To Last Forever
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Life's Witness"Poems by Michael
10 total reviews
Comment from djsaxon
Quite beautiful Michael. Your pen as always invites us to embark upon a special journey. Some major moments for me. Solomon, Geronimo and dignity's aged Apache's resonate. DJ xxx
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2016
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Quite beautiful Michael. Your pen as always invites us to embark upon a special journey. Some major moments for me. Solomon, Geronimo and dignity's aged Apache's resonate. DJ xxx
Comment Written 13-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2016
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I answered this twice already...sorry Bro...appreciate you enjoying. love Michael
Comment from I am Cat
My favorite part of this, Michael...
where breath of life meets next
constant aches in sorely missed
eagle scream freedom from warriors governing
old for longing for homes reservation
scanning the heavens for paradise about to be
dignity's aged Apache's expected exit
disappearing into the last sunset this side of the other
whispered memory heard like yesterday
has so much beauty and elegance in it. I love the word choices, and the feelings it evokes... I wanted to soar above it, and slip below it... and roll around with it awhile...
I also remembered the first time you asked me about recordings... are you going to record any? I'd love to hear them in your voice. Really.
You have such a unique writing style, I think it would really benefit HEARING you...
If you need help remembering how to... let me know. ;)
At any rate, very well done... truly epic beauty here.
Hugs
Cat
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
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My favorite part of this, Michael...
where breath of life meets next
constant aches in sorely missed
eagle scream freedom from warriors governing
old for longing for homes reservation
scanning the heavens for paradise about to be
dignity's aged Apache's expected exit
disappearing into the last sunset this side of the other
whispered memory heard like yesterday
has so much beauty and elegance in it. I love the word choices, and the feelings it evokes... I wanted to soar above it, and slip below it... and roll around with it awhile...
I also remembered the first time you asked me about recordings... are you going to record any? I'd love to hear them in your voice. Really.
You have such a unique writing style, I think it would really benefit HEARING you...
If you need help remembering how to... let me know. ;)
At any rate, very well done... truly epic beauty here.
Hugs
Cat
Comment Written 13-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
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Hey Cat...-smile-.....ah well thanks, I watched the video and ...-smile-.......I already answered this once....but here we are....yea okay....you can help me. but I have to warn you I'm not well versed in computorology....so you might need to get drunk first....certainlly after wards...haha....yea I would to hear myself....and not wonder who it is too...but I fear the same thing will transpire....having studied the art of insainty for several years now....ahaha...ah...yea you can help me. love michael
Comment from Merlin2016
The poem is an interesting mix of Native American lore and someone's theory of ageing?
Someone watches from a distance as another views her?
His opinion matters? and then paradise viewed by another ?
We see that the Indians long for their old homes.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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The poem is an interesting mix of Native American lore and someone's theory of ageing?
Someone watches from a distance as another views her?
His opinion matters? and then paradise viewed by another ?
We see that the Indians long for their old homes.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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Hey Merlin...-smile-
o I dont know...Guinevere says maybe you should stare at the picture a lil' longer....and you know Gwen, get on her bad side and she'll fix your Camelot...tootles-
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I have no intention of fixing your Camelot..
That is hearsay..and the pic just appears to be a woman with either sand or gold dust raining on her..I have never been interested in either..toodles
Comment from jusylee72
You have beautiful words in this lovely poem. Many that need to be read more than once to be understood. I will read it several times. I just like the feel and the complicated form you used. I truly liked it.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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You have beautiful words in this lovely poem. Many that need to be read more than once to be understood. I will read it several times. I just like the feel and the complicated form you used. I truly liked it.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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Hi Jusylee...-smile-
oh well thank you...I well I have been known to express myself. O yes indeed I was just reminding Merlin of this most vital part of poetic interpretation. I am so relieved to see that not all need "extra" care. I thank you Dear...-smile-...love Michael
Comment from Mary Wakeford
Emotive and striking in content, the visuals you have provided in your wording. Your first line is purely brilliant. Stanzas 5&6, next up. Excellent in content and in imagery. Bruce Springsteen in accompaniment makes for a complete ace. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016
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Emotive and striking in content, the visuals you have provided in your wording. Your first line is purely brilliant. Stanzas 5&6, next up. Excellent in content and in imagery. Bruce Springsteen in accompaniment makes for a complete ace. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016
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thank you Mary...for noticing....-smile-
I wrote it watching-listening to the video. thanks again for enjoying this with me. love Michael
Comment from royowen
It's such a pity that old cultures have been systematically crushed, with only a whisper of their former glory remaining to remind us of their terminal sufferings and loss from the earth's memory, Michael, it is likewise in Australia my friend, beautifully and emotively written from a soul that cares deeply, your unique style and descriptive genius, makes it so, well done Michael, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016
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It's such a pity that old cultures have been systematically crushed, with only a whisper of their former glory remaining to remind us of their terminal sufferings and loss from the earth's memory, Michael, it is likewise in Australia my friend, beautifully and emotively written from a soul that cares deeply, your unique style and descriptive genius, makes it so, well done Michael, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 09-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016
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HI Roy...-smile-
ah yes...the Aborigines.
yes it is tragic history...of greed and mans propensity to place other men less than. its part of this...the bigger part. I was "feeling" more the honorable way of a man...ah thats what I meant by "aged Apache" ah just messing around. appreciate you enjoying this with me. love Michael
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Most welcome Michael, you're writing creates great imagery, it is ambiguous, but that's a good thing dear friend. Roy
Comment from amada
I like a lot your first line..."whispered memory hears like yesterday..." I also line this line a lot " scanning the heavens for paradise about to be..." It's so powerful and so delicately written. I like the song as well and the translation in Spanish!
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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2016
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I like a lot your first line..."whispered memory hears like yesterday..." I also line this line a lot " scanning the heavens for paradise about to be..." It's so powerful and so delicately written. I like the song as well and the translation in Spanish!
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Comment Written 08-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2016
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Hey Happy feet...-smile-
missed you.....delicate...yes yes...big fan....well I like to transition into Spanish from time to time too Happy....-smile-
when the Senorita in a woman starts to castanet clap, red dedicates showing...a man can be whatever he believes in...ola!...ahaha...love you...michael
Comment from RGstar
Hey my brother, I can see you exercising the mind here. Even in this mood, you capture that essence that never leaves.
''eagle scream freedom from a warriors governing
old for longing for homes reservation
scanning the heavens for paradise about to be''
Above, would like to see either an apostrophe in ''warrior's''
or take the determiner ''a'' in front of it. I think take away ''a'' is much better and would give better understanding for those who would take time to unlock the jewels you hide...unless of course you really must single it down to a single warrior.
Example
'eagle scream freedom from warriors governing
old for longing for homes reservation
scanning the heavens for paradise about to be''
And there we conclude that your message carries all the way through, and let none say no other.
My best to you, my friend.
RG
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2016
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Hey my brother, I can see you exercising the mind here. Even in this mood, you capture that essence that never leaves.
''eagle scream freedom from a warriors governing
old for longing for homes reservation
scanning the heavens for paradise about to be''
Above, would like to see either an apostrophe in ''warrior's''
or take the determiner ''a'' in front of it. I think take away ''a'' is much better and would give better understanding for those who would take time to unlock the jewels you hide...unless of course you really must single it down to a single warrior.
Example
'eagle scream freedom from warriors governing
old for longing for homes reservation
scanning the heavens for paradise about to be''
And there we conclude that your message carries all the way through, and let none say no other.
My best to you, my friend.
RG
Comment Written 08-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2016
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Hey Bro...-smile-
yea I did this last night...-bigsmile-...I kinda like it.
yes Sir absolutely right...I had it without the "a" at first...added it "tweaking" too much last night.
thank you...please "alaways" help where you can with mine...I trust you. love michael
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And I trust you and your help also my friend that is why we are unbreakable.
Best wishes.
Comment from Joan E.
I liked the resonant, animated "gold dust" in the artwork you selected. The sounds of the "eagle screams" and the "whispered memories" were very effective as well. Here's to a productive new week- Joan
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2016
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I liked the resonant, animated "gold dust" in the artwork you selected. The sounds of the "eagle screams" and the "whispered memories" were very effective as well. Here's to a productive new week- Joan
Comment Written 08-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2016
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Hey J...-smile-
ah just had a free day...half anyway. just relaxing my mind...I used to that with substance abuse...now...-handwave-...do this...ahahha....I found the video and watched it....these are my thoughts...or as "former" Teachers like to hear...my"report" I will now um tweak it...spit and polish it right before your eyes...for fun....it relaxes me...-smile-...love to you Dear...michael
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I am glad you had at least half a free day and will continue to relax by tweaking your "report". As a former teacher, I am proud! Beaming- Joan
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alright alright calm down...-smile-...love you-
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Good night and sleep well. Smiles- Joan
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night night...-smile-
Comment from MizKat
Hi Reconciled,
Again you have written a nice poem and it was enjoyable to read.
I didn't know what the other part said though as it's not in English. That's all that I know and speak. LOL
Kat
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2016
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Hi Reconciled,
Again you have written a nice poem and it was enjoyable to read.
I didn't know what the other part said though as it's not in English. That's all that I know and speak. LOL
Kat
Comment Written 07-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2016
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LOL....-kneeslap-....ah MA....welcome back. you've always been there for me...why if it wasn't for you...I wouldn't know the first thing about Indochina, let alone be so fluent in their lingo. Lil' supervision while living in the basement requires an active mind Mom. I also tap dance and am an origami wizard with colored paper.....and love you...michael
