Comment from Lu Saluna

Excellent

A very good presentation, a noble photo of the lion roaring, showing his strength as king of the jungle.
The satoria you have come up with is good but could have been a little stronger for the 'ah ha!' at the end.
For example, "Roar! ~ to guard his pride!"
Here it has a double meaning, to guard his personal pride and his pride of lionesses.
Just food for thought.
But and excellent contest entry as is. Well done.

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016

Lu,
Thank you for you honest and kind review. I kind of knew that it was weak, but I just couldn't come up with anything else. I really appreciate your review. Blessings.......Portia

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes you brought the picture to life with your well chosen descriptive words the syllable count is correct I enjoyed good luck in the contest regards Jill

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016

Thanks so much for your review, very kind comments and best wishes, they are greatly appreciated. Blessings.......Portia

Comment from Quantum Traveler

Excellent

An Excellent Posting.
This picture of the Lion and the Writing melt together to form a perfect union for one's imagination to take different avenues of the thought process behind the Writing.
A Serious Roar with what could become a Very Humorous Ending.
It Syncs Very Well...Portia...Very Nice...Quantum Traveler...Phil.

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016

Phil,

I really like your take on this poem of mine. You made me laugh. Thanks for you review and very kind comments.
Its late, you are probably asleep. I can't sleep, I just found out my sister's husband passed. Please keep us in prayer. Blessings.....Portia

reply by Quantum Traveler on 05-Nov-2016

I'm glad I made you laugh...Laughs are good for the Heart and Soul.
Sorry to hear about your Sister's Husband...You are always in my prayers and I will do the same for your Sister.
My Island friends taught me how to celebrate life when I was so angry at Life...They told me to gather up all the bad things in life and throw them out then gather up all the good things that we share the beautiful times and the happy times and all the things that made us laugh and sing then Celebrate those good times and let them be your guide through the rest of your Life.
They told me Not to Mourn the Passing of my Fiancee but to Celebrate Her Life and I have done that all of my life...It gets you through the Uglies...Q.T...Phil.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Ever heard the far off roar of a lion on the plains of the Serengeti, Portia?
Even though the pride may be far away, it is still such a bone-chilling sound.
Your 5-7-5 captures this feeling quite well, and your syllable count is perfect.

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2016

Dean,

I read you can hear the roar of a lion five miles away. That's a mighty roar. I have never heard the roar of a lion, it would probably scare me to death. Thank you my friend for your kind review. Blessings........Portia

reply by Dean Kuch on 04-Nov-2016

Good luck in the contest, Portia.
You are more than welcome.
~Dean :}