Comment from AnnaLinda

Exceptional

Poet,

This is a very unique cinquain entry you have penned.
It really has your readers stop and pause to think...
From your gorgeous presentation to your first line:
"A speck" and then it only gets better from there.

Just really astounding message and method of
conveying to me.'

Linda

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2016

Thank you so much for your exceptional review I really appreciate it.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written Cinquain poem. When we look up at the stars at night, we stare in awe of the wonder of nature and we are reminded of beginnings.

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2016

thanks for the excellent review.

Comment from Darkhorse555

Excellent

from the picture my eyes got caught in the cradle of light in your words awakening beginnings each night beautifully painted

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2016

Thank you so much for your most encouraging review, I really appreciate it.

Comment from ronnie k

Excellent

I am impressed always by the ability to bring to view and life, the words spoken by the beauty of a picture, well done you truly used your share of the pictures thousand words.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2016

Thanks for your most encouraging review.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

H-m-m-mmmm...food for thought, I should think.
Your Cinquain is true to form and well composed, Anonymous Poet.
It has many layers of meaning, all of which I happen to agree with.
Well done.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
~Dean

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2016

Thank you for your excellent review and encouraging comments.

reply by Dean Kuch on 03-Oct-2016

The pleasure was entirely mine.
You're very welcome.

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Very nice image and presentation.
-Format is good.
-I like the connection of lines you use in the poem.
-You begin with viewing 'a speck' in the sky.
-There are worlds still unexplored
and maybe inhabitable.
-A good ending,
as you remind us of
how things once began
on this planet.
-Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2016

Thanks for your excellent review.

reply by Pam (respa) on 03-Oct-2016

You are welcome.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Its true that a star we may viewing tonight could be long dead, and if it is why? Of course because it could be many light years away, well done, articulate work in a cinquain, excellent and clever, well done. Good luck, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2016

Thanks for your excellent review

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Love the perspective here---which is very akin to the sonnet I wrote recently with the earth as a dot! Muses are fused. LOL--how nice! I like the voicing in this true-to-form (I think) and well presented cinquain. I like the consonance of W, L and V (sounds good read aloud) and the assonance of soft E in speck, dead, observed, as well.

The flow is good up to the penultimate line, where the grammar makes it choppy:

dead worlds are still observed
reminds us of our beginnings


Idea to remedy that:

dead worlds are still observed
reminding us of beginnings


Just a thought.

Nice work.

Made me stop and ponder.

Good luck in the contest.

Warmly, r d

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2016

Thank you for your helpful review, I appreciate your suggestion.

reply by rama devi on 02-Oct-2016

Happy to help! Thanks for your kind reply. Warmly, rd

Comment from djsaxon

Excellent

Really well done but I have a problem with the form. The rigid structure is a nasty invitation to "contrived". No problems with this write. DJ

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2016

Thank you for your encouraging comments on my poem, I agree a lot of these syllables formats are restrictive