Comment from Teri7

Exceptional

This is a very cute 3-5-3 poem you have penned for the contest. I love ladybugs too. You used very cute descriptive wording and very good imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2016

Thank you for your review

Comment from cumulus365

Excellent

This is a very compact poem that does not need a comma after the word paradise and there would not need of a period even you want to show the ending of the poem as in a paragraph. The lines meet the 3/5/3 syllables to give a story of the garden. I read line 3 specifying a ladybird; however, the illustration shows a ladybug, is there another meaning to the ladybird? In line 1, I think that you are trying to connect that this most dainty but very useful creature to a gardener/farmer is that it eats up aphids like it is in the garden of paradise.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2016

Thank you for your review

Comment from Daniel Silverhawk

Average

You have captured the essence of how tiny this ladybird is in the taking of small steps. You also followed the 3-5-3 format. Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016

Thanks