Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This is a beautiful entry. In six lines you deliver serenely vivid imagery and a moment of peaceful release for the reader. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016

Thanks so much my friend for your review and very kind comments, they are greatly appreciated. Blessings...................

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

This is a good description of the sea at night or a person with problem.
My only problem is you say the moon is out but also that the sun is warm.
This can't happen at the same time.

Good luck in the contest.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016

Thanks so much for your review and best wishes they are greatly appreciated. Blessings............................

reply by dragonpoet on 28-Sep-2016

You are so very welcome. God bless you too.

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Comment from William Ross

Excellent

Good job on the 6 line poem, Well done on the free verse on the mighty wave. Thanks for the share, Best of luck on this and have a great day

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016

Thanks so much for your review and best wishes. Blessings...................................

Comment from WalkerMan

Excellent

The accompanying image is the best rendition of the couple in the wave that I have so far seen, and your poem fits that scene well. However, there is no need for shame amid such beauty. Original sin was not sex. It was disobedience (of the command not to eat the fruit of the tree of knowledge). How about "The sun still shines warm upon me" for line four. Is this not a dream of love?

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016

Thanks so much my friend for your review, very kind comments and helpful suggestions. Blessings.........................

reply by WalkerMan on 28-Sep-2016

You are welcome. I'm glad to help. -- Mike

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

This is it lovely piece of poetry dear anonymous! The words flow free like a wave. Catching that wave is a meaningful metaphor.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck !
Blessings!
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016

Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments. Blessings.........................

Comment from winnona

Excellent

Beautiful artwork along with the background color completed the poem well. A very nicely written contest entry. I think you completed the challenge of this contest quite well.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016

Winnona,

Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments they are greatly appreciated. Blessings....................

Comment from Mary Wakeford

Excellent

Beautiful image to accompany your six-liner. Beautiful background and font tone to compliment.

Favorite part:The moon glances from

behind the steamy clouds -

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016

Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments, they are greatly appreciated. Blessings..............................

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

This six line poem is quite nice and effective. I love the visuals your words create. I love the flow of your words, like "a mighty wave." This poem is also a metaphor for sex, for a climax with its "Seawaters are rushing" line. Even the moon and sun reacts to a man's sex on a beach with a Birth of Venus type dream woman:

"The moon glances from
behind the steamy clouds -
The sun is shameful upon me"

There is relief and release, a given way, with your final lines at the culmination of sex.

Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016

Sis Cat,

Thanks so much for such an outstanding and very insightful review. Your review and very kind comments are greatly appreciated. Blessings......................

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written six line poem. The ocean is mighty and strong. The water never stops moving around. The waves are big and wash us out on the sand

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016

Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments, they are greatly appreciated. Blessings.......................

Comment from royowen

Excellent

It's really amazing how nature can quite often give us and answer to a question we are seeking for. Great presentation in this 6 line poetry contest, and an excellent entry in this contest, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy

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 Comment Written 28-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016

Thanks so much for your review, very kind comments and best wishes. Blessings....................

reply by royowen on 29-Sep-2016

Welcome

reply by royowen on 29-Sep-2016

Welcome