Nashville Trashville - Chapter 2
Just Say no...(continued)22 total reviews
Comment from Kelly2
I'm afraid to admit that Bruni was right, but she certainly was.
Sometimes it's better not to know.
My favorite parts that had me laughing, and boy did I need a laugh:
"Mama's tipsy met sober's topsy, wax-on-wax-off, her tattoo suggestion would have plenty of available canvas, No Mercy Rita, Nashville serendipity (my favorite word), as my energy bar took a dive to 6%, "Printer's alley" in reference to the tat,
McEwen's forty year karma lurked across town, awaiting my arrival."
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was a few decades passed (past would be correct, I believe)
tatteted drunkie (I think this would be tatted)
I would be exactly like you. Looking for the coat and the purse, which she undoubtedly had not a care in the world about at the moment. And the guys. Oh, jeez.....
I'm going right on to read the 3rd part. I'm a little behind.
Great story!!!
Kelly
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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I'm afraid to admit that Bruni was right, but she certainly was.
Sometimes it's better not to know.
My favorite parts that had me laughing, and boy did I need a laugh:
"Mama's tipsy met sober's topsy, wax-on-wax-off, her tattoo suggestion would have plenty of available canvas, No Mercy Rita, Nashville serendipity (my favorite word), as my energy bar took a dive to 6%, "Printer's alley" in reference to the tat,
McEwen's forty year karma lurked across town, awaiting my arrival."
Notes:
was a few decades passed (past would be correct, I believe)
tatteted drunkie (I think this would be tatted)
I would be exactly like you. Looking for the coat and the purse, which she undoubtedly had not a care in the world about at the moment. And the guys. Oh, jeez.....
I'm going right on to read the 3rd part. I'm a little behind.
Great story!!!
Kelly
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Another great review, and thank you for the catches! Both have been corrected, or substituted with another reference (Beyond vs. past). I might have been thinking about passed out from exhaustion and worry when I typed that! I was reliving the nightmare as my fingers flew across the keys :) Thank you, KellBell, and I'm so happy to see you back here. I hope you are doing well. I miss reading you!!
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Thanks, Mary.
Between being sick and then having a deadline on a brutal edition, it's been impossible to get on FS. Just when I said it was getting easier every month. That'll teach me.
I am free, so now I can work on the next chapter of the Chronicles.
I believe you wished you were "passed" out. :)
Kelly
Comment from Heidi M
I can SO relate to your feelings about tattoos. I knew I was safe with our middle son because he cried every time he had to get a shot when he was a little boy. No way would he ever get a tat! He has five now...
I got a good laugh out of your story, thinking 'Thank goodness it was Mary and not me!' You are a much better sport than I would be.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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I can SO relate to your feelings about tattoos. I knew I was safe with our middle son because he cried every time he had to get a shot when he was a little boy. No way would he ever get a tat! He has five now...
I got a good laugh out of your story, thinking 'Thank goodness it was Mary and not me!' You are a much better sport than I would be.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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LOL on your son. I know, mine has one shoulder to shoulder blade and another on his chest. He is going for the sleeve sometime soon. (Not the Nashville son, my second son). It killed me that I refused to even take cough medicine when pregnant and here they are injecting their bodies with who knows what!!! I appreciate your RR&R, as always. Have a great weekend!
Comment from Sis Cat
This is an engaging non-fiction story told with breezy prose. You show the stresses and tensions of accompanying adult children on a trip. When your daughter decides to undergo tattoos that puts you in a bind about whether or not to react as a mother or a as a friend. The tension drives your narrative which you told in a humorous manner.
"m'wa" is spelled "moi," French for "me."
Thank you for sharing your essay. I found it inspired me.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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This is an engaging non-fiction story told with breezy prose. You show the stresses and tensions of accompanying adult children on a trip. When your daughter decides to undergo tattoos that puts you in a bind about whether or not to react as a mother or a as a friend. The tension drives your narrative which you told in a humorous manner.
"m'wa" is spelled "moi," French for "me."
Thank you for sharing your essay. I found it inspired me.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Hi Andre, thank you for another wonderful review, I enjoyed reading your intuitive remarks of the event. I also appreciate you sharing the French version for 'me'. The m'aw is a crude version of the same, and I believe it was started by Miss Piggy of Sesame Street fame. It also happens to display my initials, so I often use it for fun, but do appreciate your suggestion.
Have a wonderful week, Andre! Thank you again for your wonderful insight and praise.
Comment from Spitfire
I missed the first chapter. Will try to get it to later. What a gorgeous jacket. Maybe she'll tire of it and give it you. She's your look-alike for sure. When will this tattoo fad end? Imagine the fun young nurses will make of them when the owners end up in a nursing home.
I'd be leery too if someone unlicensed did the tattoo.
Sounds as if you and your children are pretty close.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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I missed the first chapter. Will try to get it to later. What a gorgeous jacket. Maybe she'll tire of it and give it you. She's your look-alike for sure. When will this tattoo fad end? Imagine the fun young nurses will make of them when the owners end up in a nursing home.
I'd be leery too if someone unlicensed did the tattoo.
Sounds as if you and your children are pretty close.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Hi Shari, you can click on the added link at the bottom of this in the notes, if you like. Dean and Phyllis were kind enough to help me with that learning curve :) I was excited to learn that little tidbit. Thank you for your wonderful RR&R. I appreciate you. Have a wonderful day.
Comment from Joy Graham
You're too funny! You got me rolling on the floor laughing with your expressions and descriptions of events :) My inner Betty Crocker has expressed curiosity about getting a tattoo, but I'll remind her not to discuss it with your inner Brunhilde lol!
Looking forward to more of this entertaining trip.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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You're too funny! You got me rolling on the floor laughing with your expressions and descriptions of events :) My inner Betty Crocker has expressed curiosity about getting a tattoo, but I'll remind her not to discuss it with your inner Brunhilde lol!
Looking forward to more of this entertaining trip.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Hi Joy, haha, thank you so much. Just say no to the tat...a friend's nephew got one across his belly of his recently deceased father once. He was a large nephew. He felt the urge to unbutton his shirt at the funeral reception to my friend and her husband--her husband being a union exec from New Jersey. It bore a horrible resemblance and my friend's husband could not stop laughing while saying, "You actually paid someone to do that???? Your dad looked better dead than on your belly!" True story. Gravity wins every time. Have you people, call my people...Brunhilda will set her straight!! LOL! Thank you again, and have a great week!
Comment from emptypage
My brother John lives in Nashville and talks about this pancake place incessantly. He's not a pancake kind of guy, so they must be something.
I haven't been on a family trip--or any vacation--in 23 years, except for protest trips. And they don't count because they are hard work and sometimes you get arrested. This piece makes me not miss the trips so much.
Funny, laugh-out-loud funny, as usual. Excellent writing.
It might be too early in the day for me, but I don't see any technical issues.
Great job, Mary.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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My brother John lives in Nashville and talks about this pancake place incessantly. He's not a pancake kind of guy, so they must be something.
I haven't been on a family trip--or any vacation--in 23 years, except for protest trips. And they don't count because they are hard work and sometimes you get arrested. This piece makes me not miss the trips so much.
Funny, laugh-out-loud funny, as usual. Excellent writing.
It might be too early in the day for me, but I don't see any technical issues.
Great job, Mary.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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We just might be related!! I also have a brother John! Tee Hee. Thank you for your wonderful review and you seriously need to get to the Pantry, on a real vacation. Pretty amazing menu, and we ordered several things but the sweet potato pancakes were the absolute highlight!
Put your protest signs down for a quick weekend, Nashville is a great place to explore. If you plan it for the last weekend any July, you can also hit the annual St. Patrick's Day BBQ in McEwen an hour out of Nashville... I've only been once at age 13, but it was pretty amazing then. Thanks again and have a great week!
Comment from damommy
What an evening. You should have listened to Brunhilda. LOL.
Your descriptions of the whole event are so funny. My sons are middle-aged and past the partying scene, so I don't have to worry. As far as tattoos go, they don't want to cause their mother's early death.
Waiting for the next installment. 8-)
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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What an evening. You should have listened to Brunhilda. LOL.
Your descriptions of the whole event are so funny. My sons are middle-aged and past the partying scene, so I don't have to worry. As far as tattoos go, they don't want to cause their mother's early death.
Waiting for the next installment. 8-)
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Hi Yvonne, thank you so much for your wonderful RR&R and I'm happy for you. Mine were both in their early and late twenties, respectively, at the time. The belly ring did follow two years later. Brunhilda is a fooooooking psychic in addition to being a crank! Have a great week ahead!
Comment from Sasha
Absolutely terrific work with this addition to your story. I just love Brunhilda and thoroughly enjoy her sarcastic (but appropriate) comments that always come at the precise and perfect moment. I cannot wait for part 3 and hope I don't have too long to wait.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Absolutely terrific work with this addition to your story. I just love Brunhilda and thoroughly enjoy her sarcastic (but appropriate) comments that always come at the precise and perfect moment. I cannot wait for part 3 and hope I don't have too long to wait.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Hi Sasha, thank you so much for your RR&R and wonderful words of encouragement. I appreciate your continued interest so much. Brunhilda is getting a big head, I knew it would happen :) I hope to get #3 posted before the weekend :) Have a wonderful day!
Comment from Dawn Munro
What am I gonna do with you? You 'show' so well, you write so much without run-on sentences, you keep me not only entertained but in stitches...I can't even stay "mad as hell and I'm not gonna take it anymore" - LOL.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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What am I gonna do with you? You 'show' so well, you write so much without run-on sentences, you keep me not only entertained but in stitches...I can't even stay "mad as hell and I'm not gonna take it anymore" - LOL.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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HAHA, thank you so much, Dawn. I had to read this twice because you are usually nailing me for "run-on sentencing"--a one star penalty :) See, you've helped me with all the critiquing on that issue :) Loved your review and your assessment. Thank you so much for your continued interest and follow. I'm happy that I was able to bring some laughter into your belly :) Have a wonderful week!
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:)) I'm glad if I have. :))
Comment from DR DIP
stilettos
Hehe I love the way you write Bruni. You have a wit and sarcasm as a 30 yr old the reason I say 30 is that is the age of my smart arse son who has a sARCASTIC WORD FOR EVERYTHING LOL
lOOKING FORWARD TO THE NEXT CHAPTER iNCIDENTALLY I HAVE A 27 YEAR OLD DAUGHTER WITH CHAMPAGNE TASTES ON A BEER BOTTLE BUDGET!
bloody caps lok!
dip
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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stilettos
Hehe I love the way you write Bruni. You have a wit and sarcasm as a 30 yr old the reason I say 30 is that is the age of my smart arse son who has a sARCASTIC WORD FOR EVERYTHING LOL
lOOKING FORWARD TO THE NEXT CHAPTER iNCIDENTALLY I HAVE A 27 YEAR OLD DAUGHTER WITH CHAMPAGNE TASTES ON A BEER BOTTLE BUDGET!
bloody caps lok!
dip
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Thank you so much for your RR&R on this. Bruni is getting such a big head with all the notoriety and fans she is accumulating!
I hope to get the next chapter written before the weekend. Thanks again, and have a wonderful week!