Comment from eljay1

Excellent

I love the line, "The sun is shameful upon me." It might be just a quirk of mine, but I like to eliminate the word "the" from poems when possible. I think of short descriptive pieces like this as snapshots of a feeling or observation.

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 Comment Written 27-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2016

Thanks so much for you honest and kind review, I see your point and eliminated the one shown at the very beginning. Thanks for you review and helpful suggestion. Blessings..............................

Comment from buschejm

Exceptional

I enjoyed the way you put the moon, sun, and dreams between the seawaters, and the wave. I read it several times, and the more I read it took on different meanings. Nice work.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2016

Thanks so much for such an outstanding review and the six star rating. Your very kind comments and review are greatly appreciated. Blessings...............................

Comment from Susan Chetcuti

Exceptional

Totally loved your poem. Your wording was faultless. I really liked your ending it blended in well. To a dream...a mighty wave. I love poems and stories about the sea. Your picture was a good choice.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2016

Thanks so much for such an outstanding review and the six star rating. Your review and very kind comments are greatly appreciated. Blessings.............................