To Last Forever
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Playground"Poems by Michael
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Comment from frierajac
A pleasant ditty. I like the lines to and fro ever, and the last lines are right on.
I do not care for the emblem at the base of the page, as it reminds me of an ad.
Perhaps its you though, and that's why you include it.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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A pleasant ditty. I like the lines to and fro ever, and the last lines are right on.
I do not care for the emblem at the base of the page, as it reminds me of an ad.
Perhaps its you though, and that's why you include it.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Hi...-smile-....well ipunched in teeter totter and not much appeared appealing...but this one I found familiar...and went with it...besides when you do it right...and play the music while reading...his head hits the teeter in time with the tunes totter....-smile-....love Michael
Comment from barleygirl
This might be a little too abstract for my feeble abilities to interpret nuance. But I still very much appreciate the teeter-totter analogy & the way you carry this idea thru the entire poem with various different ways to say it & show it. Life & love are full of ups & downs . . . as originally stated in your well-written message.
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This might be a little too abstract for my feeble abilities to interpret nuance. But I still very much appreciate the teeter-totter analogy & the way you carry this idea thru the entire poem with various different ways to say it & show it. Life & love are full of ups & downs . . . as originally stated in your well-written message.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
Comment from Writer51
This is truly a description of life itself. It's a path that no one on earth can escape no matter how much they might try. Very well done.
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This is truly a description of life itself. It's a path that no one on earth can escape no matter how much they might try. Very well done.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
Comment from misscookie
I like the artwork you choose to go with your poem
it is a perfect match
you captured my attention from the first line to the last Your words have so much meaning.
To me it like life.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
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I like the artwork you choose to go with your poem
it is a perfect match
you captured my attention from the first line to the last Your words have so much meaning.
To me it like life.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
Comment from RoostyNester
Love is like being on a seesaw. With all the ups and downs, learning to ignore that which is not important and concentrating on that which does matter. Your poem brought out the humor in the ups and downs of love.
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Love is like being on a seesaw. With all the ups and downs, learning to ignore that which is not important and concentrating on that which does matter. Your poem brought out the humor in the ups and downs of love.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
Comment from sanejane
What a beautiful poem; describing confident love; love that trusts the future, having faith in safety. All children should be raised with such beginnings.
I find the third stanza particularly lovely.
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What a beautiful poem; describing confident love; love that trusts the future, having faith in safety. All children should be raised with such beginnings.
I find the third stanza particularly lovely.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Love is a bit like a teeter-totter, ups and downs, but at least the game is done together and it takes both players to make it work at all.
Cute artwork. It works so well with your message and presentation.
Take care,
Rhonda
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Love is a bit like a teeter-totter, ups and downs, but at least the game is done together and it takes both players to make it work at all.
Cute artwork. It works so well with your message and presentation.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
Comment from tfawcus
Remarkable use of metaphor. Hanging on tight to a relationship, through its ups and downs, can be difficult, exhilarating and ultimately rewarding - "to and fro ever"! I just love the way you stretch language!
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Remarkable use of metaphor. Hanging on tight to a relationship, through its ups and downs, can be difficult, exhilarating and ultimately rewarding - "to and fro ever"! I just love the way you stretch language!
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
Comment from oliver818
I enjoyed your
Little poem, with the images of the little teeter totters running around everywhere, very nice. Thanks a for
Sharing and have a great day!
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I enjoyed your
Little poem, with the images of the little teeter totters running around everywhere, very nice. Thanks a for
Sharing and have a great day!
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
Comment from closetpoetjester
Oh I agree it's a teeter totter Michael...I've experienced it first hand for the last 26 plus years and it's been one helluva ride, I tell ya! LOL
Interesting to say the least...spicy to say the most, without giving too much away. Okay, a bit saucy too, hell...I'll admit it haha
I've found love is not something you can pigeon hole. It's a range of experiences, emotions and sexually charged chemistry.
He sure knows how to push my buttons. Then again, I have the same skill ha!
You describe so well the to and fros, the ups and downs and of course the ins and outs of a relationship in your unique style. Love it!
Sass
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Oh I agree it's a teeter totter Michael...I've experienced it first hand for the last 26 plus years and it's been one helluva ride, I tell ya! LOL
Interesting to say the least...spicy to say the most, without giving too much away. Okay, a bit saucy too, hell...I'll admit it haha
I've found love is not something you can pigeon hole. It's a range of experiences, emotions and sexually charged chemistry.
He sure knows how to push my buttons. Then again, I have the same skill ha!
You describe so well the to and fros, the ups and downs and of course the ins and outs of a relationship in your unique style. Love it!
Sass
x
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
