Comment from frogbook

Excellent

Lovely and sad empathetic poem. Great for the contest and the saddest of losses. Best of luck with the vote. And my sympathy if this is biographical.

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016

I write from my heart...thanks for reading and the great review!!! much appreciated!!

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very well written poem. It has much compassion in it. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. Great wording and imagery. Good luck. Teri

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016

Thanks Teri,....always appreciate your reviews!!!! have a great day!!!

Comment from Susanne M. Psyris

Excellent

Good entry into the Empathy with Grief contest. Your rhythm and flow are very good. When you get to the fifth verse, you don't use rhyme at all (not even slant rhyme?). Just throws it off a wee-bit. Not too worrisome. Lovely words and good imagery. God bless and hugs, Susanne

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016

:-))) Susanne, i just started writing ..hmmmm 6 weeks ago....I have no idea what i'm doing!..lol slant rhyme??? that does sound cool!!! I'll google it! :-))) thanks for reading and the wonderful review!!!

reply by Susanne M. Psyris on 10-Jul-2016

Are you serious? Six weeks ago? Surely, you are playing me! You must have a natural talent for poetry. The work I have read thus far has been very good! God bless and hugs, Susanne

reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016

Truly Susanne, just started writing...been to afraid as i am dyslexic....but everyone here as been very nice...I've learned a lot...lol I have to google everything!!! don't know any of these poetry words!!!

reply by Susanne M. Psyris on 10-Jul-2016

well...congratulations for taking the first step in wetting your feet in the waters here at FS. You will find a lot of great writers and reviewers to help you in your journey. God bless and hugs, Susanne

reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016

I have!! You included! Lucky me!!..:-))

reply by Susanne M. Psyris on 10-Jul-2016

Thanks, honey. Keep writing, I'll keep reading. God bless and hugs, Susanne

reply by Anonymous Member on 12-Jul-2016

Are you serious? Six weeks ago? Surely, you are playing me! You must have a natural talent for poetry. The work I have read thus far has been very good! God bless and hugs, Susanne

reply by Anonymous Member on 13-Jul-2016

Thanks, honey. Keep writing, I'll keep reading. God bless and hugs, Susanne

reply by Anonymous Member on 15-Jul-2016

well...congratulations for taking the first step in wetting your feet in the waters here at FS. You will find a lot of great writers and reviewers to help you in your journey. God bless and hugs, Susanne

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

This was a tough poem to read. It has an emotional pull. A poem you read but feel so sad reading it. Very well written and touching.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016

Thank you for the review..yes, tough subject...written from the heart..

Comment from RiseRutland

Excellent

Such a sweet piece! I can't imagine the level of grief that a parent feels at the loss of a child. Thank you so much for sharing, and good luck in the contest!

I wanted to point out the last line in the third stanza. It says "With one one to blame". Perhaps you meant "With no one to blame"?

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016

thank you for the review and correction!!! ..(ugh dyslexic)....so thanks!!!