Examination
haiku zen (contest entry)40 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
This is a very well composed haiku on Zen philosophy, Anonymous Poet.
Using a five syllable word for the entire fist line was a nice touch, and it's a word that pertains to the topic of your poem.
"Soul stimulation" is a well alliterated satori which is also an excellent observation of the entirety of your haiku.
This is a strong entry.
I wish you well in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2016
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This is a very well composed haiku on Zen philosophy, Anonymous Poet.
Using a five syllable word for the entire fist line was a nice touch, and it's a word that pertains to the topic of your poem.
"Soul stimulation" is a well alliterated satori which is also an excellent observation of the entirety of your haiku.
This is a strong entry.
I wish you well in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 30-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2016
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Thank you Dean for the awesome review my friend! I always look forward to reading both your work and your reviews.
God bless!
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My pleasure :)
Comment from c_lucas
It is a good thing to control your inner being. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2016
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It is a good thing to control your inner being. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2016
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Yes it is C_Lucas, it needs controlling for sure. Thank you for the awesome review.
God bless!
Comment from joannakruk
Very interesting ethereal piece. I like the play on the notion of stimulation and soulful well being. Usually we correlate meditation with a tempering of the mind, quietening the internal flux,yet this poem inspires one to stimulate the internal wondering. Unique but intriguing. Well done.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2016
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Very interesting ethereal piece. I like the play on the notion of stimulation and soulful well being. Usually we correlate meditation with a tempering of the mind, quietening the internal flux,yet this poem inspires one to stimulate the internal wondering. Unique but intriguing. Well done.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2016
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Thank you Joan, I love your interpretation of this piece. I craved such a response!
God bless!
Comment from Susanjohn
Hmmmmmm I wonder how long I would have to sit still and examine my soul!!! OMG i can't do it,, I can't sit still!!! LOL I need some Zen in my life!!! ( great poem) :-))
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
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Hmmmmmm I wonder how long I would have to sit still and examine my soul!!! OMG i can't do it,, I can't sit still!!! LOL I need some Zen in my life!!! ( great poem) :-))
Comment Written 29-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
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LOL! We all do for sure Susan! I loved this wonderful review. Thank you and God bless!
Comment from mfowler
Your message seems ultimately Zen in imagination and intent. I think this examination one's inner self to feel and know what's happening on the simplest yet deepest level of existence, provides the thinker with a grand opportunity for growth. You call it 'soul stimulation'. That lovely alliterative line has a double meaning in a way. Both the meditant is stirred, and a soul is reconstructed, polished if you like. A lovely and always timely reminder of what can make all the difference. I wish you well with your poem.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
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Your message seems ultimately Zen in imagination and intent. I think this examination one's inner self to feel and know what's happening on the simplest yet deepest level of existence, provides the thinker with a grand opportunity for growth. You call it 'soul stimulation'. That lovely alliterative line has a double meaning in a way. Both the meditant is stirred, and a soul is reconstructed, polished if you like. A lovely and always timely reminder of what can make all the difference. I wish you well with your poem.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
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What a great review this is mfowler! I enjoyed the challenge this one offered and love adding double meanings in my work at times. Several people have picked up on it.
God bless!
Comment from Irish Rain
What a wonderful expression...soul stimulation. I love your haiku for this contest, I think it's very apt, as is the picture. Good luck, blessings...
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
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What a wonderful expression...soul stimulation. I love your haiku for this contest, I think it's very apt, as is the picture. Good luck, blessings...
Comment Written 29-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
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Thank you Irish! I always look forward to your reviews my friend.
God bless!
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May God bless you also friend.
Comment from Oatmeal
You did a wonderful job with the challenge that was presented to you. Well chosen words are expressive. The theme is strong. Your feelings are expressed well. Your arrangement looks very nice. The flow is smooth.
There was no SPAG, no typos, no room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
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You did a wonderful job with the challenge that was presented to you. Well chosen words are expressive. The theme is strong. Your feelings are expressed well. Your arrangement looks very nice. The flow is smooth.
There was no SPAG, no typos, no room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 29-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
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Thank you Oatmeal for another wonderful review my friend. I look forward to seeing your future reviews.
God bless!
Comment from Alan K Pease
Your poem, "Examination," fits the constraints of this form of poetry (with satori) in an excellent fashion. Good luck in the writing prompt contest and in zen.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
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Your poem, "Examination," fits the constraints of this form of poetry (with satori) in an excellent fashion. Good luck in the writing prompt contest and in zen.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
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Thank you for the awesome review Alan!
God bless!
Comment from kathleenspalding
Cool haiku does have me wondering if the separation of well and being is deliberate for a double entendre? Also, do you want an apostrophe in ones (one's)? Excellent choice of artwork. Good job!
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
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Cool haiku does have me wondering if the separation of well and being is deliberate for a double entendre? Also, do you want an apostrophe in ones (one's)? Excellent choice of artwork. Good job!
Comment Written 29-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
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I did add the apostrophe! Those darn things allude me lol. Yes it was intentional! I realize this is a little risky and will probably have me lacking in the votes. But I simply couldn't help myself lol. Thank you for this most excellent review Kathleen.
God bless!
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LOL, I thought so. Gives it extra depth, I think. But, when I see something like that, I do tend to check with the author, just in case... ;-D. Blessings to you, too.
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Much appreciated!
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
Love the artwork which delivers a meaning and life to the words of this most excellent haiku-zen writing prompt. It tells us that only we can examine our life's meaning and determine where our soul relates to our life! I wish you well in this contest,,,,,,,,Jim
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
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Love the artwork which delivers a meaning and life to the words of this most excellent haiku-zen writing prompt. It tells us that only we can examine our life's meaning and determine where our soul relates to our life! I wish you well in this contest,,,,,,,,Jim
Comment Written 29-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
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Thank you for the best wishes and the awesome review Jim.
God bless!
