Comment from Hayley Solomon

Excellent

Revising stars as per my note to you. Sweet story with a lot of energy. However, it does have quite a few grammatical issues to be relooked at, ' forsakened' should be forsaken, for example. 'Two long weeks passed and suddenly a miracle happens' This is a confusion of tenses. Just little things to be smoothed out on a quick reread And, as fables go, there is no explanation for the evil or why poor Saint Vincent has deserved to deal with this blight. In a fable it is usually the protagonist's fault.
However, lovely imagery and humour, well done.

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2016

Thanks but did you check the 'Webster- Colliers dictionary?
Perhaps..
"Forsakened is past tense for forsaken or either or is appropriate?
Dai t Vincient was under attack by evil fruits?
And God helped him a lesson to the youth.
Two, lonv,long, weeks and suddenly. Miracle happens!
Since he is Saint miracles should come rather quickly?
Waiting even a second for a Miracle is way to long, wouldn't you agree?
But thanks,,,
The grammar was correct just your...
Interpretations..
Ricky1024

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

It sounds wonderful and very inspiring. God blesses us with many fruits as you have so aptly described in this piece. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2016

Thanks for the kind thoughts on this amazing poem and fairy tale.
It will be completed by 6:00PM.
RICKY1024