To Last Forever
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Long Nights"Poems by Michael
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Comment from closetpoetjester
Yep...it's gonna be a long night LOL
Hey M, believe it long enough and it will happen. Wow, what a stunning and sensual write. Get that mad tongue ready and don't be ashamed...I got some fruit that needs blessing haha
Your unique and captivating talent is at work and play here with a resurrection and dance of joy all wrapped up in your specially gifted phrase.
Yep...I'm mad for more too LOL Well done
Sassafrass xx
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2016
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Yep...it's gonna be a long night LOL
Hey M, believe it long enough and it will happen. Wow, what a stunning and sensual write. Get that mad tongue ready and don't be ashamed...I got some fruit that needs blessing haha
Your unique and captivating talent is at work and play here with a resurrection and dance of joy all wrapped up in your specially gifted phrase.
Yep...I'm mad for more too LOL Well done
Sassafrass xx
Comment Written 14-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2016
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-smile-...Hello Sass...
yes I've been having some lately. you think...? well ...I dont. I mean I dont with whom I was thinking about here. she loves me differently....I dont really understand it...so I dont know how to explain it. -smile-....but it touches me where never felt before. .....ah -smile-...you make me larger than my life Sass. I'm special because of you....always love...Michael
Comment from Amber Fatone
Wow,
What can I say about this? While reading this my heart just dropped. It flows really well, the creativity is on point and it reads super calming, yet sexy. Thanks for sharing your talent with the world
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2016
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Wow,
What can I say about this? While reading this my heart just dropped. It flows really well, the creativity is on point and it reads super calming, yet sexy. Thanks for sharing your talent with the world
Comment Written 11-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2016
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um....whatever you want Amber...its okay with me...-smile-
right...? mine too...just like that first sight type thing...its amazing isn't it...? yes it does...it does flow well, like a calming stream...mm hm...yes...yet sexy...especially when you say it...do you mind repeating..? ....Oh hey...listen anytime anytime...day...night...who cares...what are friends for ya know...-smile-...love Michael
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You have a way with words mister
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well a course abba do wound you...-headshake-...i mean thanks...-smile-
Comment from Leineco
As music moves your pen to the ink well,
so too, your poetry triggers my own poetic musings:
and so the nights go on and on
there's beauty in their velvetness
and murmurs in
their whispered winds
vast distances muffle intent
of a mouthful of words
don't wanna/can't
say
for fear of. . .
for fear of. . .
for fear of grail's truth
for fear of scars rent
for fear of joy's breath
and yet,
the murmurs persist -
innocence yearns
for brushed forehead kiss
in night's velvet cloak
for forgiveness
despite sharp blades
and breachable armour
for the promise
and mantle of madness
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2016
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As music moves your pen to the ink well,
so too, your poetry triggers my own poetic musings:
and so the nights go on and on
there's beauty in their velvetness
and murmurs in
their whispered winds
vast distances muffle intent
of a mouthful of words
don't wanna/can't
say
for fear of. . .
for fear of. . .
for fear of grail's truth
for fear of scars rent
for fear of joy's breath
and yet,
the murmurs persist -
innocence yearns
for brushed forehead kiss
in night's velvet cloak
for forgiveness
despite sharp blades
and breachable armour
for the promise
and mantle of madness
Comment Written 10-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2016
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Leinko...c'mere for a minute, let me look at you...turn around are you hurt...no...yea...what the hell is the matter with you...I've been weve been worried sick...news reports, prayers, frantic late nightmares the whole nine yards....and here you are ..just nonchalant as can be....and why is that poem so damn depressing...c;mere...dont you know how much youre loved...big hugs and love for you. very relieved to see you...love Michael
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(returns hug. . .nice to know someone was worried about me. . .smile. . .)
I guess it's so depressing cuz Milner's lyrics were so sad - that, and I'm still sort of shaken by the hurricane's impact. . .on the up side, I finally broke the writing damn I've been up against and wrote something new for submission (seems the only inspiration I've had for a couple weeks now is your poetry!! :-)
Now let's see if it lasts! Feeling unpoetic has a tendency to leave me floundering!! (a teeny bit depressed).
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I tried to reply at work but...I couldn't send it ...very relieved to see your type. ...my poetry....well...yea...I mean of course what else...who else...-smile-.. I'm coming over Leinko...were gonna flip that flounder over...get ready...-wink-
Comment from winnona
A nicely written piece. Your words flowed well line to line combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader. Your artwork, music and background color complete the piece ant turn it into an experience more than a poem.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2016
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A nicely written piece. Your words flowed well line to line combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader. Your artwork, music and background color complete the piece ant turn it into an experience more than a poem.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2016
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Hi...-smile-.....thank you very much.....I'm glad you enjoyed this with me.....love michael
Comment from Ricky1024
Life meets Death....
And, along the way...
Joinex with aa Kiss...
Nice work here....
As always....
Thanks,
Ricky By the Bay
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2016
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Life meets Death....
And, along the way...
Joinex with aa Kiss...
Nice work here....
As always....
Thanks,
Ricky By the Bay
Comment Written 10-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2016
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Hi Rick...-smile-...thanks Bro....appreciate the stop by...hope youre well....love Michael
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Thanks
Ricky By the Bay.
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Nicely reconstructed with popcycle sticks.
Ricky By the Bay.
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Nicely reconstructed with popcycle sticks.
Ricky By the Bay.
Comment from djsaxon
You make such sweet and challenging music with your pen. Dark, often joyous and always thought provoking. Would that I could match your poetic grace. Much love - DJ
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2016
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You make such sweet and challenging music with your pen. Dark, often joyous and always thought provoking. Would that I could match your poetic grace. Much love - DJ
Comment Written 09-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2016
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you do....in you're voice...way.
you know how to give life to words DJ, I can tell you always have. here we find ourselves with a bunch of other ourselves...its unique...a lil' getting used to at first...but boy what a motivation for growth. what I mean is you;re here long enough...you find gold ...tested true...and I understand the measuring against...ah eureka....but ...the brilliant find is um shared....ah you know what I mean. love Michael
Comment from RGstar
Passionate ending to this one, Michael. I Like the transition, slightly broken into quarters, but good individualism that connects each.
Nicely done once again in that style I have come to know.
Best wishes,
RG
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2016
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Passionate ending to this one, Michael. I Like the transition, slightly broken into quarters, but good individualism that connects each.
Nicely done once again in that style I have come to know.
Best wishes,
RG
Comment Written 09-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2016
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Hey Star...-smile-
ah I've always been partial to going down in a blaze of glory....I mean if your going to shoot for the moon....wear padding....-smile-...thanks Bro....love Michael
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your contemporary love song in tercets. Your "scar tissue resurrected" is a very potent line and the artwork is the perfect match. Hugs and happy Sunday- Joan
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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2016
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I admired your contemporary love song in tercets. Your "scar tissue resurrected" is a very potent line and the artwork is the perfect match. Hugs and happy Sunday- Joan
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Comment Written 09-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2016
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Hello Gorgeous...-smile-
hugs to you too...c'mere...huuuuuug....smile-...always love for you...Michael
Comment from johnwilson
Wow, what a showcase for your talent! I love the song and it sets the mood perfectly for your piece. You've grown as a poet, to me, since I've first starting reading your work. What a love poem!
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Wow, what a showcase for your talent! I love the song and it sets the mood perfectly for your piece. You've grown as a poet, to me, since I've first starting reading your work. What a love poem!
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Comment Written 09-Oct-2016
Comment from MissMerri
I find so much in this poem to appreciate and adore, Michael. The words bring to mind the story of Jacob in the book of Genesis... wrestling with God (a Friend closer than a brother) and refusing to let go until he receives a blessing... His long wait to finally be able to marry Rachel, his true love, makes me think the speaker may be waiting also, and "ageless as the promise's witness" might refer to Christ, who existed before the foundation of the world... the witness to God's promise. There is so much more here, but I feel it is a poem from deep in the heart and echoes the cry as well as the gratitude for blessings received and blessings to come. "Giving tongue to" is another way of saying "put into words" the love that comes from deep inside. Amazing to me that so few words can incorporate so much, but that seems to be part of your gift. I love this deep and meaningful poem. It seemed very spiritual to me. I hope I haven't wandered too far afield, but poetry like yours opens wide the windows of imagination and invites exploration. I enjoyed the journey.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2016
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I find so much in this poem to appreciate and adore, Michael. The words bring to mind the story of Jacob in the book of Genesis... wrestling with God (a Friend closer than a brother) and refusing to let go until he receives a blessing... His long wait to finally be able to marry Rachel, his true love, makes me think the speaker may be waiting also, and "ageless as the promise's witness" might refer to Christ, who existed before the foundation of the world... the witness to God's promise. There is so much more here, but I feel it is a poem from deep in the heart and echoes the cry as well as the gratitude for blessings received and blessings to come. "Giving tongue to" is another way of saying "put into words" the love that comes from deep inside. Amazing to me that so few words can incorporate so much, but that seems to be part of your gift. I love this deep and meaningful poem. It seemed very spiritual to me. I hope I haven't wandered too far afield, but poetry like yours opens wide the windows of imagination and invites exploration. I enjoyed the journey.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2016
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me too....when I think of you.
yes....Jacob....I never liked him you know...I think what he and his mother did...evil. too this day. His name means...sneak-thief...in Hebrew translation. I believe his brother acted more like Messiah to come. when he spared his life holding every right to end it miserably. but....one night when he knew his brother mounted thunders lightening strike...we read while still living up to his namesake...he wrestles with the Angel....some believe Jesus Himself....like me....and ah his name is changed in one nights war inside his tent...into a Nation chosen....firstborn.
yes Maam...-smile-....as I said my writing reflects my here and now inevitably...even when I try not to...so quit trying not to....-smile-. I swear I had this figured last-night....when He was here....what did He want the most...?
He wanted acceptance, acknowledgement as most High, even wearing the simple wardrobe of carpenter. He wanted to be loved more than anything else.I believe the same desire indwells all made in His image. ...-headshake-...sorry...-smile- um there was a bunch more last night...but....I'm afraid I've lost it Meadow. ah just a lil' penmanship in the moonlight....I didn't mean to shake anybody up...haha....I'm glad you kissed my life Merri....you remind me of the clean I made my wife....-smile-....always love....Michael
