Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Ricky,
"The Circle Of Life" is excellent but very sad, You talk about birth and death but barely mention life. Actually circle of life is a good metaphor but I prefer the Great Snake who eats his on tale. The poetry craft: flow, rhyme, structure, figurative language are very good. Change your vision and write some life affirming verse and believe you can be a first rate poet.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016

Thanks Sir Preston.
You are right. "The Circle of Life
"Being about Life."
Perhaps.""I should have called this piece...
""Circle of Death?"
RICKY1024 Thanks again Susanne for your wonderful comment and review.
RICKY1024

reply by Preston McWhorter on 27-Jul-2016

Perhaps. But to my mind changing the name does not really improve the poem in the way I feel it should be done.

reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016

True but the writer, only, has
that option.
RICKY1024

reply by Preston McWhorter on 27-Jul-2016

True,Who is really the writer?

reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016

???
Only God knows...
RICKY1024

Comment from Susanne M. Psyris

Excellent

Ricky1024...very powerful writing in this one. I can readily appreciate the pain you feel through your descriptions. It is hard not to be so moved by your writings, as they express you, and who you really are. Very good writing that share your true feelings with the reader. God bless and hugs, Susanne

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016

Thanks for the kind thoughts on this again Susanne.
RICKY1024

Comment from Challah1202

Good

Yes, it is a circle, but what is an "openly son?" You describe the circles and cycles well, but not everything made sense. I love the fractal pattern. It is a good metaphor for the repetitive stages of life and events. Write on.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016

Thanks Challah.
RICKY1024