To Last Forever
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Comment from BeasPeas
This little poem is nicely composed with good rhyming and unique
rhyme pattern. I like it's simplicity and straightforwardness that
is charming. Like a wheel it goes round. An enjoyable read. Marilyn
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This little poem is nicely composed with good rhyming and unique
rhyme pattern. I like it's simplicity and straightforwardness that
is charming. Like a wheel it goes round. An enjoyable read. Marilyn
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
Comment from jusylee72
what a beautiful yet simplistic poem about faith and understanding. I truly enjoyed it and think it was extremely well done. Thank you for that. Morning and Night faith for all.
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what a beautiful yet simplistic poem about faith and understanding. I truly enjoyed it and think it was extremely well done. Thank you for that. Morning and Night faith for all.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
Comment from Quantum Traveler
An Outstanding Image Encased within the Framework of a Beautiful Writing Enhanced by a video of Rare Beauty Portrayed.
A Combination of Excellence...Quantum Traveler...Phil.
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An Outstanding Image Encased within the Framework of a Beautiful Writing Enhanced by a video of Rare Beauty Portrayed.
A Combination of Excellence...Quantum Traveler...Phil.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
Comment from foxangie123
Would you teach me how to write so perfectly as you? Your words flow so very excellent it is extrodinary. I wish I had six left for you.
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Would you teach me how to write so perfectly as you? Your words flow so very excellent it is extrodinary. I wish I had six left for you.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
Comment from rjuselius
this is an excellent piece of poetry dear michael! it plays with the concept of time reminiscent of victor's the conundrum. which can also be seen as a timeless endeavor..
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
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this is an excellent piece of poetry dear michael! it plays with the concept of time reminiscent of victor's the conundrum. which can also be seen as a timeless endeavor..
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
Comment from Teri7
Michael, This is a very good poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. Hugs, Teri
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Michael, This is a very good poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. Hugs, Teri
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
Comment from Stacia Ann
Hi, Reconciled! Thanks for sharing this.
This is a haunting poem that I'm sure I'll think about over the coming days. This visual of the clock and the figure by the river goes well thematically. The first stanza and then the last of "good-night/good morning," and then reversed, frames this work, emphasizing the theme of time and its continuity.
Mentions of the Holy Ghost and the Divine move the work into the religious/spiritual realm, suggesting the entity "always on my mind" is a Divine one.
I wondered about the mention of "spring" given the overall tone and visual--the poem seems more fall/winter in theme. Just a thought.
A very minor point:
I think the poem should end with an em dash (--) rather than en (-), which is usually used as a hyphen, between words. Very minor, as I said, but poetry is so concise that even minor formatting issues like that can be distracting.
Thank you for sharing!
All the Best,
Stacia
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Hi, Reconciled! Thanks for sharing this.
This is a haunting poem that I'm sure I'll think about over the coming days. This visual of the clock and the figure by the river goes well thematically. The first stanza and then the last of "good-night/good morning," and then reversed, frames this work, emphasizing the theme of time and its continuity.
Mentions of the Holy Ghost and the Divine move the work into the religious/spiritual realm, suggesting the entity "always on my mind" is a Divine one.
I wondered about the mention of "spring" given the overall tone and visual--the poem seems more fall/winter in theme. Just a thought.
A very minor point:
I think the poem should end with an em dash (--) rather than en (-), which is usually used as a hyphen, between words. Very minor, as I said, but poetry is so concise that even minor formatting issues like that can be distracting.
Thank you for sharing!
All the Best,
Stacia
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
Comment from c_lucas
A very well written poem honoring another. Your poem has a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery.
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A very well written poem honoring another. Your poem has a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
Comment from nancyrabbrose
You have written a lovely poem of true love. Thank you for the accompanying song. Lovely and very fitting for your poem. "Holy Ghost held close within us" -- wonderful sentiments that help the reader to understand the depth and meaning of the love between the two. Well done.
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You have written a lovely poem of true love. Thank you for the accompanying song. Lovely and very fitting for your poem. "Holy Ghost held close within us" -- wonderful sentiments that help the reader to understand the depth and meaning of the love between the two. Well done.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a singularly expressive poem, spiritual love revisited, rendered in unique construction and elegant free verse...
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In my opinion, a singularly expressive poem, spiritual love revisited, rendered in unique construction and elegant free verse...
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
