Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

Funny poem. Reminds me of my ancestors in Eastern Kentucky. They ran moonshine in the forties and would have loved this.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

Yes, it is funny. Just like "Fresh breath" that you just gave one star, and like the one you gave me yesterday for "Hello," my story that has already gotten me a call from an agent. Of course, you had no idea that I am the same person. I'm an Eastern Kentucky boy too, and don't do things to people just to be nasty, and we don't take too kindly to those who do. I do thank you for this nice and generous review.

reply by Thomas Bowling on 03-Aug-2016

Sorry about the first two I am new to this and don't understand everything I read. I will try to do better in the future.

reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

Hey, it's all good, man. You're cool! Sorry if I sounded a little testy. :-)

Comment from kittykatnoel

Excellent

It brightens every joyous night. Excellent poem, funny. I love your picture and good job leaving a little something for that last line. Reminds me of many chatty hours around the still, good job.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

Thank you so much for taking time to read my poem. It's hard for even me to imagine starting off writing about the sun, and the moon, and ending up sidetracked on moonshine. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)

Comment from artisart4u

Exceptional

To the people in the areas, moonshine (liquor) was glorious sunshine.
You did use the word sunshine as required.

You have the right amount of syllables.

Good luck with your haiku.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

Thank you so much for taking time to read my poem. Yes, glorious sunshine it still is to many. Their only real means of feeding their families now that coal is a thing of the past, or something to just sort of take the edge off, so to speak. It's hard for me to imagine how I started writing about the sun, and the moon, an ended up sidetracked on moonshine. LOL! Thank you so much for taking time to read my poem. There aren't many who have actually understood all the subtle correlations between some of these words, the title, and the picture. I'm so glad you did. Your kind words and the extra special six-star review are greatly appreciated. :-_

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

Sorry, a vitual 6 XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX That was brilliant! I love it. It is so funny, and you have used the the moonlight as a metaphor, lol, brilliant! I hope you win the contest, it's the best one I've ever read! Well done and good luck. xsx Sandra

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

Thank you so much, Sandra Mitchell, dear, for taking time to read my little, silly poem. I don't do too well in contests, but who cares. Maybe it's because of my attention span. It hard for even me to imagine how I started out writing about the sun and the moon, and ended up sidetracked on moonshine. LOL! Your kind words and generous review are great appreciated. :-)

reply by Sandra Stoner-Mitchell on 03-Aug-2016

I went straight of and voted for you, and put you joint first. I do hope it wins, it really deserves to. :)

reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

Thank you so much you beautiful, wonderful person! I don't have any chance of winning, and truthfully don't even care. All that is important to me is to put smile on someone's face or have a sweetheart (sorry, maybe I should have broken that up to say sweet heart of a person) like you spend their time reading and voting for me. Wonderful encouragement and motivation to keep an old guy plugging. Thanks a million! Ric :-)

Comment from Father Flaps

Excellent

Hi Mystery Author
I like the change-up from sunshine to moonshine, and the double meaning. You seem to have the syllable count right at 5-7-5. And the artwork compliments your entry nicely. I'm guessing it came first. A good entry for the contest... Good Luck!
cheers
Kimbob

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

Thank yo so much, Kimbob, for taking time to read my poem. It's hard for even me to imagine how I started out writing about the sun, and the moon, and ended up on moonshine. LOL! Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

Nice humorous 5-7-5. It is about nature with a touch (or bunch) of booze added in:)

Good luck to you in the contest.

teresa

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

I reckon it's a little strange when I start off writing about the sun and the moon, and end up sidetracked on moonshine. Well, on second thought . . . maybe that ain't so dad-gum peculiar. LOL! Thanks so much for reading my poem. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

We got us losta that thare white lightnin' 'round these hare parts, Mysterious Piet. Why, dang, put near e'erwhare ye go, they's al'ays sum body tryin' ta get ya snookered! Gets ya in knee deep with the lil' woman tho', if'n ya know whut I mean?
Excellent 5-7-5, and an interesting take on a completely different direction from the one which I "think" the contest moderator had originally intended. Thinking "outside the proverbial hen house", if you will.
But, I appreciate that kind of thinking myself...
Best of luck to y'all in this here contest.
~Dean :)

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

Yes-Sir-re-buddy, it takes a strange critter to start writin' 'bout the sun and the moon, and ends up sidetracked on moonshine. Well, ya, know . . . comes to think of it, maybe it ain't so dad-gum peculiar at all, seems I might-a done it time or two b'fore. Thank you so much, Dean, for taking time to read my poem. Your comments, kind word, and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)

reply by Dean Kuch on 03-Aug-2016

Mah pleazure.
~Dean

Comment from Slythytove2

Excellent

Clever, witty and quite in keeping with the haiku style,( American) not referring to the syllable count but the juxtaposition of the two and one lines. Contest winner for sure! Well, in my book.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

Thank you so much, Slythytove2, for taking time to read my poem. I guess it takes a strange bird to start writing about the sun and the moon, and end up sidetrack on moonshine. LOL! Well, come to think of it, maybe that ain't so peculiar. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)

reply by Slythytove2 on 03-Aug-2016

Really excellent.

Comment from Muffins

Excellent

Funny. Even though alcoholism isn't a topic one wants to associate humor with.

You follow all the rules for the prompt. Each line brings a smile especially the last one. Some people lives are so harsh that looking forward to the night where they can relax with a good book, a good meal ,or a good swallow of moonshine gets them through it. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

Yes, Muffins, alcoholism is a sad topic, one that most all of us have witnessed or experienced in our lives. I personally don't even have a sip of wine, of course I don't begrudge others who do, but a glass of tea suits me nicely. Of course, there was a time . . . It's hard for me to imagine how I started writing about the sun and the moon, and ended up sidetracked on moonshine. LOL! Thank you so much for taking time to read my poem. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)

Comment from RodG

Excellent

This haiku had me chuckling. The first half is so true NORMALLY, but sometimes a little extra is needed to get one through the day. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

Thank you so much, RodG, for taking time to read my little, silly poem. It amazes even me that I started off writing about the sun and the moon, and ended up sidetracked on moonshine. LOL! Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)