Comment from Susan Chetcuti

Excellent

This is such a lovely poem. I am so glad that you found something that you love to do. A good choice because you are very good with putting words together. A good rhyme and flow. Keep up the wonderful work.

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2016

Thanks Susan for your lovely review and kind comments I appreciate it. Mary

Comment from Joan E.

Exceptional

Thank you for sharing how you started painting watercolors and adding another lovely example to this post. I admired your storytelling and rhymed couplets. Here's to your life continuing to be fulfilled and best wishes in the contest- Joan

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2016

Thanks so much Joan for your exceptional review of my poem I really do appreciate it and most of all your constant support much appreciated. Mary

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written story/poem. When in pain it is very good to keep the mind busy with something else. The pain will subside and the end product of your painting is proof that you discovered another talent. An excellent piece of artwork.

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2016

Thanks Sandra, I am fine now I manage my pain well. I appreciate your review and comments. Mary

Comment from Chrissy710

Excellent

Hi Mary. wow you certainly are an artist in many ways such a lovely painting and a great poem to accompany it. I hope your spinal fushion worked and your pain is lessened if not all gone. What a great talent to be able to paint like that ( also is the one on your profile one of your also it is lovely too) well done and good luck for the contest Cheers Christine

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2016

Thanks, Chrissy I appreciate your review and wonderful comments, Mary

Comment from ronnie k

Excellent

Bravo my friend, pain one would naturally wonder, what good come from suffering, well too those questioners I will suggest they read this fantastic poem, thank you JACKARRIE.

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2016

Thanks Ronnie for your kind words and your excellent review. Mary

Comment from Heather Knight

Excellent

I'm sorry to hear you were in pain. Are you okay now?
The poem is beautiful and so is the painting. It's a pity is a bit blurred. The same thing happens to me when I upload pictures to FanStory, I wonder why.
Thanks for sharing, Mary.

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2016

I live with my pain I since had a hip replacement, a neck fusion I am the bionic woman but I have to say I am grateful for to be here and enjoying my life. Thanks for asking and reviewing. Yes the pictures do get blurred I think fanstory enlarges them and that why. Mary

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

very good, nicely written, good rhyme and meter, flows and reads well. Spinal fusion, I have a good friend who wished they never had theirs done. Hope yours worked out better for you. Nice job on the water color also. Thanks for the share and have a good day.

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2016

Thanks William sorry about your friend, my was not a great success, but at least It stopped the excruciating pain, I manage it and I am grateful , Some do have really successful ops. Mary

Comment from Justin Yhoung

Excellent

Very well done, a good rythm and flow to it.
The colors give it its own flare.
Wasn't sure what to expect, but it was a pleasure to read:)

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2016

thanks for the excellent review, I appreciate it, Mary

Comment from LaRosa

Excellent

Seems the spinal fusion
fused more than a spine;
By bringing from pain and confusion
the writer, the painter two of a kind.

Or something like that.
This poem is worked carefully, creatively to bring the reader from the beginnings of the writer's physical suffering and hope deferred to a conclusion that if he couldn't use his body, he'd use his mind. By bringing art into his impoverished world ...his whole life unfurled.
I enjoyed the easy carefully crafted sense of rhyme and rhythm. I particularly liked the line, "my overactive mind was always a pest".
Think all writers must feel that way.
How blessed to be an artist of the pen and of the brush both!

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 Comment Written 31-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2016

Thank you so much for a beautiful review I really appreciate it, Mary

reply by LaRosa on 31-Oct-2016

:)

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I'm sorry Mary to hear of your suffering, and I will pray for you. And excellent sorry in a poem. You're obviously not sitting on your hypothetical hands. This is a very exciting artistic place, and your economical story poem, is an impressive entry in the contest, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy

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 Comment Written 31-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2016

Thanks Roy for your excellent review, and kind comments Mary

reply by royowen on 31-Oct-2016

Most welcome Mary