Don't Close the Casket
Eddie is not ready to go yet30 total reviews
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Oh wow, I can see why this poem was a winner! It held he captivated throughout. You don't know why the man was murdered by his wife, but the fact that it happened is brought up. I like the way he talks about the different people who stopped by to see him, and how he wanted to "see" his twin sister before the lid was closed. Then he slipped away to Heaven.
Very nicely penned, and deserving of a six!
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2016
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Oh wow, I can see why this poem was a winner! It held he captivated throughout. You don't know why the man was murdered by his wife, but the fact that it happened is brought up. I like the way he talks about the different people who stopped by to see him, and how he wanted to "see" his twin sister before the lid was closed. Then he slipped away to Heaven.
Very nicely penned, and deserving of a six!
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 08-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2016
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Ronda,
Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments. I am glad you enjoyed the read. You are so kind. Blessings my friend.....Portia
Comment from mfowler
What a crazy thing death would be if that casket opening period really did let a corpse ruminate about those who came to pay respects. Here, your narrator/corpse looks for his twin and his murdering wife, comments on the actions and experience of people like Sally-Sue, crack addict, and John who didn't like him in real life. It appears not all are there because he was loved by them. The corpse closes his thoughts by telling us that his faith is real and in a way the closing of the coffin suddenly doesn't seem so damning, but an act of finality and peace.
A terrific idea for this contest. Much enjoyed.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2016
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What a crazy thing death would be if that casket opening period really did let a corpse ruminate about those who came to pay respects. Here, your narrator/corpse looks for his twin and his murdering wife, comments on the actions and experience of people like Sally-Sue, crack addict, and John who didn't like him in real life. It appears not all are there because he was loved by them. The corpse closes his thoughts by telling us that his faith is real and in a way the closing of the coffin suddenly doesn't seem so damning, but an act of finality and peace.
A terrific idea for this contest. Much enjoyed.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2016
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Thanks so much my friend for your review and very kind comments, they are greatly appreciated. Blessings........Portia
Comment from John Parkin
A most unusual poem from the perspective of a deceased person. The poem could be the pilot of a television series with all of the characters represented. You told a story that left me wanting to read to the end. God changed his life and he forgave all that betrayed him and now he is ready to ascend to a higher state of grace. The poem was tragic and humorous at the same time. Excellent work from an accomplished poet.
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A most unusual poem from the perspective of a deceased person. The poem could be the pilot of a television series with all of the characters represented. You told a story that left me wanting to read to the end. God changed his life and he forgave all that betrayed him and now he is ready to ascend to a higher state of grace. The poem was tragic and humorous at the same time. Excellent work from an accomplished poet.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2016
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Wow!! Your outstanding review just made my day. Thanks so much for the six star rating and very kind comments; they are greatly appreciated. Blessings...................Portia
Comment from lyenochka
Wow, a dramatic story all in verse! I enjoyed the humor and also the encouragement that one can be saved without physical confirmation while still alive on earth. The picture was perfect, too!
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Wow, a dramatic story all in verse! I enjoyed the humor and also the encouragement that one can be saved without physical confirmation while still alive on earth. The picture was perfect, too!
Comment Written 08-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2016
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Thanks so much my friend for your review and very kind comments. I am glad you enjoyed the read. Blessings..........Portia
Comment from DonandVicki
As I read this satirical poem I couldn't help but think of the Chrismas Carol written by Lewis Carroll. If on
y we could have a second chance.
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As I read this satirical poem I couldn't help but think of the Chrismas Carol written by Lewis Carroll. If on
y we could have a second chance.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2016
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Thanks so much for your review, rating and comments. Blessings...............Portia
Comment from Chrissy710
Deserves a six but out Portia this is great and no wonder it won I loved the humour in this and it rhymed and flowed well So Congratulations talented lady Cheers Christineð???
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Deserves a six but out Portia this is great and no wonder it won I loved the humour in this and it rhymed and flowed well So Congratulations talented lady Cheers Christineð???
Comment Written 08-Oct-2016
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Christine,
Your support and very kind comments is my "six star rating," my friend. I am just glad you enjoyed the humor and the read. Thanks so much for the congratulations. Blessings.........Portia
Comment from CALLAHANMR
What a view before they closed the casket. Only a loving sister and mother. Others happy, came only to confirm death.Murdering wife stayed away. Is there no justice for wastrel?
Good luck.
Roger
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2016
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What a view before they closed the casket. Only a loving sister and mother. Others happy, came only to confirm death.Murdering wife stayed away. Is there no justice for wastrel?
Good luck.
Roger
Comment Written 08-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2016
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Thanks so much for your review, rating and best wishes, they are greatly appreciated. Blessings.......Portia
Comment from MelB
This is a well written piece. I like the commentary from the deceased. Great show of faith in it and I am see why it was a contest winner.
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This is a well written piece. I like the commentary from the deceased. Great show of faith in it and I am see why it was a contest winner.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2016
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Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments, they are greatly appreciated. Blessings......Portia
Comment from LIJ Red
Everybody wants to go to Heaven, just not right now. Been some good stories about forgiving ghosts. I suppose we see now through a glass darkly...to prompt, and excellent rhyming quatrains.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2016
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Everybody wants to go to Heaven, just not right now. Been some good stories about forgiving ghosts. I suppose we see now through a glass darkly...to prompt, and excellent rhyming quatrains.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2016
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Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments. Blessings..............Portia
Comment from RoostyNester
What a wonderful poem about death. Death is never desired, and most are afraid of it. But to know that your soul is going to be with God, gives comfort. Very well done in style, verse and words chosen.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2016
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What a wonderful poem about death. Death is never desired, and most are afraid of it. But to know that your soul is going to be with God, gives comfort. Very well done in style, verse and words chosen.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2016
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Thanks so much my friend for your review and very kind comments. Blessings..............Portia
