Birthed Devine
My thoughts again, on The Afterlife10 total reviews
Comment from oliver818
Nice imagery and good flow in this poem! I enjoyed the broken lines jumping from image to image. Thanks for sharing and have a great day!
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2016
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Nice imagery and good flow in this poem! I enjoyed the broken lines jumping from image to image. Thanks for sharing and have a great day!
Comment Written 03-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2016
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Thanks Oliver.
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You either love them or leave them...
Ricky
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Thanks Oliver for your kind comment
Ricky
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Comment from RoostyNester
A very nice and sad poem. It always hurts when we lose someone that we love. But to know that he is now safe with the Almighty God, is a comfort. I liked your poem, and understand your grief.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2016
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A very nice and sad poem. It always hurts when we lose someone that we love. But to know that he is now safe with the Almighty God, is a comfort. I liked your poem, and understand your grief.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2016
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Thanks and I feel that you have been through It?
Ricky....
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt poem about your son's death when the last kiss and a part of your heart went with him to eternity. It is very sad, and life is too short. Before we know its over.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016
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A very well-written heartfelt poem about your son's death when the last kiss and a part of your heart went with him to eternity. It is very sad, and life is too short. Before we know its over.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016
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Thanks for the kind words and thoughts
Ricky
Comment from Cynthia1
Your poem has a sad and melancholy tone. I believe that you are describing the loss of someone dear and yet the eternal beauty of the living spirit. I did not quite understand the use of the quotation marks?
Cynthia1
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016
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Your poem has a sad and melancholy tone. I believe that you are describing the loss of someone dear and yet the eternal beauty of the living spirit. I did not quite understand the use of the quotation marks?
Cynthia1
Comment Written 02-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016
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Very kind Cynthia and thanks for your review.
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You are welcome.
Cynthia1
Comment from DLBoo
This is a wonderful tribute to the loss of a loved one. This can only have been written by someone who has truly felt that loss. Thank you for sharing such a painful time in your heart. I think there are many people that would not only relate to this sorrow but also find this poem something they could hold onto to be able to put what they were feeling into words.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016
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This is a wonderful tribute to the loss of a loved one. This can only have been written by someone who has truly felt that loss. Thank you for sharing such a painful time in your heart. I think there are many people that would not only relate to this sorrow but also find this poem something they could hold onto to be able to put what they were feeling into words.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016
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Thanks DL for your kind comments and review.
Ricky....
Comment from Alex Rosel
I particularly like how you have structured this; each line is a clause in itself. That is a very effective technique, evocative of a rush of unconnected thoughts. Your repetition of eternal and kiss is , again, effective; a theme running through the framework - good! And, your last line encapsulates all those apparently disconnected sentiments and brings them together as one - I like how you have crafted that.
An uplifting poem that is excellent. Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016
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I particularly like how you have structured this; each line is a clause in itself. That is a very effective technique, evocative of a rush of unconnected thoughts. Your repetition of eternal and kiss is , again, effective; a theme running through the framework - good! And, your last line encapsulates all those apparently disconnected sentiments and brings them together as one - I like how you have crafted that.
An uplifting poem that is excellent. Well done.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016
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And thanks again
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Comment from PoemsOfDD
Ricky, another reflective read. I was pulled more so much more into this poem. It is more emotional. Saying good bye to someone you have lost to heaven is never easy. You have done a fine job with this poem. Thank you for sharing it. ~DD
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016
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Ricky, another reflective read. I was pulled more so much more into this poem. It is more emotional. Saying good bye to someone you have lost to heaven is never easy. You have done a fine job with this poem. Thank you for sharing it. ~DD
Comment Written 02-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016
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Why thanks ever so much Poems.
Ricky....
Comment from l.raven
HI Ricky, not sure sometimes if memories are always so good...I have some good ones...but I have some that truly hurt...I know Jay is right here with you...as is your wife...they will always be in your heart...very sad...and written with a loving heart...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016
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HI Ricky, not sure sometimes if memories are always so good...I have some good ones...but I have some that truly hurt...I know Jay is right here with you...as is your wife...they will always be in your heart...very sad...and written with a loving heart...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016
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Thanks Linda cor your kind words and thoughts
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you are so welcome Ricky...have a great evening my friend...xxoo Linda
Comment from JanPerry
The thoughts are consistenet, the layout is unusual. I haven't seen it on here before so it was a surprise. A few thoughts scattered here and there for effect.
Nice.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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The thoughts are consistenet, the layout is unusual. I haven't seen it on here before so it was a surprise. A few thoughts scattered here and there for effect.
Nice.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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Thanks for your kind comments and thoughts.
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Comment from Thomas Bowling
Great sad poem about lose. It's terrible to loose someone especially someone young, as your poem suggested this person might be.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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Great sad poem about lose. It's terrible to loose someone especially someone young, as your poem suggested this person might be.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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Thanks Thomas and Jason or Jay was eighteen.
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