Windows To The Past
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "The Ballad of the Cattle Queen"Poems about the old West.
36 total reviews
Comment from humpwhistle
Nancy, I particularly like your word choices here--you're able to maintain meter
without disrupting common syntax. In a word, this poem is more 'readable' than most.
When we think of women of the old west, names like Belle Starr and Calamity Jane jump to mind. It's good to hear about the less infamous, too.
Well done.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2018
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Nancy, I particularly like your word choices here--you're able to maintain meter
without disrupting common syntax. In a word, this poem is more 'readable' than most.
When we think of women of the old west, names like Belle Starr and Calamity Jane jump to mind. It's good to hear about the less infamous, too.
Well done.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 22-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2018
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Thank you for the six star rating Lee. The comment,"this poem is more 'readable' than most" is one of the best compliments I have received. You have made my day and I have just started with it this lovely morning.
Have a wonderful day! Nancy:)
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My pleasure, Nancy.
Comment from judiverse
A very great example, indeed. She was a true pioneer. Great job with the storytelling and your verse as well. It wouldn't have been an easy life for a woman in the wild west, but she made a success of it. The west seemed to be a place where people could start over. Love the picture but I don't know what the horses would have thought of a side saddle rider! Great work, and six stars for the powerful story. judi
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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A very great example, indeed. She was a true pioneer. Great job with the storytelling and your verse as well. It wouldn't have been an easy life for a woman in the wild west, but she made a success of it. The west seemed to be a place where people could start over. Love the picture but I don't know what the horses would have thought of a side saddle rider! Great work, and six stars for the powerful story. judi
Comment Written 21-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Thanks for the six and the comments. I don't know how they stayed on with a side saddle. I had occasion to try one once and I did not like it at all. Back ache! Have a nice week Judi. :) Nancy
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You're welcome. I've heard there are clubs devoted to women riding sidesaddle. judi
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Nancy, this was absolutely wonderful, your words have painted such a fantastic picture of this Ladies pioneer journey. Girl power was certainly not a modern day assumption...
Left me breathless
Mitchell
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Nancy, this was absolutely wonderful, your words have painted such a fantastic picture of this Ladies pioneer journey. Girl power was certainly not a modern day assumption...
Left me breathless
Mitchell
Comment Written 21-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Hi Mitchell, Thanks for the review and stars my friend.
I think we have always been the strong ones. God made us to
care for mankind. LOL. So glad you like it. Nancy:)
Comment from Just2Write
I missed this one first time around, so thanks for reposting it. This is a great story in a poem with a good message for all, but especially so for women. You can overcome tragedy and travesty with a plan and determination. Hard work doesn't hurt either.
Beautiful iambic heptameter with internal rhyming throughout. Makes one want to sing it. Excellent writing, my friend.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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I missed this one first time around, so thanks for reposting it. This is a great story in a poem with a good message for all, but especially so for women. You can overcome tragedy and travesty with a plan and determination. Hard work doesn't hurt either.
Beautiful iambic heptameter with internal rhyming throughout. Makes one want to sing it. Excellent writing, my friend.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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AW, Thank you Rose! You have been away for a while and so have I. Just one or two hours a day for me. According to reviews, replies and messages. My muse is gone. She shows up after long intervals. Thank you so much for the six my Dear friend. I do appreciate it. Love Nancy
Comment from Mistydawn
This is a very well-written poem taking us on one lady's journey, trying to escape her past. The way you brought your character to life made the reader connect with her, cheer her along on her grueling quest. The ending made the readers happy that she did so well. great job.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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This is a very well-written poem taking us on one lady's journey, trying to escape her past. The way you brought your character to life made the reader connect with her, cheer her along on her grueling quest. The ending made the readers happy that she did so well. great job.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Thank you very much for the terrific review and very generous stars Dawn. Have a wonderful day! Nancy
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Nancy, what a great story poem. Very well written with some good internal rhyme and flawless heptameter, at which you excel. I really enjoyed this one. Well worth reviving. Warm regards Dorothy xx
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Hi Nancy, what a great story poem. Very well written with some good internal rhyme and flawless heptameter, at which you excel. I really enjoyed this one. Well worth reviving. Warm regards Dorothy xx
Comment Written 21-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Thanks for the thoughtful review and generous stars Dorothy. I am pleased you like the poem. I appreciate your support.
Have a wonderful day. :) Nancy
Comment from BeasPeas
Very, very well done, Nancy. A super story in a poem. Rhyming and flaw appear effortless. There were so many determined and strong women who settled the country. God bless them all. Marilyn
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Very, very well done, Nancy. A super story in a poem. Rhyming and flaw appear effortless. There were so many determined and strong women who settled the country. God bless them all. Marilyn
Comment Written 20-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Thank you for the lovely comments and stars Marilyn. I appreciate you support. Have a lovely day! :)Nancy
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Nan. I think I would have called this "The Ballad of the Cattle Queen" It is written in that mode, I think. Quite a rags to riches story, isn't it. Your rhymes are perfect.
Bless you, Nancy. Bob
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018
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Hi, Nan. I think I would have called this "The Ballad of the Cattle Queen" It is written in that mode, I think. Quite a rags to riches story, isn't it. Your rhymes are perfect.
Bless you, Nancy. Bob
Comment Written 20-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018
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Thank you for the review and stars Bob. Maybe I should do that! Thanks.:)Nancy
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Can't hurt...:) Bob
Comment from Rachel Fawcett
Wow! What a wonderful story. The pioneers were so brave, especially the women who had few rights and little power back then. Your easy rhyme and flow pull the reader in. Please don't change anything it's perfect as it is. I love it.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018
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Wow! What a wonderful story. The pioneers were so brave, especially the women who had few rights and little power back then. Your easy rhyme and flow pull the reader in. Please don't change anything it's perfect as it is. I love it.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018
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Thank you very much for the six and the kind words Rachel. Have a lovely weekend. :) Nancy
Comment from Pantygynt
This is a great rags to riches tale. 'She' seems to have been one powerful woman. I enjoyed the instances of internal rhyme when they appeared but worried a bit about 'squirrelled away' because it places an extra syllable in the line. However I vaguely remember Tom (Treischel) once claiming that with his accent (Minnesota) he pronounced it as a single syllable. It never sounded right to me but there you go.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018
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This is a great rags to riches tale. 'She' seems to have been one powerful woman. I enjoyed the instances of internal rhyme when they appeared but worried a bit about 'squirrelled away' because it places an extra syllable in the line. However I vaguely remember Tom (Treischel) once claiming that with his accent (Minnesota) he pronounced it as a single syllable. It never sounded right to me but there you go.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018
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It seems I pronounce it the same as Tom. LOL I am often surprised at the difference in the way we talk but that always makes me smile. Love it actually! Have a great weekend and thanks for the review and stars Jim. :)Nancy
