Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Yes, those bugs seem to stride in unison, and from now on I'll probably see them as a naval bug parade. Thanks for sharing your fun poem, and good luck in the contest. :-)

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2016

Thanks for the read and the comment.

Comment from johngie

Excellent

Mystery Author,

Love to watch these bugs skittering across the top of the water.

Syllable count is right.

Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

Thanks for the read.

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

this is a fine entry for this particular writing prompt dear anonymous! however you have centred the whole poem which means you have used the advanced editor. please fix this so you won't be disqualified.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings!
rebekka x

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

Done. Thanks.

Comment from H.Buttercup

Excellent

I like the imagery you portrayed. I can visualize the bugs on the smooth water surface. Also liked how you changed up water strider with naval bug. Good job!

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

Thanks for your review and comment.

Comment from KyColonel Randal

Excellent

Thank you for sharing. I can see those critters in my mind. Your poem appears to have the correct syllable count (5-7-5) and the correct theme for this contest. Good luck with your contest entry!

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

Thanks for your review and your comment.