A Broken Heart
Kyrielle Sonnet26 total reviews
Comment from rjuselius
wow, a great entry dear portia! i can really relate, i just broke up with my fiance three days ago because he had too much interest for other women. he broke my heart and threw it away. he stepped over my self-confidence and self-respect.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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wow, a great entry dear portia! i can really relate, i just broke up with my fiance three days ago because he had too much interest for other women. he broke my heart and threw it away. he stepped over my self-confidence and self-respect.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 23-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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Rebekka,
You are so kind, Thank you for your review, very kind comments and the six star rating. You did the right thing to break up with him, for he would not have been faithful in marriage if he still had interest in other women. It is sad, yet a blessing to have found this out before you married him. Love you sweetie! Blessings...............Portia
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Thank you for the encouraging words! hugs and kisses :)
Comment from ronnie k
How I love reading your works? Let me count the ways (smile) This sounds surreal, the rhyme gives music to the poem, you must have dug deep in your memories the extract the beautifully written work of art, ronnie
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016
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How I love reading your works? Let me count the ways (smile) This sounds surreal, the rhyme gives music to the poem, you must have dug deep in your memories the extract the beautifully written work of art, ronnie
Comment Written 22-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016
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Ronnie,
Thanks so much for the outstanding review and the six star rating. Actually the artwork itself inspired me to write this Sonnet. This is my first time writing one, so thanks so much for the very kind comments my friend. Lots of love................Portia
Comment from Nika2016
I find that thinking of him in comical situations helps...as well as imagining him losing his hair and growing a big wart. It is better than a cold ledge.
The poem is beautiful and seems to meet the rhyme requirements and meter.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016
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I find that thinking of him in comical situations helps...as well as imagining him losing his hair and growing a big wart. It is better than a cold ledge.
The poem is beautiful and seems to meet the rhyme requirements and meter.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016
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Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments. The artwork inspired the writing of this Sonnet. Blessings.......Portia
Comment from June Sargent
Well your poem certainly made it possible for us to envision how it would feel being on the edge. When we feel beaten by waves of f negative emotions we find it difficult to move in, but we must or we will drown. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016
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Well your poem certainly made it possible for us to envision how it would feel being on the edge. When we feel beaten by waves of f negative emotions we find it difficult to move in, but we must or we will drown. Well done.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016
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June,
Thank you for your review and comments. Blessings...............Portia
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a well written poem about getting over the pain of a breakup and being free to find a new healthy relationship. It uses the wall as a metaphor for the feelings you have to get through, around or over to go on with life. It also shows the coldness in the heart at the breakup that has to be melted.
Good luck and keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016
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This is a well written poem about getting over the pain of a breakup and being free to find a new healthy relationship. It uses the wall as a metaphor for the feelings you have to get through, around or over to go on with life. It also shows the coldness in the heart at the breakup that has to be melted.
Good luck and keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 22-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016
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Thank you for you review, very kind comments and best wishes they are greatly appreciated. Blessings.......Portia
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You are very welcome, Portia. God bless you too.
Joan
Comment from Chrissy710
Portia This is such a heartwrenchong sonnet but beautifuuly written and easy although sad to read and you have made your refrains work well in each Stanza. well done and good luck for this contest Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016
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Portia This is such a heartwrenchong sonnet but beautifuuly written and easy although sad to read and you have made your refrains work well in each Stanza. well done and good luck for this contest Cheers Christine
Comment Written 22-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016
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Christine,
This is my first time penning a Sonnet of any kind. I am not sure if the meter follows the guidelines as required. When it comes to different meters I have a problem. I am glad you enjoyed my Sonnet and thank you for your review, very kind comments and best wishes. Blessings...............Portia
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You are so welcome Portia it is always great to challnge oneself and you had no trouble with this one just lovely, like you Cheers Christine
Comment from emptypage
The poem evokes emotion in me, a sign of good work. I love the idea, too, of purging the bad part of a past relationship, to recover, and to go on.
This poem explains why most poets are lovers at heart.
A suggestion? In the first stanza, last line, leave out the comma following "purge." Ditto the following stanzas. They are just unnecessary.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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The poem evokes emotion in me, a sign of good work. I love the idea, too, of purging the bad part of a past relationship, to recover, and to go on.
This poem explains why most poets are lovers at heart.
A suggestion? In the first stanza, last line, leave out the comma following "purge." Ditto the following stanzas. They are just unnecessary.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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Thank you for your review and comments, they are greatly appreciated. Thanks for the suggestion as well, I have made the corrections. Blessings...................Portia
Comment from jaybird1
A very good sonnet about unrequited love.So sad and touching.Life will go on and
new life and love will return..Your sonnet was perfect in form, structure and rhyme
and I find it exceptional
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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A very good sonnet about unrequited love.So sad and touching.Life will go on and
new life and love will return..Your sonnet was perfect in form, structure and rhyme
and I find it exceptional
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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jaybird1,
This is the first time I have ever penned a Sonnet of any kind. Never in my wildest dreams did I even think it would receive a six star rating. Your rating and very kind comments have really made my day and put a smile on my face. Thank you for this rating and support. Blessings...................Portia
Comment from Matthew Franklin
A very well written poem. The picture you chose is perfect for the work and really adds depth to the visual that your words paint. The narrative is sad, if this is true to life, I am so sorry that you went through an experience like this. The environment of today has made it more difficult for relationships, damn near impossible frankly. I would like to see another poem with the next chapter of this story! Some healing and new beginnings!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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A very well written poem. The picture you chose is perfect for the work and really adds depth to the visual that your words paint. The narrative is sad, if this is true to life, I am so sorry that you went through an experience like this. The environment of today has made it more difficult for relationships, damn near impossible frankly. I would like to see another poem with the next chapter of this story! Some healing and new beginnings!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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Matthew,
Thank you for your review and very kind comments they are greatly appreciated.
Actually, I was inspired to write this poem based on the artwork. I will keep a look out for artwork that will reflect the next chapter, a happy and loving relationship. Blessings my friend.................Portia
Comment from William Ross
Nicely done on the sonnet a broken heart, They say time heals all wounds this is one of the hardest and deepest wounds to heal. spot on with the sonnet, good rhyme, meter, reads and flows great. good luck on this and have a great day
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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Nicely done on the sonnet a broken heart, They say time heals all wounds this is one of the hardest and deepest wounds to heal. spot on with the sonnet, good rhyme, meter, reads and flows great. good luck on this and have a great day
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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Thanks so much for your review, very kind comments and best wishes. Blessings.......Portia
