
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HI Michael, it was worth the wait of coming home...I bet many a soldier would love to come home to this apple pie...I know I would...very well written my friend...and after looking at this picture...I am now hungry...and I don't have an apple pie...love Linda xxoo luff
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, I must say, that you've done a magnificent job of making this old dude hungry. A big slice of apple pie, a la mode, or maybe three or four slices would do me good. Thanks for another fine poem. :-)
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Well, I must say, that you've done a magnificent job of making this old dude hungry. A big slice of apple pie, a la mode, or maybe three or four slices would do me good. Thanks for another fine poem. :-)
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your Potlatch. My husband has to protect his young trees from deer. We have over 30 deer in our neighborhood and they love young tender trees. You're right Governments could care less about solving issues peacefully.
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I enjoyed reading your Potlatch. My husband has to protect his young trees from deer. We have over 30 deer in our neighborhood and they love young tender trees. You're right Governments could care less about solving issues peacefully.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
Comment from Sasha
I can visualize you planting the seeds, but not baking a pie. Of course it is presumptuous of me to assume anything. Nice work with this one. Very nice poem about baking a pie with a little social commentary to go with it.
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I can visualize you planting the seeds, but not baking a pie. Of course it is presumptuous of me to assume anything. Nice work with this one. Very nice poem about baking a pie with a little social commentary to go with it.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
Comment from seaglass
This is a very nice poem. It's melodically passed rhyme and reader would lend well to a song. Several layers of meaning here: Symbolic apple pie stands for America, war causes neglect to all that need nurture, There is always hope for recovery.
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This is a very nice poem. It's melodically passed rhyme and reader would lend well to a song. Several layers of meaning here: Symbolic apple pie stands for America, war causes neglect to all that need nurture, There is always hope for recovery.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
Comment from LIJ Red
This looks like an excellent potlatch challenge entry, there's pie in the couplet, and the form has all the earmarks of a Shakespearean sonnet. In my opinion.
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This looks like an excellent potlatch challenge entry, there's pie in the couplet, and the form has all the earmarks of a Shakespearean sonnet. In my opinion.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh a perfect sonnet and one that had a great ending and brought tears at the same time.
I did not know where you were going till you added the war theme.
Nicely done dear friend
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Oh a perfect sonnet and one that had a great ending and brought tears at the same time.
I did not know where you were going till you added the war theme.
Nicely done dear friend
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
Comment from Susanjohn
Love it Mikey!!!! Apple pie yummy!!!! where's the caramel drizzle and vanilla ice cream???? Nice poem Michael!!! enjoyed reading! :-)))
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Love it Mikey!!!! Apple pie yummy!!!! where's the caramel drizzle and vanilla ice cream???? Nice poem Michael!!! enjoyed reading! :-)))
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016